It was a cold and windy night when I arrived in town, everybody was indoors in the warm but I was glad to be outside , free to go where I pleased. My name is Jack , Jack Jones and if you have a few minutes to spare I'll tell you my story...
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On Mar 7, 2007 cariadbach wrote:
On Mar 7, 2007 wrote:
On Mar 7, 2007 eshuff wrote:
VERY VERY good! Great plot; different, original and moves right along. The screenshots are perfect!
On Mar 7, 2007 xImpaledxAngelx wrote:
I really enjoyed that it was very original.
On Mar 7, 2007 Jubilant wrote:
I am happy he decided to stay with Red. Red sure was able to get his life back in order.
On Mar 7, 2007 blueclarity25 wrote:
Excellent story! It immediately pulled me in and I felt so terrible for Jack Jones. What horrible accusations and such traumatic situations to overcome. The scenery was perfect for each shot and really creative. Glad there was a happy ending after everything he went through. (and Red's custom hair is the prettiest I've ever seen) Truly Great job on this story!
On Mar 7, 2007 drewsoltesz wrote:
My husband is a schoolteacher and he says all male teachers have this nightmare! Well told, and a nice change from usual fare here...really well done!
On Mar 7, 2007 wrote:
great story with a good plot , why so few comments when so many have read,
On Mar 7, 2007 monmel wrote:
Great story
On Mar 7, 2007 michellegallagher1976 wrote:
I really liked this story, so different from the usual legacy stuff, and really gripping, I'm so glad it all turned out well for Jack!
On Mar 7, 2007 zippy_69 wrote:
Wow! That was a brilliant story u had me hooked!

On Mar 7, 2007 clcewest441 wrote:
That was a GREAT!! You did an exellent job.
Thanks for sharing!
On Mar 7, 2007 sandybvv wrote:
great story!! really different from all the others!! loved it from the start to the end!!! give you 10 / 10
On Mar 7, 2007 wrote:
Wow! I'm glad things went good for him in the end.
On Mar 7, 2007 maggiesmom1 wrote:
What a good story!! I really enjoyed it. Please, oh please, oh PLEASE make a part two!!
On Mar 7, 2007 lilredkat wrote:
On Mar 8, 2007 Saffronzoe wrote:
i wish i could rate this it was great. Well done a 5 from me...
On Mar 8, 2007 AnniKayna wrote:
I really like the way you write, it really seems to be there!!!
^^
I'd like to read smthg else from you soon!!!
On Mar 8, 2007 gamemast75 wrote:
Very nice! It's very new and creative, I like how it's very unique than the other stories. I was starting to get bored of the storytelling here at TSR. Good story!
On Mar 8, 2007 wrote:
Fantastic story!!! I really enjoyed reading a story that was different and it was really well written. I didn't even notice any of the name errors you mentioned, and that's usually one of the first things I notice about a story... This has to be one of the best I've read yet! Thanks and keep up the goor work!
On Mar 8, 2007 bethbrit wrote:
Falch nest ti defnyddio enwau Cymraeg
Story neis, nes i mwynhau
On Mar 8, 2007 sweety_nia wrote:
I loved the story! Great job. It's good that your story's not about whoo-hoos and babies again. Keep it up
On Mar 8, 2007 slime wrote:
very good no th greatest

On Mar 8, 2007 foxysensei wrote:
Aaaah!!!! I almost cried. Well done for Jack. That's great for him. Red is very pretty - I'm sure they'll be very happy together!
On Mar 8, 2007 cariadbach wrote:
On Mar 8, 2007 Palina wrote:
Fantastic work, Thank you!
On Mar 8, 2007 sallyhails wrote:
What a great story!
Such a change from the usual, great plot, you grabbed my attention from the very start, well done.
On Mar 8, 2007 Alyosha wrote:
Keep it up! I admire your story so much!
On Mar 8, 2007 coco_goddess wrote:
On Mar 8, 2007 cowboys-kisses wrote:
Wow! Amzing, i really enjoyed this story!
On Mar 8, 2007 Gelika wrote:
Nice story. Make more please.
On Mar 8, 2007 EmJay1986 wrote:
I left a similar comment just now for someone else who is working on this kind of complex, long story. Very good job. There are only a few people trying to do something other than teenagers get pregnant stories. My compliments.
On Mar 9, 2007 ChYrel wrote:
I love the story. I think it's the best one I have read in a while.
On Mar 9, 2007 SimsBarbie wrote:
Such a wonderful story.
On Mar 9, 2007 wrote:
On Mar 9, 2007 wrote:
forgot to say have only just joined this site and you and Jubilant seem to be the best story tellers so far, going to see what else I can find
On Mar 10, 2007 bandgeek12 wrote:
awesome. i still feel bad for Jack.
On Mar 10, 2007 wrote:
On Mar 14, 2007 wrote:
brilliant story.I started to think he was druged or something.
On Mar 19, 2007 wrote:
loved it
On Mar 27, 2007 sallyhails wrote:
Had to rate this a 5 so I'm leaving another comment
On Mar 31, 2007 WordCobbler wrote:
Oh wow!!! I couldn't stop reading. It really was a rollercoaster. Glad everything worked out in the end. Red was a great friend to Jack.
I gave this a 5.
On Apr 1, 2007 wrote:
felt so bad for him , glad it got sorted
On Apr 2, 2007 wrote:
Poor old Jack, glad Red sorted him out
On Apr 2, 2007 wrote:
A good read
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On Apr 4, 2007 wrote:
poor jack
On Apr 6, 2007 wrote:
im glad red looked after him
On Apr 7, 2007 wrote:
brilliant story,
for Red
On Apr 8, 2007 wrote:
Am pulling out all your stories , just found them. Brilliant
On Apr 20, 2007 wrote:
well done Red
On Apr 27, 2007 jerif wrote:
On May 15, 2007 wrote:
I wish I had a red in my life
On May 15, 2007 wrote:
My friend told me about your stories great stuff
On May 15, 2007 wrote:
Nice change from some of the other stories great read
On May 15, 2007 wrote:
Such a change from the usual, great plot, you grabbed my attention from the very start, well done.
On May 16, 2007 wrote:
nice story
On May 16, 2007 wrote:
Going to spend a while reading your stories, enjoyed this one very much
On May 16, 2007 wrote:
I was begining to think the policeman was going to make things difficult, bravo Red
On May 18, 2007 wrote:
My friend told me bout your page, nice stories
On Sep 13, 2007 drewsoltesz wrote:
How did I miss this? stunning!
On Oct 22, 2007 OpheliaNival wrote:
Wow, you have pleasantly surpriced me! A new story, a new boundry to break! Great
On Oct 22, 2007 OpheliaNival wrote:
sorry, I was so excited I forgot to rate...
On Nov 4, 2007 qvisn wrote:
I must have missed this one before. Great storyline and so true to life. amazing.
5.0
On Nov 15, 2007 wrote:
An absolutely brilliant story!! I'm agog at your talent!