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Hi! This is my third story. Sorry that New Life is gone, I had now new computer because my old computer was broken.Enjoy and sorry about grammar mistakes, when you forgotten I say again, I am 13 years old and live in Estonia. I study English.
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Hi! I want you read my story. Lets meet with me and my family.

Hi! This is my third story. Sorry that New Life is gone, I had now new computer because my old computer was broken.Enjoy and sorry about grammar mistakes, when you forgotten I say again, I am 13 years old and live in Estonia. I study English.
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Hi! I want you read my story. Lets meet with me and my family. This is my mohter Molly. We are little bit poor ,but my mom had good job. We dont have dad, because he left us. She is stupid like my mother said. And This is me, Rihanna. I am little bit funny, do I? I am 17 years old and This is My Story! My mom loved me so much! I am so greatful for her. I was great and smart child. But I wanted to go away from my momīs house.
"Mom?"
"Yes my dear?"
"I want to move out and start new life!"
"No you are so young!"
"No mom! Mom I want that!"
"You want say that you dont love me!"
"No mom. I love you!"
"Do you understand, when you move now, you dont find job you will be so poor that you die! And now go to your room and dont talk about this with me anymore! Understand!"
"Okey! But..!"
"NO! GO!" "MOM I WANT TO MOVE OUT!"
"Rihanna STOP! PLEASE DO YOUR HOMEWORK!"
"NO! I WANT TO MOVE OUT!"
"RIHANNA IT IS BAD YOU MUST LISTEN ME!"
"NO I DONT LISTEN YOU!" Some days later my mom find a Perfect Husband. They Wanted Marry. And so next day they married. I hate this party. My mom had fun but I dont. I hate that day. ... So we eat cake and I hate this cake because I hate this day. So at night I wanted to get away. And I just walked away to start new life somewhere else. I dont know where. So 1 year after I looked like this. Is that beautiful! I had beatuiful life aloun. I am now 18 and I am adult. First men who was my bf was Komei. She had so beautiful red hair. Next was Goopy. Next was Amin Bear. And last was Amin Sims. 8 months later I had Amin Bearīs son Jack. So next baby I had With Amin Sims was girl Janelle. I DONT WANT HAVE BABYS OK! So Then was Jackīs birthday. And Janelle Grew up. So then I had another baby with Goopy, that girlīs name was Liia. And Liia grew up. I HATE CHILDRENS!!! So year after I didnt have job because my children cant be home aloun. So I sold my house and I lived in street. I hate this life. I SHOULD LISTEN MY MOM!
"MOM WHY! WHY? I SHOULD LISTEN YOU? WHY? I WANT MY LIFE BACK!" But One day I almost died. When I was hospital and slepping there was my mom and my "dad". After awaking I hug my mom and I said:
"Mom! I am so sorry. I should listen you!"
"It is okey. Everything is fine. You are alive! That is so great. And I am so happy."
"Ok Mom!"
"Ok! Letīs go see your kids!"
"You know I have kids!"
"Yes! They are so cute!" "These are my kids! Janelle, Jack and Liia"I said.
"They are so cute! Who is their father?"
"Ee....!" I wanted to be normal again and I wanted to be good mother for my kids. So I am now blond and I want say two beautiful words:

THE END

I should listen you

Jun 17, 2007 by MagySims
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    13 Comment(s) posted so far

    On Jun 18, 2007 Shannen124 wrote:

    A bit rushed....
    Anyway good story. How did you get Rihanna, hit by a car? I don't knwo how you do all that stuff!\:confused\:

    On Jun 18, 2007 sharon21075 wrote:

    \:\) It was pretty good. I'd like to know how you got her hit by the car too.

    On Jun 18, 2007 wrote:

    Well.....to tell the truth, the story really wasn't all that interesting, and it was a bit confusing, and some of the sentences didn't make any sense. I know you're studying English, and you're from a different country, but you wrote some mistakes that anyone from any country would be able to see.........

    you could do better, I believe in your writing,
    Just2Cute \:\(

    On Jun 18, 2007 goodie2shoes wrote:

    Ooh! I know! Maybe she got the girl to pass out from exhaustion and then moved the girl by ways of "move_objects on" to the street, where the car was.
    Anyways, pretty good story. I think you're tired of hearing this, but it's sort of rushed. *shrugs* Oh, well. It's only your third story. \:D

    On Jun 18, 2007 spacemouse wrote:

    Very nice story. Thanks for sharing! \:\)

    On Jun 18, 2007 MagySims wrote:

    I know it is rushed
    And sorry really about grammar mistakes I very rushed But Next time I hope it will be better. Much better;D

    On Jun 19, 2007 wrote:

    I think it was a good try, and don't be discouraged...keep on writing because everything gets better with time.
    If I tried to write a story in a language other than my own, I hope I could do half as well as you did\;\)...

    On Jun 19, 2007 itachigirl wrote:

    it was pretty good 4.5\:\)

    On Jun 19, 2007 nanapon wrote:

    I don't like how at the end she says "I want to be normal, so now im blonde". Well, being blonde isn't nessicarialy normal. Your natural hair color is normal and is what will look best on you! \:D Your story was okay except that it was not very detailed. Maybe, in future stories, elaborate a little more on the character's lives. \:\)

    On Jun 19, 2007 wrote:

    Love da story... \:D

    Lahe Lugu :P

    On Jun 21, 2007 Downtimegirl91 wrote:

    it's a pretty good story\:\)

    On Jun 21, 2007 Little Seer wrote:

    Darn good try. Keep trying your English will improve. Hint: Males are he's not she's. He has red hair. His hair is red. Not to be rude, just helpful. Cheers, \:\)

    On Dec 3, 2007 MagySims wrote:

    Ty \:D

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