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My deepest gratitude to all the wonderful custum content creators! You give "life" to our Sims!

My deepest gratitude to all the wonderful custum content creators! You give "life" to our Sims! Hello everyone! I have never written a story before and this is my first attempt! I have been accused of being sarcastic and having a sick sense of humor! Obviously my family doesn't know me very well! So I am writing these little Fairytales to prove them wrong!

I will now narrate my first story, "Zayury's Cinderella"! Once upon a time in a beautiful small village... there lived a sweet and pure young demoiselle named.... Eh?! I..aa, ammm, ahem... excuse me for a second... Psst! Psst! Ahem!! Cinderella!! Wwhaat? Oh, hi!

Cinderella! I am telling your story, and you are suppose to be sweet and PURE! Oh! Yes, yes, of course! I'm sorry! Run along... What did you say your name was?

Rusty.

Oh, yeah! Run along Rusty! Thank-you for waiting, sorry about that.

There lived a sweet and PURE young demoiselle named Cinderella!

 La, la la, la la...

Cinderella would spend her days singing while doing her outside chores! Her sweet papa had been a wealthy landowner.

 When he died she was left at the mercy of her mean stepmother and wicked stepsisters! Cinderella loved and missed her papa very much? Stupid, old man! I can?t believe he didn't leave a will! For crying out loud old man! You never heard of being prepared! You #@$#@... Ahem, excuse me again? Cinderella!! Hello?! Did you forget you have an audience?! Will you control yourself and pretend you loved your sweet papa!!

 Oh! hahaha, I?m sorry ? hahaha! PAPAA! PAPAA!!! Oh, how can I go on without my dear sweet PAPA! boohoo, snif!
 Hmph! A little over the top... I guess it will do.

After doing her outside chores Cinderella would spend the rest of her day cleaning after her 2 wicked stepsisters, One and Two (sorry I can?t remember their names)! Oh for crying out loud! CINDERELLA!!! Would you kindly stick to the story!! YOU are supposed to be cleaning after them! Not the other way around!
 Alright, alright! Jeez, talk about being a testy b?

CINDERELLA! WE ALL CAN HEAR YOU!

Sorry... I'm starting to hate "my" stupid story... Oh, man! I think I broke a nail! I?m sorry about the delay ladies and gentlemen it?s hard to get good fairytale help. Maybe this would be a good time to stop. I'm sure that with this little example I have proven my family is wrong about me! I hope you will return and read the next part of this story! Maybe if you are having problems sleeping, this story will help you fall asleep, lol! See ya next time!

ZAYURY'S CINDERELLA part1

Aug 24, 2007 by Zayury
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    On Aug 24, 2007 andymc2470 wrote:

    love it\:wub\: \:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 Ajoya wrote:

    Very Cute Comedy!!! I Love stories in a different perspective. Well Done Girl!!!\:P

    On Aug 24, 2007 pepp_pattie wrote:

    Great story! \:D \:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 beautifulletdown wrote:

    oh that was really well written, for your first time. i absolutly loved it \:wub\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 samcactus101 wrote:

    HAHA lol!\:P Wicked sense of humour.. Very cute balcony-overlooking-the-sea background\:wub\: . Costumes were cute too!

    On Aug 24, 2007 lildebbye75 wrote:

    ROFL, that was too funny. Girl you're good at every thing you do. Great job can't wait to see more.

    On Aug 24, 2007 wrote:

    \:D Very witty\:D\:D Loved it!!!

    On Aug 24, 2007 binky13 wrote:

    That was so cute! I love the new little take. \:P

    On Aug 24, 2007 jenniegoldy wrote:

    Lol! i really enjoyed it, very good!\:D \:D \:\)

    On Aug 24, 2007 Gelika wrote:

    Wonderful pictures and skins. More please. Great work.\:ph34r\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 atangki wrote:

    LOL. This is great! Please do continue. \:D\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 Daishi wrote:

    Such a great start, i giggled out loud a couple of times lol. The sims and clothes are beautiful!!! Great job cant wait till the next part \:P

    On Aug 24, 2007 emmy27 wrote:

    i loved it , it was so funny \:D \:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 newbie.t. wrote:

    Very pretty, and I loved the different perspective. Thanks for giving us something a bit different \:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 electrocuting wrote:

    Very cool story

    On Aug 24, 2007 Mikaella wrote:

    Rolling on the floor laughing! Great!!!

    On Aug 24, 2007 TellMeSomethingNew wrote:

    That was bloody brilliant!!!\:D I love your writing style, and your idea is very original. I love the way you portrayed dear old Cindy\:ph34r\: . Fab job!!5.0\:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 wrote:

    You did a story! Now don't understand how you can leave such nice comments on Elementals - you top me in every aspect of sims writing! Great humor, costumes, sets, characters, screenshots...wow. ~Eidleflower\;\)

    On Aug 24, 2007 baconhead91 wrote:

    Nice \:\)

    On Aug 24, 2007 andi and grim wrote:

    snore snore or right not ment to be asleap.....
    good story very funny \:wub\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 bingochao1 wrote:

    hehe cool

    On Aug 24, 2007 Ikaridasu wrote:

    lol this is freakin sweet \:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 dannybond1990 wrote:

    That was very interesting, I look forward to the next part!! keep it rockin!\:rah\: \:wub\: \:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 arwen_moonfairy wrote:

    Ha, I love it. Very original! \:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 Ileeya wrote:

    Very cute. I, too, enjoyed the different perspective. Lazy and unpure Cinderella sure does put a spin on a well known (and too often told) fairytale. Your screen shots are lovely - very good technique - nice angles and closeups. Good job.

    On Aug 24, 2007 Katuxkah wrote:

    COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL


    I Love this story, very cool and very comic \:D \;\) \:P

    On Aug 24, 2007 Pucina wrote:

    This was totally the best story I have ever red here! I LOVED it! Thank you!!! \:wub\: \:wub\: \:wub\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 wrote:

    This is really GOOD\:\) Esp. for your first time NICE Humour\:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 Sk8Iowa wrote:

    I thought this was very cute. When it said Zayury, I had to double check the name. And I was glad that you wrote a story! Now I have more things to read! \:D. This is VERY cute and I adore it. Your sims are very pretty and of course, your screenshots were great. Congrats on making it to the front page as well!! I, too, love the way you wrote it. \:P It's funny and keeps me entertained. Can't wait for the next part. 5.0!! \:D

    On Aug 24, 2007 iron mum wrote:

    \:rah\:
    I loved it so much I was crying with laughter.
    I also have weird humour.

    On Aug 24, 2007 kaykay52812 wrote:

    thats a really cool twist to the original, do continue.\:\)

    On Aug 24, 2007 Nik-Noo wrote:

    interesting and unique!\:rah\:

    On Aug 24, 2007 goodie2shoes wrote:

    I like it, Zayury! Hmmm, I wonder why they call you sarcastic...\:D LOL! V. good, for your first story! MUST.....READ....MORE! \:D

    On Aug 25, 2007 veej36 wrote:

    Cute, Very, Very cute. I enjoyed your story very much \:D \;\) \:P

    On Aug 25, 2007 DecemberSea wrote:

    I thought this was great. Very funny and original storytelling. Congrats on making the front page, you deserved it. \:rah\:

    On Aug 25, 2007 amandabxx wrote:

    That was sooooo funny! I love that little village too its beautiful. Well done. 5.0!!!!\:rah\: \:D \:rah\:

    On Aug 25, 2007 Hanefcik wrote:

    \:wub\: FANTASTIC STORY!!! It was smart, funny and really untypical! I like the sister's oufits, are they Sussi's? Fantastic job, if I could give you more than 5, it would be 10! \:wub\: \:wub\:

    On Aug 25, 2007 joxanth wrote:

    That was the coolest story I've read!!\:P You are hysterical!

    On Aug 25, 2007 xtamadea wrote:

    ROFL, loved it!!\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Aug 25, 2007 swirlique wrote:

    That was kind of different but actually kind of funny~!!

    On Aug 25, 2007 wideopeneyes wrote:

    That's great! Can't wait for the next part. \:\)

    On Aug 25, 2007 Wigwog wrote:

    Wonderful!

    On Aug 25, 2007 Emerald_Lexus wrote:

    Hi there Zayury, like your story alot...It's funny and nice..\:\)

    On Aug 25, 2007 wrednazlosc wrote:

    so cute \:wub\:

    On Aug 25, 2007 albaby wrote:

    OH WOW WOW WOW!! 5.0!! IF I CAN GIVE 100 STARS I WILL!! YOU ARE A PRO, TALENTED, GIFTED PERSON!! THANKS FOR SHARING IT TO US. I SO LOVE THIS STORY!! DOES IT HAVE A PART 2?

    On Aug 25, 2007 djcryssiec wrote:

    I loved the story and I share you warped sense of humor. It would've been great to see the whole story told in your unique way.

    On Aug 25, 2007 JessicaGGGi wrote:

    At the end you were so right I fell asleep and only woke up about 5 minutes ago after a half hour.

    On Aug 26, 2007 Paiige[Missing Since: Unknown] wrote:

    LMAO funny \:cool\:

    On Aug 26, 2007 Lily Fairy2 wrote:

    I loved it!! I giggled out loud at the part when her dad died, it was so funny!! Please tell me you're going to do a part2! It'a about time someone did a good comedy, there only seem to be dramas and stuff! LOVED IT! \:D \:D \:D \:D

    On Aug 27, 2007 tdyannd wrote:

    Frickin' hilarious! I love it! \:D

    On Aug 27, 2007 spacemouse wrote:

    Very nice story. I loved it. Looking forward to read the next part. \:\)

    On Aug 27, 2007 R.Quest wrote:

    Very funny and Twisted... Liked it a lot thanks for sharing

    On Aug 27, 2007 freescarlett wrote:

    Very original story! The screens were great too!\:\) \:D

    On Aug 28, 2007 loverien wrote:

    I love fairytales! Especially the comedy versions. You had me cracking up! Great pics, too! I hope to see a Part 2! \:D

    On Aug 28, 2007 basketballbabe818 wrote:

    i loved ur story!!!!!

    On Aug 29, 2007 cariadbach wrote:

    Brilliant first story, so different, love everything about it\:rah\:

    On Aug 29, 2007 MsRomulus wrote:

    \:wub\: \:P I loved it so much I cracked up . I nearly fell off my own bed.

    On Aug 30, 2007 Eve70 wrote:

    \:rah\: Girl, why you didn't you tell me about this? I just saw it when I was writing you back! This is SO funny! Especially when she's ranting about the papa she loved so much! Love the perspective, the scenery, the hair/costumes, and Cinderella is very pretty. You're a real comedian! I gave you a 5, and I'm going to read the next part right now. Great work dear friend!\:P \:rah\: \:wub\:

    On Aug 31, 2007 wrote:

    Very funny I love it \;\)

    On Sep 1, 2007 MinnieID wrote:

    That was hilarious! \:D

    On Sep 2, 2007 ulker wrote:

    Awesome\:D I'll give you a 5\:rah\: But please keep on submitting stories,please!!\:wub\:

    On Sep 2, 2007 Redkandies03 wrote:

    5.0 all the way lol now off to the next part\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Sep 2, 2007 _cari_ wrote:

    I love it , it is so cute i really enjoyed thank you

    On Sep 2, 2007 Linasmultrollet wrote:

    HAHAHA\:D

    On Sep 3, 2007 drewsoltesz wrote:

    Utterly charming! Love the costumes...such wit!\:\)

    On Sep 6, 2007 Nyell wrote:

    Wow, fantastic story, so funny and original. I love the pictures, too. \:rah\:

    On Sep 29, 2007 wrote:

    hilarious. and the sarcasm is what makes us love it!!\:rah\:

    On Oct 11, 2007 Cyclonesue wrote:

    I agree with everyone else - this is TOO funny! You're a talented writer and I'm now off to read the next installment! \:D \:rah\: Sue

    On Oct 20, 2007 eshuff wrote:

    Totally perfect. Hysterically funny -- I'm falling off my chair -- and the shots are unbelievable! Cindy as Paris H....

    On Oct 30, 2007 OpheliaNival wrote:

    Great humour, I seriously hope I'll be reading more from you in the future, beyond the next two chapters that is. I think the whole dorm heard me snigger when the sisters names were revealed, "One and Two", we have paperthin walls here, but still... I'm so looking forward to reading the rest now... *skipping over to the next pigs house... oh,sorry... story*

    On Nov 3, 2007 civetinja wrote:

    Very good story ! Thanks ! \:\)

    On Jan 6, 2008 windgirl wrote:

    Different \;\)

    On Apr 9, 2008 zmajce wrote:

    Very good Comedy!!! I Love stories which are different. \:rah\: 5.0!!

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