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The Black Statue

Hi people! This is my first attempt at making a story! Hope you like it and leave suggestive comments on it! Probably, with more feedback from all of you, I can improve!

The Black Statue

Hi people! This is my first attempt at making a story! Hope you like it and leave suggestive comments on it! Probably, with more feedback from all of you, I can improve! This is Lord Handel Gothika. He and his wife moved out of their old neighborhood after the death of his grandparents. They found a nice peaceful home in the country, in a place called "Thirteen Rocks." He is determined to start a new life in his new home. This is Handel's wife, Lady Vanessa. She is a very wonderful wife, and determined to start over much like her husband. She is barren, so she's not able to produce a child for her and her family. So, seeing no other way, they both agreed to adopt a young boy. This is their adopted son, and they named him Francis. The adoption center told them that nobody wanted to adopt him. What was their reason? Well, they were told that this boy is not normal. He, according to the workers at the adoption center, has a mysterious aura surrounding him. This is the house that the Gothika Family bought. Small and simple, and a very big swimmable sea. One night, Lady Vanessa spotted Francis seemingly dancing by the front door of their house. After which, he started talking to himself, or so it seems he was talking to himself. After dinner, Lady Vanessa called Francis out on the balcony and inquired of him on what he was doing by the front entrance a while ago. "Francis, I don't know if I saw things right, but I thought I saw you a while ago dancing and talking to yourself. Can you tell me just what you were doing?," Lady Vanessa asked of Francis. "Oh that, mom? Well, as you see, I have no friends back at the adoption center. All of the children ran away from me. They think I was weird, or 'different' from all normal people..." "...But, when I went out a while ago to get some fresh air, that statue seemed to talk to me. I knew from the beginning she is not like those other children..." Francis replied in wonder. "So we talked and talked, and then we got to know each other..." "Oh really? What was her name?" Lady Vanessa sounded worried. She knew something was going on, and she did not like it one bit. Not at all. "She said her name was Leila, and that she has long lived here. She said that she would like to be my friend. She has also experienced the loneliness I have felt. She also said that she is about 17 - 18 years old, and that she was a descendant of the Laxia Clan... Mom, what's the Laxia Clan?" Francis asked curiously. "The Laxia Clan? Son, don't disappont yourself with those childish fantasies of yours. To tell you the truth, there is no such thing as the Laxia Clan..." Lady Vanessa replied. "...You should understand that I am not forbidding you to play make-believe, but just don't take them too seriously. It is one thing to play, and a much different thing to believe in an imaginary world of your own..." Lady Vanessa's voice trailed off... Francis just nodded in agreement, not wanting to argue anymore. But deep down, he knew that there was indeed a Laxia Clan, and that the statue is real... to him. For the next few weeks, Francis continued to think about his newfound friend, and the Laxia Clan. He daydreamed about it for hours on end. Truth be told, Lady Vanessa was becoming more worried as her son continued on dwelling in his "make-believe" world. But, she was worried for a different reason. One night, Lord Handel was startled to see Lady Vanessa "talking" to the statue. Lady Vanessa didn't notice him right away and said, "Why? What are you doing to my son? I thought you will finally let us live in peace? I though you promised? It wasn't my fault that..." Lady Vanessa suddenly stopped. She turned and met the face of her husband. She immediately became worried. "Please, don't tell me you heard all that I said... It's not what you think..." She worriedly pleaded. "What... what are you doing? Yes, I heard all you said... about some promise... I... I can't believe it, really... I... I... uh, let's just forget it. You may be just stressed out. Come on, let's go inside and rest." Lord Handel said. "Come on, it's all right.. I don't think you're out of your mind. I still love you the way you are." Lord Handel said, comforting his wife. "Come on, let's go inside. It's getting late." That same night, Francis was sleeping when a voice beckoned him come... "Francis... Francis... Leila's here... Let's come play tonight so your mother won't disturb us... Francis... Wake up Francis..." The voice seemed to hypnotize Francis awake. He stood up, and went outside. And saw a lady on the bridge. "Come Francis... Come... Let's play..." "...Let's play MAKE-BELIEVE..." To Be Continued...


Hope you enjoyed my first story.

Custom items can all be found in modthesims2.com

Special thanks to estatica for encouraging me to write my first story...!

The Black Statue

Apr 9, 2007 by Alyosha
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    78 Comment(s) posted so far

    On Apr 9, 2007 estatica wrote:

    Oh, I am so glad to see your story on the frontpage! The story is absolutely wonderful. From the set, to the custom content you used, everything falls into place. Francis is very intriguing, as well as the statue! Great job! \:rah\:

    On Apr 9, 2007 greeksim wrote:

    Amazing story! Thanks...

    On Apr 9, 2007 monmel wrote:

    Very good story \:D Can`t wait for next part \:D

    On Apr 9, 2007 btmctm wrote:

    Oh, I love stories with a touch of magic! (sorry for my bad english \:D )

    On Apr 9, 2007 Uroboros07 wrote:

    Interesting!\:\) Can't wait for the next part. Thank you!

    On Apr 9, 2007 Alyosha wrote:

    Hi! Thanks to all those who have read and/or commented already! I will drop by in each of your guestbooks to personally thank you! (That's a promise!) UPDATE: Part two HAS ALREADY BEEN PUBLISHED... talk about fast!... but I can guarantee that part three will be a little longer waiting... \;\)

    On Apr 9, 2007 zmd439 wrote:

    nice story!

    On Apr 9, 2007 fallenangelohio wrote:

    Great~ Can't wait to see the rest! I liked the background and the special effects.\:P

    On Apr 9, 2007 SweetLeilani0429 wrote:

    Great Story \:\)

    On Apr 9, 2007 Mistress Useless wrote:

    \:D \:D

    On Apr 9, 2007 Nyell wrote:

    Cool! I loved it! Can't wait for the next part!\:D

    On Apr 9, 2007 NO mach wrote:

    Great job, brother! \:D Too bad I cant blurt out what's gonna happen at part 2! \;\)

    On Apr 9, 2007 Alyosha wrote:

    UPDATE: The cover for the second part has already been posted in my profile! Take a look at it if you want to have a gist or idea of what's gonna happen at part two! Thanks to everyone who have read this so far! \:rah\:

    On Apr 9, 2007 PatPB wrote:

    Very readable and all of the sudden it ends... it makes you want more! \:rah\: Great job.

    On Apr 9, 2007 blueclarity25 wrote:

    I was so excited to see your story on the front page! When you told me you had written a story the other day, I was really looking forward to reading it! This was an excellent first story, you have a natural knack for writing and captivating an audience. I love the mysterious eerie feeling that you kept up through out the entire tale. I wonder what makes this boy "not normal" and who the girl in the statue is... Great title page and beautiful gothic home too. I can't wait to read the next part! 5.0!\:rah\:

    On Apr 9, 2007 german84 wrote:

    Well. Being myself a fan of Estatica's stories, you did preety well in this one. Indeed some houses have deep secrets of their own, and fewer people are willing to unveil them. Your characters and the environment are very convincing, and that is actualy a three-quarters of the work required for a great story; The remaining part, is your great script. Congratulations, and Good Luck!!

    On Apr 9, 2007 rchris_ness wrote:

    I liked it. I can't wait to find out what happens next.

    On Apr 9, 2007 charlotteisgreat wrote:

    kwl luved it \:\)

    On Apr 9, 2007 dianachan wrote:

    Very good story ^^

    On Apr 9, 2007 sweetheartwva wrote:

    \:rah\: That was Great movie.!

    On Apr 9, 2007 floydine wrote:

    Fantastic story! I can't wait to read more!\:rah\:

    On Apr 9, 2007 simonita wrote:

    really great work\:D, you are really good in taking the right pictures for your scenes and in story telling\:\)

    On Apr 9, 2007 sims4me wrote:

    Oooh, interesting! :P

    On Apr 9, 2007 Saffronzoe wrote:

    The house was great. Well done on your first story.\:rah\:

    On Apr 9, 2007 Little Seer wrote:

    Interesting story, looking forward to more. Cheers, \:\)

    On Apr 9, 2007 princess781 wrote:

    nice story! can't wait for the next part.

    On Apr 9, 2007 Meemo wrote:

    GREAT SHOTS!!

    On Apr 10, 2007 kidnumber48 wrote:

    Why does Lady Vanessa not have the statue taken away if it annoys her so much? I can see you have put some thought into your first story. It reminds me of that song by Kirsty MacColl 'Roman Garden'.\:rah\:

    On Apr 10, 2007 Liesanne wrote:

    I really enjoyed reading your story. Great pictures! I'm curious what happens next \:\)

    On Apr 10, 2007 ukiyo wrote:

    Thanks for sharing your story! Entertaining and what a beautiful house that is!

    On Apr 10, 2007 slime wrote:

    WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO VERY GOOD 5 POINTS WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO \:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Apr 10, 2007 scarlet_white wrote:

    Yeah I like the weird ambience, something between spooky and cute, very mysterious, I wonder what's with the lady. The boy is so cool, he is not a childish type of boy

    On Apr 10, 2007 Funicci629 wrote:

    \:rah\: \:wub\:

    On Apr 10, 2007 atangki wrote:

    thank you! it's great.. reall. I hope you make the story long. I'll be waiting for the other parts. I expect they'll be good. \:D

    On Apr 10, 2007 atangki wrote:

    oops.. i missed a "y". hahah. \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Apr 10, 2007 gothiclynn wrote:

    Wow .. really great story ..can't wait to hear what happens next !\:wub\:

    On Apr 10, 2007 Alyosha wrote:

    Hi everyone! Thanks for the very wonderful feedback! I have already begun part 3, and you can see the coverpage of parts 2 and 3 on my profile! \:rah\: \:D

    On Apr 10, 2007 cariadbach wrote:

    A brilliant first story. Keep up the good work.\:rah\:

    On Apr 10, 2007 dannybond1990 wrote:

    Awsome. Not bad for your first try!\:rah\:

    On Apr 10, 2007 wrote:

    Nice first try! I really enjoyed it, and can't wait for the next part!

    On Apr 10, 2007 Nono_Girl wrote:

    I enjoyed it alright!It was great!Keep it on!It is perfect the way it is!Don't change a thing!\:rah\:

    On Apr 10, 2007 josh1092 wrote:

    That is that lot in downtown. I've seen it before. I wonder what else he finds out. 5.0\:rah\:

    On Apr 10, 2007 eshuff wrote:

    VERY good story. Fantastic screenshots and material! Keep it up! I know most of us who write here, the feedback is the difference between continuing and quitting. So don't quit!\:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Apr 11, 2007 MoriaG wrote:

    .?:*¨¨*:?.SUPER.?:*¨¨*:?.STORY.?:*¨¨*:?.GREAT.?:*¨¨*:?.PERFECT.?:*¨¨*:?.

    On Apr 11, 2007 Devalyn wrote:

    A mysterious story - I loved it! \:D

    On Apr 11, 2007 Devalyn wrote:

    Whoops, forgot to rate - sorry! \:\)

    On Apr 11, 2007 tesasims wrote:

    \:wub\: \:wub\: \:rah\: \:wub\: \:wub\:

    On Apr 11, 2007 drewsoltesz wrote:

    A very good first effort indeed! Your pics and the angles they are taken are great! \:\)

    On Apr 11, 2007 WordCobbler wrote:

    Very good story. \:\) Interesting characters both visually and written. \:\) 5/5

    On Apr 11, 2007 cat_on_a_mountain wrote:

    just love it!javascript:smilie('\:D');

    On Apr 11, 2007 caracolin wrote:

    amazing ^^ I want to know what's the end >.<
    thanks \;\)

    On Apr 11, 2007 Tranett wrote:

    Cool I like it!!!\:rah\:

    On Apr 12, 2007 fizz bomb wrote:

    Ohh interesting runs off to read part 2

    On Apr 12, 2007 dogz wrote:

    wow! great story!\:rah\:

    On Apr 12, 2007 tishaqua wrote:

    Wow!!! Brilliant first story can't wait fo part 2\:rah\:

    On Apr 13, 2007 KatCat wrote:

    Nice way to break for the next chapter. Well done! \:\)

    On Apr 13, 2007 DIDA wrote:

    Great!!!!nice dresses......^_^!!!!\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\: 5.0!!!!!

    On Apr 19, 2007 Sun34Rikush wrote:

    mystirious and unique \:cool\:

    On Apr 19, 2007 baconhead91 wrote:

    yay i liked it!

    On Apr 28, 2007 Just2cute wrote:

    No comment, in other news, that was really good

    Hoping 4 more,
    Just2Cute

    On Jun 11, 2007 Meemo wrote:

    Fab looking house!!

    On Jun 24, 2007 Elisa G wrote:

    Cool! \:\)

    On Jun 27, 2007 kaylafrie wrote:

    Nice!\:wub\:

    On Aug 1, 2007 Kikowiko wrote:

    Thanks for writing!!
    I love reading your stories!!

    On Aug 1, 2007 albaby wrote:

    VERY INTERESTING.\:rah\:

    On Aug 16, 2007 andi and grim wrote:

    cool \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Oct 17, 2007 lildebbye75 wrote:

    I'm sorry it took me so long to start your story, that was great. Very mysterious, I'm headed to read the next chapter now. Great job and to think it was your first story, excellent job.

    On Oct 21, 2007 ila73 wrote:

    \:\)interesing story\:\)

    On Feb 14, 2008 Leia699 wrote:

    Cool! Very gripping!\;\)

    On Feb 25, 2008 lynbo wrote:

    mysterious, makes you want more\:confused\:

    On Feb 27, 2008 Taleco wrote:

    Gostei da História!

    On Mar 22, 2008 mccurdysim wrote:

    I really liked it can't wait to see part 2\:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Mar 29, 2008 twinkletoe wrote:

    Great ending!!\:D I really liked reading it!!\:wub\:

    On Apr 16, 2008 catobi85 wrote:

    Great story!!\:D

    On Sep 9, 2008 charray wrote:

    Great story! \:rah\:

    On Jan 4, 2009 mpatton wrote:

    Great story. I just started reading it. I love "gothic" style stories and this one looks really interesting. I'm going to read the other parts now. Thank you for this story.\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Jan 5, 2009 fairydust0524 wrote:

    I really liked your story. I cant wait to read the other parts of it.

    On Aug 5, 2009 Guslucky wrote:

    Good. i like the whole story!

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