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When She Smiles
Published Feb 11, 2009


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When She Smiles
All Custom Content property of those who made it, because I'm not nearly good enough yet. Thanks so much!

When She Smiles
All Custom Content property of those who made it, because I'm not nearly good enough yet. Thanks so much!
My name is Min Hammond. I am 17 years old. I was born in Korea, but my American parents adopted me when I was two. I have a secret. My parents think I am a quiet, reserved, polite girl... but when I get to school I put on dramatic make-up and colored hair extensions. Even though at home I'm only allowed to listen to classical music, my iPod is full of metalcore and screamo. I like to rock and roll. Let me show you my life. This is my best friend, Blythe. She can be a little ditzy sometimes, but she knows to keep my secret. She's the total opposite of me. She's the girl my parents think I am. This is my history teacher, Mrs. Dooson. She is my favorite teacher. She's crazy and really likes the color pink. She keeps my secret too. And this is Julio Vasquez, a transfer student from Chile. He doesn't know much English (which is good, because then he can't tell my secret either) but I still think he's adorble. This is my school, the Valencia Academy. My father is the headmaster, but he almost never leaves the house due to his agoraphobia (a good thing for me). My mother stays to help him out, and they do all of their work from home. It's a private school but we don't wear uniforms. The house on the right is mine, and the one on the left is Blythe's, whose parents are big benefactors of the school and bought the house. They're always away on business. "Don't forget class. Your papers on your heritage are due next Friday. Next Friday also happens to be the big Valentine's Day Dance, don't forget. That's all for today. Dismissed," says Mrs. Dooson. These are two big problems for me. I don't know my heritage, outside the fact I was born in Korea. And, I want to ask Julio to the dance but I'm not sure. What if he doesn't understand what I'm asking him? After class, I walk with Blythe out to our lockers to put our books away. Blythe is chattering away about having an after party on Friday, but I'm too involved in deep thinking to respond with anything more than a nod and a "Uh-huh". I go into the bathroom and wash off my make-up and take off my hair extensions. Blythe asks if I'm going to ask Julio to the dance. I blow her off. She sighs and says good-bye and walks off to her house. I walk home to our house on campus. It's small and kind of bare. My parents don't like clutter. This is my father. He always wears a suit, and much to my advantage, fears leaving the house. It took us forever to get moved in here because of his agoraphobia. He's all business, all the time. This is my mother. She also always wears a suit. Over dinner, I tell my parents "So... our papers on our heritage are due next Friday." My parents look at each other. My father says "Just write about how you were adopted I'm sure Mrs. Dooson will accept that." I sigh. I don't know what my parents have against me learning about my birth family. I guess they just like to control me. The next day in math I decide two things. I WAS going to find out about my birth family and I WAS going to ask Julio to the dance. Will Min find out about her birth family? Will Julio accept her invitation? Will everyone keep her secret? Find out in part 2 of When She Smiles.

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#8hersheyluv10Feb 12, 2009

GREATE STORY\:D  how do u go in school?\:wacko\:

#9qvisnFeb 12, 2009

nice start, you got me interested,let me know when the next part is out. Thanks for sharing.\:\)

#10charrayFeb 13, 2009

Very good start \:rah\: \:\)

#11SimonettaCFeb 14, 2009

I liked this, it was interesting. Where did you get the school desk from? I would like to know when part 2 is out too. Well done.xxxxx\:D

#12damnanoirFeb 14, 2009

great starting story! love it!

#13xmjameswayFeb 14, 2009

Nice start! Blythe seems to be adorable!

#14TUTULAFeb 19, 2009

Very interesting start, love it very much\:rah\:

#15shady411Feb 20, 2009

Great start to what seems like a very interesting story

#16KatieKingFeb 21, 2009

nice start to your story

#17DerbywoodMar 5, 2009

Very good story!

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