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Welcome to my newest story! This actually started as a school project. We had to write a short story and I came up with this. Then we had to do an adaptation of the story, and I managed to convince my teacher to let me do it on the sims. That one was done like a comic, but I thought since I had the pictures I'd upload them as well. It's only one part, and be warned: I made every person who read it cry. Enjoy!

Welcome to my newest story! This actually started as a school project. We had to write a short story and I came up with this. Then we had to do an adaptation of the story, and I managed to convince my teacher to let me do it on the sims. That one was done like a comic, but I thought since I had the pictures I'd upload them as well. It's only one part, and be warned: I made every person who read it cry. Enjoy! Maggie stared brokenly at the spot where they had lowered her brother's coffin. She felt detached, as if this couldn't be happening to her. Rain dripped around her, a mere drizzle, but it did nothing to help her mood. Tears poured down her cheeks, forming a defined trail thorugh the make-up she had so carefully applied to cover the heartache. She urgently wiped te wetness away, but soon gave up. The coffin was too small. It was only three feet long and two feet wide. Coffins like that shouldn't have to made, let alone used. In all her fourteen years she hadn't seens something so cruelly unfair. Luke hadn't done anything wrong; he'd had no time to. Maggie's heart wrenched to think of everything her brother would never get to do; all that he would miss. It seemed like so long ago the Riviera's had been joyful, celebrating the thought of a new family member. "Hey kids, can you come into the living room for a minute?" Allyn's voice rang with a contained excitement. Looking up from their homework, Hunter and Maggie exchanged puzzled looks. Maggie looked at her brother and shrugged, pushing her chair back from the kitchen table, the legs making a squeaking sound along the floor. In the living room, they sat across from their parents on the couch. Hunter fidgeted, running his fingers through his dark hair, and Maggie waited expectantly, studying her parents' faces. They wore identical smiles, glowing from the inside out. Hunter's fingers tapped out an impatient rhythm on his thigh. Maggie giggled, knowing what he was thinking. People always said twins had the strange ability to sense each others' thoughts, and though some sets didn't, Maggie and Hunter did. He gave her a sideways smile. "Okay, spill! I can't take it anymore!" Hunter cried. His parents laughed. "Well, I got some news today that will no doubt come as a surprise," Allyn, their mother said slyly. Maggie sighed, exasperated. "I went to the doctor a few days ago and today your father and I discovered that, well, I'm pregnant!" There was a stunned silence. "Are you sure?" Maggie asked hesitantly. It had been fourteen years since Allyn had been pregnant with Hunter and Maggie. But their mother was only thirty-six, not too old. "Definitely," their father, Mark, said. Hunter and Maggie gaped at each other, amazed. Maggie was the first to break the silence with a small giggle. Soon they were all laughing, hugging, revelling in the thought that soon they would be joined by a young one; one more person to complete their already wonderful life. Hunter wrapped one arm around Maggie's shoulders. She shivered despite her brother's warmth surrounding her. The small service finished and the crowd dispersed. People approached the family tentatively, offering words of encouragment and sympathy. Allyn and Mark graciously thanked them, masking their own grief in a facade of strength. Soon everyone was gone, and the Rivieras were left in an empty graveyard, staring at the gravestone of someone's whose life was cut too short. Mark turned and guided Allyn towards the parking lot, Maggie and Hunter following slowly. They got into the car, still draped in silence. As Maggie buckled her seatbelt, she considered her family. Mark appeared weary, as if life were too strenuous. Her mother didn't even try to hide her sorrow, the tears flowing down her cheeks mutely, dripping off onto her black dress. Hunter was bound in stony silence, staring out the window at the passing scenery. This worried Maggie the most. Often Hunter didn't share his feelings until it was too late and they all came out in a rush. Maggie bowed her head and offered up a short prayer, asking God to give Hunter the comfort he needed. Maggie wasn't sure how she felt. Things had moved in a whirlwind, and Maggie felt left behind in the dust. Sadness enveloped her, but there was something tugging at her heart, something that resembled hope. Luke's life couldn't have been in vain. God had a plan for everyone, and Maggie was sure He wasn't finished with Luke's. "There's news of a strom approaching, one worse than Cambridge has seen in years." The newscaster didn't seem that worried, and Maggie wondered how bad the storm could really be. She heard the front door open and she switched the TV off. Her parents had returned from a doctor's appointment and Maggie knew they would be expecting her to help get dinner ready. Maggie smiled thinking of Luke. That was the name they had chosen after finding out the baby was a boy. She stood and wandered to the front door. "So, what do you guys want for dinner" Maggie said, and then froze at the expresson on her parents' faces. Her father's eyes were glazed, dismayed, and her mother was sobbing. "What's wrong?" Maggie whispered as Hunter came up behind her. Mark looked upon them with misery, and then began to speak.

~The Legacy~ (not a "legacy")

Apr 25, 2008 by iluvhorses13
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    On Apr 27, 2008 OCIKITTEN wrote:

    It was really good. Thanks for sharing it with us.\:wub\: \:rah\:

    On Apr 27, 2008 S.Cains wrote:

    An amazingly heartwarming story. When you said it made everyone who read it cry, I was reading and thinking, why would people cry? It was only when it came to the end that I found my throat clogging and difficult to hold back the tears. So great job, and definitely enter that contest! \:D

    On Apr 27, 2008 gatorgurl_0402 wrote:

    This story is sooo good it has to be the best ive ever read.I still have tears going down my cheek.\:\( \:\( \:\) Very good job

    On Apr 27, 2008 captainlicious wrote:

    A very sad part, but very well written \:rah\:

    On Apr 27, 2008 wrote:

    God, I understand why everyone cried\:\( But I didn't cause one's death brought life to three\:\) Congrats, your story will deffo break some hearts\;\) You should enter this story to a contest\:rah\:

    On Apr 27, 2008 wickedgoddess_athena711 wrote:

    aww...it's so sad.\:\( it made me almost want to cry..
    nice story. \:rah\:

    On Apr 27, 2008 misha1013 wrote:

    awwww. the story was sad and sweet.....very touching\:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Apr 27, 2008 artrui wrote:

    wuuuu-\:rah\:

    On Apr 28, 2008 wrote:

    great story \:P \:\) \:rah\:

    On Apr 29, 2008 smelly.sims wrote:

    Aww... \:D

    On Apr 29, 2008 wrote:

    \:D oooh...so...sad...so great....so...love it! cryin' rivers by now...

    On Apr 30, 2008 wrote:

    This was a truly heartwrming story. I never cry(ask anyone I know), but this made my eyes get watery. That's very big for me. And no it's not because I'm not sad, pain just doesn't affect me in the way it affects most people. I loved it though.\:wub\: \:wub\: \:wub\:

    On May 1, 2008 qvisn wrote:

    Im soft, crying buckets full. I understand but its still heartbreaking, Great for the contest, go for it.\:wub\:

    On May 1, 2008 twinkletoe wrote:

    You did a fine job on this. I would encourage you to enter it. It is wonderful to write something that envokes certain feelings in others. The thing that I also found in your story was the message and the purpose of Luke's life.

    On May 2, 2008 Karie wrote:

    You did a great job! You made me cry too (just in case you are keeping track \;\) ) I thought your story was very well written, and the pictures were wonderful too. I like how you changed them to black and white to show the past. Your sims are very pretty/handsome. Keep up the good work! Karie

    On May 2, 2008 Karie wrote:

    p.s. FOR SURE ENTER THAT STORY INTO THE CONTEST!! \:D

    On May 2, 2008 drewsoltesz wrote:

    Very touching and heartwarming, a wonderful story, well done indeed!!\:rah\:

    On May 4, 2008 joker52455 wrote:

    WOW! This story was.....I can't even think of a word for it. \:rah\: 100.0

    On May 4, 2008 joker52455 wrote:

    WOW! This story was.....I can't even think of a word for it. \:rah\: 1000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000.0

    On May 5, 2008 Nadindi wrote:

    omg...that made me cry so hard! awwwwww...5.0 for sures!!

    On May 7, 2008 studyofme wrote:

    This was a very touching story. You are a talented writer. I loved the small descriptive details that you added so I could see the characters moving and breathing.

    But I would make a suggestion. In some parts, I found myself needing to do research and it distracted from the story. Brain cancer can happen in the womb? I had to look it up as best I could and came to Fetal Brain Tumor. For one that sounds more official. That is probably something a doctor would tell the family, plus it sounds serious and believable.

    Also, can eyes be transplanted? ^^; That took away from the ending for me because I stopped reading to look it up. I don't think eyes can be transplanted. Certainly parts of it, but not the whole eye.

    I hope you don't take offense. Frankly, I think you're an amazing writer and I was on the verge of tears the whole time. I can't tell you how striking this story was (but I can try). I especially loved the ending so the family could see that his young life wasn't wasted.

    And I especially love the way your story unfolds going from the present to the past. It transitions so well and is very effective.

    Sorry for the long comment, but your story really got to me. It was just very well done.

    On May 7, 2008 nemesisstar wrote:

    Beautiful story. So touching and it really did make me cry!

    On May 9, 2008 civetinja wrote:

    Great story ! Thanks for sharing !\:\)

    On May 17, 2008 cpyle822 wrote:

    \:wacko\: Wow, you are a very talented writer and \:rah\: \:rah\: It was a beautiful tale, Great screen shots too, and I hope you got an A+\:D \:D

    On May 17, 2008 arc1801 wrote:

    \:rah\:

    On May 30, 2008 Kungfuchicken wrote:

    WOW THAT WAS IINNCCCRRREEEDDDIIIBBBBBLLLLEEE!!! You are a fantastic writer and one of the best authors on TSR! Truthfully!! \:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Jun 7, 2008 doraboots wrote:

    It is a Wonderful story, I like so much, very very nice ^__^ many stars for you ehehehe

    On Jul 3, 2008 xox*LuvRocs*xox wrote:

    oh it made me want 2 cry but i didnt\:\( its its so sad and great story:rah

    On Aug 1, 2008 gtsimsgirl12808 wrote:

    thats so sad it made me cry\:\(

    On Oct 4, 2008 Livdude wrote:

    That was so touching, really is. I can feel the tears starting. Sniff Sniff.But that was truely writers talent. \:\) Well Done

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