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The forces between good and evil have always existed. From Darth Vadar and Luke Skywalker, to Superman and Lex Luthor. For every blindingly good force, there is an evil dark side not so secretly plotting to take over the world. But what happens when the evil outways the good? What happens when nobody does anything? Will the evil force succeed in ruling the world? Or will a new, good force, stand up and fight for the little guy?......

The forces between good and evil have always existed. From Darth Vadar and Luke Skywalker, to Superman and Lex Luthor. For every blindingly good force, there is an evil dark side not so secretly plotting to take over the world. But what happens when the evil outways the good? What happens when nobody does anything? Will the evil force succeed in ruling the world? Or will a new, good force, stand up and fight for the little guy?...... "Can...uhh I get you anything?" Henry nervously asked the female customer that usually came in around this time. She usually declined everything Henry offered and would continue reading her book, but she seemed different this time. "Would I be able to get a coffee?" she smiled slightly.
"Sure, I'll be right back"
Henry came back with her coffee in less than a minute. He carefully placed it on the table, his boss would never forgive him if he broke another coffee cup. He smiled at her and continued to serve some more customers. After his shift ended Henry usually headed over to his mother's house for dinner. "You make me feel bad, always feeding me like this"
"Well Henry, if I don't feed you how am I supposed to know you're getting fed?"
"I eat." Henry said as he stuffed another mouthful of mashed patato into is mouth. "You always look so thin" his mother smiled sweetly, not wanting to offend. "Well I guess I'll just have to keep coming round here for dinner" he announced while he chased a rogue pea all around his plate then ate it, feeling victorious. His mother stood up slowly and started clearing the table. "Oh don't do that all yourself, let me help, it's the least I can do" Henry offered. "Of course not! I'll clean up, I don't mind. Besides I know how clutsy you are, you're more likely to break my plates than help" she smiled as she picked up his plate and kissed him on the forehead. "So...any cute girls at work?" she asked. "Gee mum, you're subtle" Henry joked. "Nope not really......well...." he started thinking. "Well?" his mum asked as she drained the sink and turned around to sit back down. "She's not really at work, but she's at work..." He paused making sure his sentence made sense. "So she's a customer??" she asked catching on fast. "Yeah, she's a customer, a umm regular customer" he said carefully. "Have you talked to her? Well other than take her order?" she asked full of hope. "Umm no...not really, I mean it's a bit hard to talk to her when her nose is always in a book"
"Oh, well I think you should talk to her, maybe about her book or something. You could ask her out on a date?" "Yeah....I don't know, I can barely talk around her" he told his mum. "Oh my little boy! You really like her don't you?" she asked getting excited. "Yes mum, I like her..." he sighed. She jumped up out of her chair, and hugged him as hard as she could. "I'm just saying I like her, not that we're getting married or anything"
"Must you always squash my dreams of grandchildren?"
"I'm sorry mum, I didn't mean to--"
"I've been waiting for you to get married for 28 years" she said more to herself than to Henry.
"You've been waiting for me to get married since I was a baby?" he asked.
"Well I'm you're mother aren't I?" she beamed. "Yes you're my mother" Henry smiled as he stood and hugged her. "I have to get going now, it's getting late. I'll be round in the morning if you like, to help you with your gardening" he offered. "I'd love that Henry. But promise me you'll talk to this nice young lady" she told him. Henry rolled his eyes, but changed his expression to serious "I promise mum I will." Meanwhile on the other side of town...."I hope this works" he said talking to himself as he placed the precious vile into his machine for analysis. "Dan! You down here?" came an all to familiar sweet harmonic voice, that was wearing thin on his tolerance. "Oh come on" she whined "You promised we'd go out tonight". Dan huffed, which made Jacque pout. "You know the whole world doesn't stop just because you want to go out, I'm on the verge for the cure for cancer. Do you know how huge that is?" he asked. Jacque thought about it for a minute "So, who cares, why do you have to be the one to cure people from losing their hair?" she asked with clearly no understanding of what cancer is, and probably never will. "I'm not curing hair loss, I'm curing the disease 'cancer' people only lose their hair from cancer because of the chemo they undergo, which in fact poisons them and destroys their rapid growing cells, like the cancer and hair cells. I don't even know why I'm explaining this to you--" Dan finished getting rather annoyed. "I'm not stupid Dan!" she squealed. "You know just because I'm like...not as smart as you, doesn't mean you have to constantly put me down!" she pouted. "Oh well I'm sorry then, I didn't know you had such an understanding of cancer cells and chemo" Dan replied sarcasm thick in his tone. "Kemo? Don't you mean kermit? I have no idea what a frog has to do with anything Dan. Can't we just go out??" she whined as she finished her sentence. "yeah that's exactly what I was talking about, Kermit the frog" Dan muttered under his breath. "What did you say honey?" Jacque asked. "I uhh said let's go out" Dan sighed. "Oh yay!! Goodie!!!" Jacque squealed, jumping up and down clapping her hands. "It's not like cancer research can't wait, it's not urgent or anything" Dan said with a lot of sarcasm. "Oh Dan!" Jacque cooed "You're so funny!" "Do you want to go or not?" Dan asked with hostility. "Of course! Sweetie!" she beamed. "Well then hurry up." and with that they left... "Oh Mittens!! You poor little thing! I'm sorry I left you here all by yourself" Henry apologized to his newly acquired kitten. Henry proceeded to feed his kitten, and dote upon Mittens as if he were a child. Playing with him as he chased around stuffed mice, and played with his tinker ball. As the night drew on Mittens fell asleep on Henry's comfy bed. Henry got changed and took off his round glasses, to snuggle into his covers and enjoy his slumber that was often riddled with dreams of his regular customer....

Good Vs. Evil: Chapter 1

Jun 30, 2009 by clairepitts1994
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    25 Comment(s) posted so far

    On Jul 1, 2009 Jennifer_R wrote:

    It's a good start, I like that there's two different stories within this story. Will their lives come together in the end somehow, I wonder? \:\)

    On Jul 1, 2009 stephanie1225 wrote:

    Absolutly excellent, I love reading your stories \:D

    On Jul 1, 2009 Mangio wrote:

    \:wub\: love the start. i wonder whos the goodie goodie and whos the bad guy...cant wait how the story unfolds

    On Jul 1, 2009 maxi king wrote:

    \:wub\:nice start!Like it a lot!\:wub\:

    On Jul 1, 2009 catsandbooks wrote:

    Good beginning! I am interested to read more. \:\)

    On Jul 1, 2009 urm0m wrote:

    I love this:P

    On Jul 1, 2009 smiley00girl wrote:

    Amazing start! Can't wait for more! \:D \:D

    On Jul 1, 2009 liberty wrote:

    Nice when is chapter 2?????

    On Jul 1, 2009 fredbrenny wrote:

    Yeay! I guess Henry and Dan are identical... Henry with his kitten is the good one and Dan is the Bad one...uh..maybe I'm wrong! Therefor...Can't WAIT for the next chapter! 5.0!:P

    On Jul 1, 2009 spitzmagic wrote:

    Claire, that sure is a good start...i'm lovin it   \:rah\:

    On Jul 1, 2009 candy820 wrote:

    \:D A very nice start! Waiting for part2.\:D

    On Jul 1, 2009 kanzen wrote:

    it's gonna be the opposite of what we're expecting...XD and the opposite of that LOL confusing you much? I love how you avoided showing Dan's face =] can't wait for the next!

    On Jul 1, 2009 Laubhaufenxp wrote:

    i can't wait for the next \:wub\:

    On Jul 1, 2009 fabrizioammollo wrote:

    Good intro! \:\)

    On Jul 2, 2009 fionaivri wrote:

    Aw I love Mttens the Kitten! Brilliant story- as usual! Can't wait for more!

    On Jul 5, 2009 Sweetie224player wrote:

    Who is the bad guy in the story?
    Ohh...I think is Dan. I don't know from his science but in the screen of his lab, I think is DNA picture...Again I don't know very well science...

    On Jul 6, 2009 madkitty13 wrote:

    More More More!

    On Jul 7, 2009 WandaJBowen wrote:

    Good Job! This story is really good. I can't wait to read more. \:rah\:

    On Jul 7, 2009 charray wrote:

    Very good story \:\) \:rah\:

    On Jul 10, 2009 omik79 wrote:

    YAY always love reading your stories\;\)  On to the next part hehe \:\)

    On Jul 17, 2009 joker52455 wrote:

    Nice intro; I love the nosy mom (reminds me so much of my mom) and the contrast of the two main characters' behaviors from the beginning. The only critique is the names: Dan and Henry? Soooo original! lol jk Rating: \:rah\:

    On Feb 27, 2010 artsysimaddict wrote:

    Oooh...interesting. I love it! I wonder what's up with the 'regular customer'? I really like Henry. I'm curious about..."Dan". Heading to part 2

    On Oct 29, 2010 oldmember_gip-k wrote:

    I know you probably get this a lot, but Henry looks a LOT like Harry Potter. =3 Anyway, I'm a bit curious to what happens next- to how Dan, who is apparently trying to cure cancer at the time- actually ends up turning evil (I assume he turns evil)?

    On Dec 13, 2010 dsrhnry wrote:

    love it. you have a real great style for making each story so exciting to where you can't wait for the next chapter. Your camera work is amazing, you make each picture so realistic.

    On Oct 21, 2011 tcancel wrote:

    execellent start moving on to ch 2 right now

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