The Orchid Seduction
It was just an ordinary late night in my office. The lamp that was part of my mother's inheritance, some kind of a heirloom, was providing me enough light to carry on solving the cases of my clients. While I was working, the rain drops were sliding on the windows in my office and making that monotonous noise you always hear when it's pouring rain.
The ordinary day just turned unusual. While I was sleeping, probably crashed on the Linscott's case, somebody knocked on the front door. So with my sleepy eyes, I struggled to say just one "Come in", and not to give out the fact that I was sleeping. As the person entered, I couldn't belive my eyes, I thought that I was in some kind of a liquid dream.
But as the lady came closer, I was sure that it was her. And believe me, she was stunning. Her delicate face was protected by the sinful eyes cast upon her, by means of a veil, attached carefully on the hat decorated with peacock feathers. She was a major part of the mosaic of my life, part that was fundamental to my sole existence.
7 Years Before
Flamingo was the only night club in Paris, that was owned by an American. The neon lights were flooding Paris more than the constant rain in this period of the year. So it was Flamingo, the bright neon lights could be seen miles away from the place itself, but could not be recognized in the river of neon lights. It was that misty night that I decided to get out of the office and get a few drinks.
Flamingo's interior was covered in smoke, usually made by the cigarettes in the mouth of the visitor. As I inhaled the smoke made by the others, I personally disliked tobacco, the only thing that was on my mind was to get out of the dimmed room. So I went outside on the terrace to catch breath in my breathless lungs.
As I went out on the terrace overlooking the Eiffel Tower, a certain person that will become significant in my life, was standing on the rain all by herself. I found that loneliness very attractive, so I decided to appoach the black-haired lady wearing white trench, that gave contrast to the rainy night.
As I approached her, she turned round against my face. It was the only thing that she did that night while I was with her. She took a good glimpse of my soul, and ran towards the door that led in the club's main room. I often wonder why she ran like that, was is because of me or was there other issues beside myself?
After Couple Of Years
It seemed like ages since I saw the mysterious woman. At first I looked for her almost everywhere in Paris, but soon I gave up. As my time as bachelor was near it's limits, I starded to think about marrying. And like out of nowhere, my future-wife Lydia showed up in my life.
We were invited to a lavish party in up-scale Paris. So as the night took the throne over day, we went to the party with no expectations of it. I often ask myself if Lydia was the right person for me. For me the right person will allways be the lady from Flamingo. I had feelings for Lydia, don't get me wrong, but only because I was obliged to be loving and carring husband of hers.
I couldn't belive my eyes, she was here. Here, at the same party that I was invited, in the same lavish house where I was standing. She came near me, leant down on my shoulder and whispered on my ear - My name is Sylvanna. The white satin was all over my face as I stood on the black marble stairs. I wanted to be the pearls that were on her neck, pearls that were by her side anywhere she went. And, then she told me to follow her.
As every fool in love, I bowed down to the rules she made me do. Like her shadow I followed her to the place she went. It was a private bathroom, black and white, as was she - white satin, raven hair. And then out of nowhere, she kissed me.
Although I enjoyed the kiss, I knew that this was sinful. So I showed her my wedding ring, and in the black and white tiled bathroom, I told her that we shouldn't do this. I never imagined doing this, pushing away my true love. And I kept asking myself, was she my true love, was Sylvanna the true woman for me?
I saw her starring at my gold ring, her reflection was upon it. As if she didn't understand the marriage issue. I never imagined using the ring as a weapon to avoid sins, but yet do never say never. Like she stared at my ring, I stared on her valuable pearls, and I asked myself again if I wanted to be those pearls again? Nevertheless, I left the room with second thoughts.
Mean while, Sylvanna was standing in front of the mirror, resembling the Evil Queen of the Snowhite tale. And she was form of the Queen itself, making a fatal plan concerning Lydia. Beautiful, but cruel reflection was cast upon the mirror in the black and white harmony created by the tiles and Sylvanna's appearance.
Sylvanna, the hostess of the party took Lydia on a tour round the mansion, taking her on the highest floor. She waited for Lydia to come close to the fence of the stairs, part of the plan she had made, while she was in the bath. While looking down, Lydia felt like someone was standing behind of her. And it was true, Sylvanna did stand behind her, so with her delicate arms, Sylvanna pushed Lydia down the fence. Lydia didn't even had the time to scream, but she remmembered Sylvanna's face.
While Lydia was falling down, Sylvanna had the face of a content citizen. The echo of Lydia's scream scared the guests that were enjoying the wine and cheese made especially for the party. In a few seconds the body was found, she still had pulse. One of the guests had a car, and took Lydia to the hospital, certainly part that was not expected of Syvanna.
Back to the present
As she opened the door to my office, Sylvanna said these words - Meet me tonight at midnight at place where you first met me. As soon as she said these words, she left, slamming the door and breaking the monotony of the song of the night rain. Flamingo, was the only word that was in my mind. I knew I had to be there this midnight.
I leaned on the window to see her precious face once again, but the black-leather heels were the only thing I saw. I stood there many seconds afterwards, but I was not standing still in my mind. I imagined myself chasing her in the dark alleys of Paris, not to lose her once again. At this point I didn't have any second thoughts, I was preapared to commit a sin.
My wife Lydia survived the accident, but the accident left her paralysed and she couldn't speak no more. I still cared for her, although she was in wheelchair and haven't spoken a still word in ages. Nobody found out what happened to her, not even I.
I came back home to change my clothes and take some money. It was certain that I was going out this night. I could see that my wife Lydia was expecting me, I really did get home late. I couldn't stand looking in her eyes, like she had known that I was not staying home this night. I told her that I was going out this night, and as quickly as I can I left the apartment.
The Same Night
The sky was crying, as the femme fatale was standing in the same place seven years ago. She looked upon the stars, and the grand Eiffel Tower, a marvelous piece of steel. Sylvanna finally got what she wanted, her love. Her greatest love of all.
I came late, worring that she had already left. But here she was, standing in the same position as she stood seven years ago, bending over the same marble fence, overlooking the Eiffel Tower. I knew that what was I going to do was a sin, but nothing in this world could've stopped me from doing this.
The rain continued to drop, the sky continued to cry, and I wraped my arms around the only woman I had ever loved, Sylvanna. I wasn't the perfect creature, and sure not the purest. I was between the bad and the good, I was a sinner. Sylvanna dressed in the purest blue, looked like the perfect creature fallen from the sky, a some kind of a fallen angel.
Was it the seduction of the orchid necklace, or was the glitter in her eyes, I said yes to her plan. A deadly plan such as a femme fatale would do, a plan to make our relationship legal. The plan was for her to become my wife's nurse and eventually kill my wife Lydia. It was the only way to make our relationship legal. I wish now that I said no to her fatal plan.
The Next Morning
Lydia looked at me with her sleepy eyes, as I told her that I hired a nurse to help her. She stood still and said nothing, but she looked at me like she knew what was I going to do. It was matter of seconds, when Sylvanna was supposed to enter the bedroom.
And here she was dressed as a nurse, Sylvanna entered my wife's bedroom, Lydia and I were sleeping in separate bedrooms for several years. Sylvanna was a real orchid among the ordinary flowers, a pearl among the rough rocks. Deadly like the cobra's venom, she entered the room.
The second Sylvanna entered, my wife Lydia, looked at my face as if she was frightened. Lydia was screaming, at that point I didn't know why, but I know the truth now. In matter of months Lydia's soul left the Earth, Sylvanna made the murder look like an accident. And I still question myself, was it the seduction of the orchid necklace or was it the glitter in Sylvanna's eyes, that made me agree to the fatal plan of my soul.
The End
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On Oct 3, 2006 rchris_ness wrote:
The pictures are lovely.
On Oct 3, 2006 CASSIA238 wrote:
Wow! What a story!
I hope you write more in the future!
Awsome job!
On Oct 3, 2006 Miyu-Tenshi wrote:
Now talk about a well thought out story! Love the detective style of this story!! Very great job!! Thanks for sharing! Awesome story!!
On Oct 4, 2006 SweetLeilani0429 wrote:
That was one of the best stories i have read. A job well done
On Oct 4, 2006 nea200pl wrote:
Wow! Your story is absolutely suberb!
I love black and white pictures, scenery, clothes, sims and mostly 20s/30s well done mystery. 
Your way of writing is great and I hope you will submitt more stories soon! Five stars from me! 
On Oct 4, 2006 MandyMands wrote:
This is by far the best story I've read on here! I always wanted to make a detective story, but it wouldn't have been nearly as good as this! Can I ask where the tower came from? A wonderfully made piece of work, 10 pts!
On Oct 4, 2006 andradasasha wrote:
Wow i must say that this is the best story that i have read until now!good job!
On Oct 4, 2006 miagirl340 wrote:
I love the old black and white story,I love the story!
On Oct 4, 2006 wrote:
The best story on here period. When I read it I thought I was reading a novel, not a sim story. The pictures are great, I love how you gave it that old-fashioned white and black. You really did do a great job!
On Oct 4, 2006 lia2223 wrote:
The pictures were amazing and the plot was great. This is a Good Story!
On Oct 4, 2006 pepp_pattie wrote:
On Oct 4, 2006 kkffoo wrote:
Lots of imagination shown, in the story and the setting. Another great villainess, well done!.
On Oct 4, 2006 greeksim wrote:
Very good
On Oct 4, 2006 wrote:
well done i liked it alot 4.5/5 from me
On Oct 4, 2006 cloisonne wrote:
Very impressive,you certainly have a talent for creating wonderful Stories.I loved the theme,story layout and the beautiful pictures.
On Oct 4, 2006 evi wrote:
Spectacular story! You are an artist! Great idea the black and white, gives your story an awesome atmosphere!
On Oct 4, 2006 Crystalstar wrote:
This is one of the first black and white stories I'e seen.
On Oct 4, 2006 annicia wrote:
I loved it. Very beautiful pictures and well thought out plot. Thank you!
On Oct 4, 2006 cireking213 wrote:
This is the most stylish story I have ever seen. I'm inspired. Cool Noir.
On Oct 5, 2006 Brunettechick445 wrote:
Awesome! I love the balck and white pictures. Keep it up.
On Oct 5, 2006 Brunettechick445 wrote:
Awesome! I love the balck and white pictures. Keep it up.
On Oct 5, 2006 mom4peace wrote:
Excellent, well thought out and executed
On Oct 5, 2006 wrote:
Creepy but excellent.
On Oct 5, 2006 carol84 wrote:
On Oct 5, 2006 wrote:
Wow that is a great story, I love the pictures, they look wonderful. Thankyou so much for sharing.
On Oct 5, 2006 babsbunny72 wrote:
that was really neat i love the pics
On Oct 5, 2006 Buckeye428 wrote:
Not much I can say that hasn't already been said. Great story and great use of effects in this story. Excellent job.
On Oct 5, 2006 wrote:
cool pics
On Oct 5, 2006 gulbet wrote:
brilliant story
always love the black & white effect on pictures.i felt every bit of the story.
On Oct 5, 2006 Little Seer wrote:
Very well done. I could swear I could hear Humphrey Bogart narrating the entire story in my head. Cheers!
On Oct 5, 2006 TheMistress666 wrote:
What a brilliant story! and i loved the black and white effect, you spent a lot of time with this and boy does it show! 5/5!!
On Oct 5, 2006 snidertree wrote:
On Oct 5, 2006 Buckeye428 wrote:
After a second read I noticed how well you wrote the actual story. The camera angles and effects were well thought out, but what caught me most was your writing, especially your use of adjectives. The language used complimented the black and white screen with words like "satin" and "devilish." It gave me a deeper sense of the character's personality and struggles. The sets were also well done. In one of the first photos I liked how some blinds were halfway down and some were all the way down. It gave the room a messy and dreary feel, that set up the rest of the story nicely. Wonderful job on all aspects of it.
On Oct 6, 2006 wrote:
Loved it, it was so descriptive and so...good.
On Oct 6, 2006 wrote:
That was AMAZING!
The description and angles were so expressive. Reminded me of Sin City a bit. Please, please, please write more like this! I wish I could give you more that 5, you deserve it.
On Oct 6, 2006 DIDA wrote:
Great and artistic story!Congrats!
Fantastic the black and white atmosphere!
On Oct 6, 2006 aurid wrote:
Excellent story!Thanks
On Oct 6, 2006 Sunair wrote:
Wow! what a story with very characristic style, love the black and white image, they bring such wonderful feeling to the story, well dong
you are really talented!
On Oct 6, 2006 filizk wrote:
Awesome, brilliant. You are gifted. I hope you make more stories.
On Oct 6, 2006 wrote:
A mystery oh how good.
On Oct 7, 2006 busmusen wrote:
Wonderful, love the black and white pictures the really sets the perfect mood for the story.....
On Oct 7, 2006 evi wrote:
Since it is the third time you invited me to comment on your story although I had done it already, I say that it was a really good story
AGAIN!
On Oct 7, 2006 jaojao wrote:
Cool this black-white style.
30's perhaps? or rather 40's? (Reminds me to Al Capone and his age)
l love those weather and atmosphere affects (smoke and rain) they look fantastic, making the story lively.
Gorgeous camera angles and picture cutting/editing - that I MUST mention, because it seems to me that it's one of your stoutnesses
It's like an old film from the age of Ingrid Bergman and Humphrey Bogart somehow a little bit of Casablanca-feeling (not the story, but the atmosphere)
My personal favourte is the pic 'As she opened the door to my office, Sylvanna said these words - Meet me tonight..............' - sinful words from the sinful lips - the cutting and the pic has such a range of expression.
So I just love this story!
On Oct 7, 2006 evi wrote:
Also I have to add that most of us seeing the story we believed is brilliant but you dont
On Oct 7, 2006 sandybvv wrote:
wow!!!!!what a story!!! realy good!! amazing!!! i mean, wow and more wow..!!!!!! great pictures, great story, great scrip great everything!!!!
On Oct 7, 2006 slime wrote:
great story guess wat im givin u for ur rate if u guessed 5 points u r right
On Oct 7, 2006 veronica_234 wrote:
good story love the pics n i got ur message lol
On Oct 7, 2006 wrote:
WONDERFUL!! i am SOOOO your fan now.
On Oct 7, 2006 wrote:
you better write more to keep your fans!!lol
On Oct 7, 2006 difaren94 wrote:
Thats a five! Great Pictures! i loved the black and White!
I loved the wors you used it was really great.
One of the best stories i ever seen.
Keep it up!
On Oct 7, 2006 SimanthaRat wrote:
A wonderful example of Film Noir. Hard boiled narriative,a pulp fiction detective, complete with a femme fatale. Strong screen editing,truly excellent sets and lighting effects. First class all the way. I just loved it.
On Oct 7, 2006 netza wrote:
Really cool!
On Oct 7, 2006 Nikouchoco wrote:
Pfiuu ! An amazing story !
The pics are marvelous ! And the colors of black and white are perfect for such an ambiance ! 5 points ! BRAVO !! 
On Oct 7, 2006 wrote:
it's awesome...i really liked it...u'r very good at making sories...kepp writing
On Oct 7, 2006 LilyoftheValleyICE wrote:
Wow! Such an amazing story. I love how it's different from everything else on here, what with the black and white photos and your way of writing. I love that time period too and the way they talked in the movies that took place then. I think you reflected that time wonderfully. I think your choice of words really made this story great as well, such as your repetition of the word "sin", which really cemented the fact that he knew what he was doing was wrong, but he wanted it anyway. Good job! ^^
On Oct 7, 2006 wrote:
AMAZING!
On Oct 7, 2006 KayR247 wrote:
I like the mood of your story it seems very well thought out.You have some really great pictures.It really is a fantastic story and I look forward to reading more of them
On Oct 7, 2006 lmfjaxxon wrote:
BRAVO!
This story needs to be 10 *'s!
, love
, love
your story! Keep up the good work and Please, pretty PLEASE make a part 2!
OMG! I'm glad that you asked me to read your story! I am a sucker for Black and white movies! No, I'm not old but I do have an old soul and I really love
-LaTasha
(lmfjaxxon)
On Oct 7, 2006 Misamichan wrote:
I love pictures in B/W!
Very good scenes and story!
On Oct 7, 2006 lilredkat wrote:
On Oct 8, 2006 simbasmykitty wrote:
Great period story! I love how the pictures were in black and white to set the mood. Great job!
On Oct 8, 2006 senstih wrote:
I give you 5
I love the story,all the details, and the black and white pictures! You did an amazing job 
Keep up the good work 
On Oct 8, 2006 Misamichan wrote:
uh i've forgot to rate this story!
i give you 5!!
Compliments!!
On Oct 8, 2006 wrote:
This is a fantastic story, the setting which you have set is very mysterious which intrigues the reader to go on, it is not just the fantastic screen shots that kept my attention. This really is a great story, and I hope that you create some more for us all to enjoy!
On Oct 8, 2006 neels wrote:
Great story with great pictures. You work hard on this one.
On Oct 8, 2006 darqstar wrote:
The scenery was fantastic and it was a good trick making it black and white. Excellent job.
On Oct 8, 2006 Nath92 wrote:
Hello!
A great peice of descriptive and sophisticated literacy. This story is beautifally compiled and constructed - I can see you took alot of time and effort in creating this intellectual story and it sure shows in the text. You're truly an authentic and unique composer. Keep up the good work!
Keep it real,
Nath92
On Oct 8, 2006 chicken1223 wrote:
FANTASTIC!! Black and white pictures create a perfect atmosphere for your story! A definite 5 points from me!! Keep up the good work!!
On Oct 8, 2006 BlooManiaC wrote:
Wow! True film noir in those pictures!
On Oct 8, 2006 Tremayne77 wrote:
Very well done and written. You kept the feel of film noir very much alive like "Casablanca" or one of the Phillip Marlowe stories. If you can find them, HBO did a really good Phillip Marlowe series several years ago. I'd love to find the first season of them. Look forward to more from you in the future.
On Oct 9, 2006 jojobunny7601 wrote:
Great Job! Can't wait to see more of your work!
On Oct 9, 2006 Jubilant wrote:
Great black and white imagery. I almost felt like it skipped time too often. And I didn't feel the emotion between the "detective" and Sylvanna. However it was a great story I enjoyed it a lot.
On Oct 9, 2006 annaemilia wrote:
Awesome story. The pictures are amazing, very realistic. It really looks like it's raining outside, I love the athmosphere. I too am hoping to see more stories from you!
On Oct 9, 2006 tesasims wrote:
On Oct 9, 2006 zlsuter wrote:
wow loved the story and the black and white pictures are great. cant wait to read more of your work. keep up the good work
On Oct 9, 2006 Kismyname wrote:
Amazing. The pictures were beautiful and worked great with your writing stlye. This was very unique and well thought out. Great job!
On Oct 9, 2006 darci321 wrote:
Whew! I was setting on the edge of my chair reading The Orchid Seduction. Untique play of words throughout the story, liguid dream and sin, orchids and pearls. Stunning portayal of love and betrayal in black and white! A job well done. Great work!
On Oct 9, 2006 frogger1617 wrote:
On Oct 10, 2006 wrote:
What a work of art! Thank you for inviting me to read your story. It was truly an experience with your poetic language and spectacular pictures. You really capture the mood of the characters and time period. Simply excellent. I can't wait to read more of your stories!
On Oct 10, 2006 SimsBarbie wrote:
Angel, I love the black $ white classic movie like scene. It brings out the story, the character's personality, and enhances the textures in the clothes and objects wonderfully. The pictures are soooo clear and sharp! The story itself was fantastic! Almost suspenseful. Thank you for sharing!
On Oct 10, 2006 popsewini wrote:
That was a fantastic story!!
The pictures were well taken and the plot was amazing! It was fantastic, you need to write more stories!
On Oct 10, 2006 vkd wrote:
Wow, great story. Has the mystery and suspense of all the great classic film noir movies. I do love those films, I have really got into the classic recently. I love your camera angles, you have really captured something special in each photo. Your writing style is amazing! Well done. I am looking forward to seeing more of your work. Thankyou
On Oct 10, 2006 Iceanna wrote:
A very good storie..Authentic (hope I spelled it right), just like an old movie..Well taken pictures with rain and fog. I can´t do anything else than give it a big 5..
On Oct 10, 2006 josh1092 wrote:
great story angel275 p.s.thanks for the message
On Oct 10, 2006 wrote:
Awesome pictures!! I loved the story. Very nice. 5 from me
On Oct 10, 2006 neochris_007 wrote:
This story is great! The pcs alone rule, and combine with the story, they're an unstoppable force! Nice!
On Oct 10, 2006 BBKZ wrote:
Thank you for your invitation
I have to admit that this is gorgeous story! You made it perfect! I love B&W movies and this story reminds me one of them 
ALso you used great stuff and fashion. Story was interesting and surprising. And I have to say one more word: Wow!! 
On Oct 10, 2006 LaurieR wrote:
Thank you for the invitation. I am not a big fan of black and white films like so many others, but this was superbly done. I don't have the gift or ability to write something like this. I certainly don't know how to do it in black and white. I'll be honest, I LOVED it. I was completely engrossed and grateful my kids weren't around to disturb me. A 5 from me!
On Oct 10, 2006 marita2k3 wrote:
great! I love the style
On Oct 10, 2006 Lovella-ya wrote:
Cool story! You are talanted!
On Oct 10, 2006 swmeek wrote:
Great story and i really like the use of the black and white pictures!!
On Oct 10, 2006 macgirlffx wrote:
On Oct 10, 2006 The T wrote:
Thanks for invitation. You should write a novel. I love your story and your pictures are like film noir. The messages you used are good, they make me want to read till the end. Tae
On Oct 10, 2006 D2Diamond wrote:
The pictures were good, and I liked how they are black and white. As for the story itself, it was a bit hard to read. If English isn't your first language then you might want to ask someone who does speak it fluently to proof read your story for you. Just a suggestion. Other wise it was pretty good.
On Oct 10, 2006 sophel21 wrote:
What a story and the storyline
And this pics are ***WOW*** I loved to read it and I love the style you did it! Keep it comming! You are very talented! (and english is also not my native lanquage and for me it was really good to read - and not to easy 
-and I haven't noticed a "speak-barrier"!) Cheers Sophia
On Oct 10, 2006 wrote:
Great story and wonderful shots!!!! everything was beautiful!
On Oct 11, 2006 wrote:
It's not bad work, but you jump forward and back a bit too much and gets abit confusing.
On Oct 11, 2006 wrote:
It was a bit confusing, but all in all a good story. The black/white coloring added an extra element to the story that gave it a nice touch. The pictures were wonderful, everything fit with the theme. The writing style was excellent, and the plot was well thought out. Good job.
On Oct 11, 2006 fizz bomb wrote:
Fantastic will be watching out for more of your stories
On Oct 11, 2006 crayzdanimal456 wrote:
On Oct 11, 2006 wrote:
I want to first of all thank you for inviting me to read your story. I enjoyed the story very much. The pictures were great and well thought out. The black and white was a great effect, it matched the mood of my thoughts of the story. I'm really not much of a black and white fan though.-_-;But overall the pictures weren't even needed, you could visualize everything because you added so much details.^-^
~Good Luck on the next story!!!!!!!
On Oct 12, 2006 willowswand wrote:
wow, impressive, a lot of effort has gone into your story, and as a reader i am appreciative. visually stunning and good for the old grey matter.. five stars
On Oct 12, 2006 cringo wrote:
it took me ages to get down here but now im here i dont know what to say. im speechless. Its sooooo good
i wish it hadent stopped there! 5.0 for sure!
On Oct 13, 2006 HeatherRiyo wrote:
I love your story!!!
5 points!
On Oct 13, 2006 Olga2102 wrote:
AWWWWWWWWWW!
On Oct 14, 2006 tcancel wrote:
Great story, i loved the pictures
On Oct 14, 2006 suzee123 wrote:
On Oct 14, 2006 suzee123 wrote:
Forgot to rate it! A 5 5 5 5 !!!
On Oct 16, 2006 kidnumber48 wrote:
Great photography and a good idea to do it completely in black and white. People are saying the 30s and 40s but it made me think of the 20s. The women's clothing made me think of the 20s for some reason. Your punctuation is incorrect, try and work on it. Try and keep your language more simplistic. As long as you keep the mood you don't need to make the language too involved!
On Oct 16, 2006 juttaponath wrote:
The smokey room picture is amazing and the black and white makes the story look like a movie. I love both of your stories. You make amazing screen shots. It must take ages to get everything perfect. And the rain works so well.
On Oct 16, 2006 *louise* wrote:
What a great story! It reminded me a little of the movie 'Sin City' with the fantastic black & white pictures & clever camera angles.
On Oct 22, 2006 newmansfan12 wrote:
Great story 5.0
On Oct 26, 2006 auracyan wrote:
Wonderful! Very film noir!
On Oct 31, 2006 MDaleB wrote:
Fantastic!
On Nov 4, 2006 cronyn wrote:
Love the style.
On Nov 4, 2006 newbie.t. wrote:
Wow... I didn't expect it to end like that! This story was amazing, so professional! The lighting and and camerawork was excellent, I could tell you had really spent time choosing objects and outfits that would contrast. And your language! At times it was like reading poetry - her reflection in the wedding ring, "she took a good glimpse of my soul". You should be proud of this!
On Nov 6, 2006 peony_pony wrote:
This is a work of absolute art!
On Nov 8, 2006 rhiannon32ga wrote:
On Nov 11, 2006 Fresh-Prince wrote:
Wow! I Love this story! Your pictures are amazing!
Great creativity, keep up the fantastic work! 
5 stars 
On Nov 14, 2006 wrote:
well that was just...fanstasic!!
On Nov 29, 2006 Lidia wrote:
Great!! Love the story and the style it was done with. Pics are excellent!
On Dec 5, 2006 Mistress Useless wrote:
What a great Noir mystery! Excellent use of black and white!
On Dec 9, 2006 PlushieMouse wrote:
I enjoyed your story very much. There are several things you should be proud about your story. Your picture are excellent and the camera angles pulled me really into the story.You nailed the reactions for your characters so the readers can have feelings for them. Like how Sylvia showed terror and how Sylanna show the viewers her cunning and desire through her eyes. The choice of doing your story in black and white was a plus. As the above person stated before your story is a excellect noir. Also I wanted to say that you have wonderful sets and lighting effects were amazing. Also I wanted to give you a "WOW" on Sylanna's satin,open back dress. I hope you write more Noir stories and maybe make them into small chapters casue you have nice story telling skills and you can keep a nice following of readers. Keep writing more .. thank you for a great reading expereince.
On Dec 12, 2006 wrote:
Great story, I am a fan of the dective movies and stories of the 1930-1950's, I am developing a neighborhood based on film Noir, all old fashioned look, although it is now the 21st century things come around. People forget the Sci-Fi movie "Blade Runner" was really Film Noir.
If you get a chance could you point me toward the clothes of that periods location here.
Thanks Butch
On Dec 13, 2006 manuela55 wrote:
super
On Dec 19, 2006 bookfairy23 wrote:
This is, by far, the most beautiful and my favorite story alive. It's more than just a sim animation?it's true artwork. However many long nights you stayed up to finish this gorgeous story are completely worth it. I hope that you are able to create more unique things like this.
On Dec 21, 2006 manuela55 wrote:
On Jan 8, 2007 rika_t3 wrote:
This is actually like a real movie ! Keep up the good work !
On Jan 8, 2007 wrote:
Wow! your so talented, i really appreciate every single detail of the story. I L
VE IT!
On Jan 10, 2007 Pete789 wrote:
On Jan 16, 2007 civetinja wrote:
Thanks !!
On Feb 16, 2007 gummypeaches wrote:
wow...awesome story!!
On Feb 24, 2007 AnnieBoo wrote:
Awww...I love the story and the pics! And the Bradon Routh sim!!!
On Mar 24, 2007 wrote:
Wow! That was great! You write REALLY well! That was like reading out of a book it was so good!
On Mar 27, 2007 K@ wrote:
Wow! That's great store with great pictures! Everything you do - tou do the best!
On Mar 27, 2007 K@ wrote:
I forot to rate your story, so I'm improving now - 5.0
On May 12, 2007 AnniKayna wrote:
wow.
that was *sublime*.
the b&w, the clothes, the style, the dialogues...
just like an old movie, a noir novel.
I loved it.
my compliments!!!
On Jun 21, 2007 nanapon wrote:
Oh...My...Gosh...that was one of the best stories i have ever read! It had everything:amazing plot, detailed shots...wow wow wow. I just love that old hollywood glamour and the mystery in it. The screenshots were divine! My favorite ones were the one of sylvanna and lydia before she was pushed down the stairs. The detail shot of the necklace waws beautiful! And when he told his wife she had a new nurse and all you can see is his hand, like in horror movies and then the expression on sylvanna's face when she walks in the room-WOW! what a wonderful story!!!!!!!!!! you totally deserve this 5!
-Love, Shar
On Jul 12, 2007 binky13 wrote:
Fantastic story! The black and white pulled it all together.
On Sep 3, 2007 md198 wrote:
How cruel
Awesome story again and THE EIFFEL TOWER?
On Jan 18, 2008 OpheliaNival wrote:
I LOVE it! Everything worked to perfection! I get flash backs to Film Noir and also a little SinCity vibes...
Beatiful and artistic pictures, a woderful atmosphere in your writing, great and interesting plot... You got it all! 
Some minor flaws in the text, but absolutely nothing that will take away the 5.0! BRILLIANT!
On Mar 4, 2008 jadespacemonkey wrote:
Wonderful story....lovely pictures too
On Apr 22, 2008 buffysmg81 wrote:
Well done! I don't usually comment on stories but I had to tell you how much I enjoyed reading yours.
On Aug 18, 2009 Parisleaf wrote:
Fantastic Story
On Oct 14, 2010 fabrizioammollo wrote:
Great stry! very well written and the pics are absolutely lovely!