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Just A Boy - Introduction

This is a story I re-wrote after I submitted it and then deleted a few months ago because I realised it was pretty bad...I hope this is better but it may not be:) I think the story will evovle more in the next few parts if I continue. Read on...

Just A Boy - Introduction

This is a story I re-wrote after I submitted it and then deleted a few months ago because I realised it was pretty bad...I hope this is better but it may not be:) I think the story will evovle more in the next few parts if I continue. Read on... It was a typical Winter's night - not grey, but wild, stormy and busy. Ben reached for the door-handle trying to regulate his breathing and stop his heart thumping. He watched the face of the girl through the glass-door light up when she saw Ben approaching down the passage which made him more nervous than before. He took a deep breath as he swiftly pulled open the door. "Bridie Carter," he smiled "Long time , no see!" A genuine, beautiful smile swept across her face, Bridie giggled. "Too long..." she softly murmed, as they exchanged a friendly embrace. "Well come in, come in. I can't believe you drove in this weather!" Ben exclaimed. "I'm so sorry, Mum rang to say you were leaving and had you hadn't already left I would have come to collect you from the train station. I feel terrible. It must have been horrible in all that rain." he continued, gesturing for Bridie to follow him down the passage after he collected her suitcase from outside. "Oh-no, don't be silly. I'm here now, safe and sound. You didn't even have to be here tonight, it's a Saturday night! Gees - you should be out on the town, you could've just put a key under the mat or something!" , Bridie said.
 "That's ridiculous! You're moving in for goodness sake; I had to be here to welcome you!" Ben persisted. "Where's all your stuff? he added, notioning to the single bag he was carrying. "Oh, a friend of mine has been looking after it until I can go and get it. She lives in Morrison City too."
"No worries," he paused. "It's great to see you Brides...I've missed you..." "I know, me too...It's going to be so good to be able to see you and actually live together! I haven't seen you since, ah, since you got the college scolarship over here." After a second or so of silence, Bridie muttered that it must be nearly 12:30, she better hit the sack.
"Yeah, it's something like that...night Bridie."
"Night Ben," she smiled. "...and thanks. I, ah, guess I'll see you in the morning."
Once Ben had showed her to her new bedroom, Bridie sat down on her bed and sighed. Ben tread heavily up the stairs,thinking of the girl he loved who he could never have. *****
1 MONTH LATER
*****

It was the most magical night of her life...Bridie was outside, somewhere that she had never seen before, in her pyjamas. She could smell Ben's after-shave and she could feel his arms...they were dancing in the moonlight and it was all very romantic. Wrapped in his arms, she faintly heard somebody thumping down a staircase..."Bridie? Bridie...", a voice was softly calling. Suddenly, Ben vanished.

- Huh?, Bridie wondered.

Somebody pinched her sharply on her arm... Bridie prised her eyes open, Ben was leaning on the couch, tying up his shoes...

"Oh, crap...", she muttered - it was all a dream. "What's the time?", she managed to say, stiffling a yawn.
"Only 'bout 6:30.", he replied quietly. "I'm just popping down to get some milk...and the paper. Would you like anything, just thought I'd ask."
"Oh...thanks. I'm fine though, don't need anything."

He padded softly down the hallway and Bridie watched him disappear, thinking of the boy she loved who she could never have.

Thankyou for reading...comment and/or rate - you can critisise or compliment:) I don't mind.
I'm not sure whether I'll continue the story or not but I am thinking of uploading the lot/s I have made, including the house above, maybe:) Thanks to custom content creators also, it makes the game funner:)

Just A Boy - Introduction

Apr 19, 2008 by Lailey01
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    27 Comment(s) posted so far

    On Apr 20, 2008 xbluexmistx wrote:

    Very nice! Hmm... Makes me wonder why they can't have each other! Keep it Up \:wub\: \:rah\: \:wub\:

    On Apr 20, 2008 maryash2 wrote:

    good, please make more, I LOVE it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!\:rah\: \:wub\: \:rah\:

    On Apr 20, 2008 mangooo1 wrote:

    Continue please, I wonder why they can't have the other... Do keep writing! \;\)

    On Apr 20, 2008 mako007 wrote:

    well i have to say WOW!!!it's a great job,just please keep going,i wish to know why she can't have ben?!?really great,i can't wait for the next part!!!!thanks

    On Apr 20, 2008 jfarges wrote:

    \:\)

    On Apr 21, 2008 iluvhorses13 wrote:

    Good start. I love your dialogue!\:wub\:

    On Apr 21, 2008 OCIKITTEN wrote:

    \:wub\: \:rah\:

    On Apr 21, 2008 Sumashedshaya wrote:

    good story!!!\:wub\:

    On Apr 21, 2008 Frog_man05 wrote:

    Great story. Please continue!\:rah\: Awesome house!\:D

    On Apr 21, 2008 happyb8888 wrote:

    Good start...continue please!\:rah\:

    On Apr 21, 2008 maxi king wrote:

    :rah\:Do more,it's so interesting!I like to know how it goes on! \:rah\:

    On Apr 21, 2008 plushies_lovergg wrote:

    Very cute! I would love to read the next part.

    On Apr 21, 2008 thekewlestnerd wrote:

    good story! \:\)

    On Apr 21, 2008 beretta92 wrote:

    nice start. \;\)

    On Apr 21, 2008 qasert wrote:

    \:cool\:

    On Apr 21, 2008 spicylove wrote:

    \:rah\: great story keep up the good work

    On Apr 21, 2008 ,xPheobe. wrote:

    Great Begining \:D

    On Apr 21, 2008 varrnas wrote:

    I would say continue it, it has potential, nice work!\:D

    On Apr 23, 2008 JuLaYa-K wrote:

    Seems like it could be a good story. plz continue!\:rah\: Sorry my comment's a litlle short, i have a cold. Good story!\:D

    On Apr 23, 2008 Bury me deep inside your heart wrote:

    Great intro\:rah\: I wonder why they can't be together \:confused\: Keep writting please\;\) I want more!.

    On Apr 23, 2008 artrui wrote:

    nice!\:\)

    On Apr 24, 2008 jaundyce61 wrote:

    interesting, if not short, but then, it is an introduction! LOL! Keep going!!\:\)

    On Apr 25, 2008 spacemouse wrote:

    Very nice story, thanks for sharing! \:\)

    On Apr 25, 2008 twofee wrote:

    nice work \:\) and i love the birdie sim, shes super pretty \:\)

    On May 6, 2008 civetinja wrote:

    Good job ! Thanks for sharing !\:\)

    On May 17, 2008 arc1801 wrote:

    \:rah\:

    On Aug 1, 2008 tinkerbell7716 wrote:

    nice introduction\:rah\:

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