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Welcome to the third chapter of NOIR!
After broken lots, Sims who died suddenly, currupted download files, a Sim game that crashed over 10 times and too less free time, I finally could finish this chapter! Thanks to eveybody who supported me and gave feedback. As always, please write a comment and rate, leave suggestions and criticism if you have some and feel free to ask me if you have questions. And don't forget that English isn't my first language ^____^
*Thanks to the 5th Muse for the brushes!*
After broken lots, Sims who died suddenly, currupted download files, a Sim game that crashed over 10 times and too less free time, I finally could finish this chapter! Thanks to eveybody who supported me and gave feedback. As always, please write a comment and rate, leave suggestions and criticism if you have some and feel free to ask me if you have questions. And don't forget that English isn't my first language ^____^
*Thanks to the 5th Muse for the brushes!* Aiden had waken up early. The morning sun was shining brithly through the windows, filled the whole room with light and dispeled all darkness.
Aiden thought about the things that had happened yesterday night during the blackout. It had been the first time that he had told somebody about his fear of "noir", the fear about the darkness, the black and the dark. He looked at Hannah. Still sleeping she looked like a little angel and her blonde hair that framed her pretty face intensified this, too.
Aiden couldn't stop smiling. He remined how she had calmed him down, how understanding she had been for him, a vampire who is afraid of the darkness. She had searched a flashlight and some candles to lighten up the room a bit and had cared for him until the blackout was over at 4 am. After they had switched on the lights, they both had fallen asleep right away. Hannah's eyelids started flickering and some moments later she opened her eyes and she sat up.
"Good morning, Hannah." Aiden said and Hannah turned to him. "Good morning!" Hannah replied smiling. "Could you sleep?"
Aiden nodded. "Although you snored." He added laughting then.
"What?" Hannah meant frightened. "I didn't!" "Okay, you didn't!" Aiden admitted grinning. "But you should have seen you face as I told you, you would!"
"Stop fooling me, better let's have breakfast. I'm going to die of hunger!" During Hannah stood up slowly and still tired, Aiden already stood in front the big window, stretching and ready for the day.
"Do you want to use the bathroom first?" Hannah wanted to know, trying to suppress the wish to yawn. "I don't care. You can go first, too." Aiden answered and went to her, hugging her from behind. He closed his eyes and laid his head on her shoulder. "And thanks for yesterday. You helped me very much."
"You know that I did that gladly." Hannah replied.
_________________________________________ More than a hour later, after both had taken a shower and got dressed, they sat in the dining room and eated the pastries Hannah's mother had boughted.
A long time they sat there only talking and laughing. "Do you remember that you've asked me, why I don't like me room?" Aiden wanted to know suddenly. He starred at the wall behind Hannah and the look of his eyes changed. It got colder. Hannah swallowed her last bite. "Yes I do, but if you don't want to tell me you don't have to." She could imagen how difficult it was for Aiden to speak about this topic. For her it was the same, she couldn't speak about her fears and problems easily.
"Maybe you didn't notice it, maybe you did." Aiden began. The fear in his eyes was to made out clearly. "My room has no windows." he told her finally. "Do you understand what that means?"
Hannah nodded slowly. No windows mean no sunlight that can come into the room. And for somebody how is afraid of "noir" is a place without light the pure horror.
"But there are lamps, aren't they?" Hannah inquiered. "There are, but ... " Aiden made a short break " but my father sometimes uses the fuse box to turn them all off suddenly and this is ... " his voice broke away.
"Your father is crazy." Hannah meant, unaible to say something constructive. "How can he do such things?"
"He can, because he's the head of my family and my father." he answered. "Hey, by the way, do you want to visit your sister today?" He asked then.
"Sure I want to!" Hannah answered. "You know that I'm worried about her."
"You know that you don't have to be, she is in good hands." Aiden meant and laid his hand gently over Hannah's. The butterflies in her stomach began turning somersaults again.
_________________________________________ This was the way, the two did it for the next three days: First they visited Cloe, Hannah's sister, then they did something together. Happily there were holidays, so Hannah had time and both spended so much time together as possible.
________________________________________ At the fourth day, it was already late as they arrived in the sky-scraper of the MFV company, that Aiden's father owns. It was the place where Hannah's sister Cloe was to get healed.
On the way to Cloe, Hannah and Aiden saw James and the vampire, who had healed Cloe the last time, standing in front of Cloe's room, discussing intensly
"Why isn't he with my sister?" Hannah asked cared. "Isn't he the one, who should heal her? Did something go wrong?"
"I don't think so, but why don't you ask him?" Aiden replied.
And so she did. "Did something happen with my sister?" Hannah wanted to know from the vampire. Her voice began shaking because of nerviness and fear that something was with her sister. "No, she is alright." The vampire explained and his eyes starred deep into Hannah's. "She nearly completely heald now, tomorrow she should be healty again. She doesn't need my help anymore, she only needs to rest a bit more." "You see, everything is alright." Aiden said confident.
"Can I go into her room?" Hannah wanted to know. Until now she hadn't been allowed to.
"Yes, you can. But don't expect that your sister notices you." The blond vampire warned. Hannah went to the seethrough door and went in. Cold air streamed out of the room and she began shivering a bit. But she didn't care about, she only wanted to go to her sister. Hannah looked at Cloe. There was still the blue cloud around her and she was still flying over the ground, but that didn't scare her anymore. Slowly she stepped nearer to her. "Hi Cloe, do you know who's here?" Hannah asked. She knew that her sister wouldn't give an answer, but she didn't care. "If someone is in the hospital, you visit him and speak with him also!" she thought. Carefully she stroke over her older sister's hair. In the moment she touched the blue clouds she winced shortly, but only because she had expecated that something would happen if she would do it. But nothing happened.
After some more minutes, talking to Cloe, who still didn't give any sign that she knew that her sister was there, Hannah looked through the window to the corridor outside.
The way Aiden stood there watching her scared her. His eyes starred at her and her sister and his gaze was cold. The vampire next to him seemed to tell him something, what Aiden didn't seem to like, too. Hannah turned around again to her sister.
"It won't need much time and then you are allright again. We'll see us tomorrow." She told the flying body of her sister and she didn't got an answer again. "Bye Cloe." Hannah said and left the room. As Hannah stood in the corridor again, Aiden and the other vampire were in the middle of a conflict. James wasn't there anymore.
"Your father and I, we both have the same opinion. You don't have any brothers, so you will be the head of the family one day. That is the reason." The blond vampire told Aiden seriously.
"I've never said that I want to be the head of the family I don't care about what you and my father had decided!" Aiden replied angrily.
The vampire's gaze gouged into Aiden's eyes. "You forget your position in the family." He said finally and in his voice was a dangerous undertone. "You will do, what we tell you."
__________________________________________ James had gone into the big living room.
"Mr. Davis, did you have asked for me?" he said politely as he entered.
"I guess you wouldn't be here, if I hadn't." was the cold answer he got.
James approached the crimson sofa. "Did you do what I had ordered you?" Eric asked as he could hear Jame's footsteps stopping in front of him.
"Yes, Sir. I told Adrianna that she shouldn't show Aiden the book of the families, if he asks for it." James confirmed fast.
"Did you also tell her, why?"
"Because we have to protect the family. But Sir, if I'm allowed to ask, why was it necessary to tell Adrianna that? Why isn't Aiden allowed to see the book?" James added. "That's something you don't need to care about." Eric replied. His mouth moved to a evil grin. He would never allow that anybody expect him and Adrianna would get to know of the secret. Not even Aiden had any idea that his whole life was a huge lie.
Eric's blind eyes trembled shortly as he thought what would happen if it would unearth the truth. It wasn't a secret that Aiden was afraid of noir, but if the truth about his descent would come popular, Eric and Aiden would be banned.
And he would do everything, that this would not happen.
__________________________________________ Aiden and Hannah had went to Aiden's room.
"What did this vampire told you?" Hannah asked the eighth or ninth time. Aiden teared his black hair. In the same moment as he opened his mouth to answer, his pet Bird approached to land at his shoulder. After it sat there, Aiden finally began to speak:
"He told me that I'm not allowed to see you again after your sister is healthy. He and my father forbid me to date you or another human girl, because I'm a pureblood and will be the head of the family one day." He made a short break. "And like you can image, I'm not very thrilled of this." "But what is the reason? It can't be that the tell you everything that you have to do!" Hannah replied. She knew that after her sister's recovery, her memories would be changed so she wouldn't have any of what had happened and any of Aiden, but she had thought that they could meet after that again.
"It's a custom that a pureblood only maries another pureblood, so the bloodline and the family doesn't die out. I guess my father wants that i marry soon." Aiden explained. "I'm tied to this rules." "Rules are there for being broken, aren't they?" Hannah whispered. "But it's your choice. I just want you to know I would love to see you again, after I lost all my memories about you." She leand forward slowly and gave him a shy kiss on his cheek.
Aiden felt like his feelings would explode. He embraced Hannah gently and after she didn't pushed him back, he kissed her softly.
Finally the stopped kissing and only thing both could do was smiling. They didn't need any words for express what the felt for each other, they could see it in the faces of the other. "Maybe I don't have to break the rules!" Aiden sudddenly said loudly and excited.
"There it goes, the romantic." Hannah thought smiling as she saw the childlish happines in Aiden's eyes. "What do you mean?" She asked then.
"I'm going to tell you later, let's go!"
_________________________________________ 45 minutes later, they were driving in a deep forest. "Could you please tell me now where we are going to?" Hannah asked for the fourth time. She was curious where they were going to, because Aiden haven't said one word yet.
"We won't drive much longer." He only promised. "We are going to meet the person, who is the only one who can undo me from the rules of my family." And like he promised, he left the road after a minute and drove the car slowly a narrow path along - that wasn't really a path, but only a piece of land without trees. "Well...Aiden? Do you really think that we are right?" Hannah inquired cared. She really didn't liked the slope some centimeters next to the vehicle.
"Don't worry we are right here. Let's get out, we need to go a bit." He confirm and left the car. "We need to go?" Hannah repeated, unsure if that was the a joke.
Aiden raised an eyebrow and nodded seriously.
"At least could you please tell me who is that person we are going to?" she repeated her question.
Aiden sighted. "Do you remember the vampire who healed you sister?" He asked and after Hannah had nodded he continued. "He is a royalblood, he is one of the first vampires, born in French, related with different royal house and so old, that he already stopped counting the years. He and the other royalbloods still have the abilties, that died out over the centuries." "All of the royalbloods have very important duties and take care for all other vampires, if they need to. The one we are going to now, responsible for the book of the families."
"What's this?" Hannah interrupted him.
"In this book are all family trees registered. Everytime a vampire is born, it's written down. It's not allowed to change something, this book is holy."
"And why do you want to see it?" Hannah didn't get his point.
"I won't be allowed to see you again, because I'm a pureblood. But if there is anybody in my family, who isn't one, I'm not a pureblood, too. So I wouldn't be tied to the rules anymore." Aiden explained. "Do you think there is any real possibility that there is sombody in your family tree, who isn't a pureblood?" Hannah asked doubting.
"Have you ever thought about the possibility that a vampire could be afraid of the darkness?" Aiden replied and hugged her gently.
"Let's try it at least." he whispered into her ear. They began walking and already after some meters Hannah started sweating.
"Why didn't you tell me that we have to go? Then I would have changed my clothes." she moaned as both climbed up a slope.
"You should better stop crying and take care where you're going." Aiden said laughing. "If you fall down this slope you would hurt yourself badly. For me it wouldn't be any problem, but for you as a human it's dangerous." He added. "So don't fall down, okay?"
"I'm not that stupid."
"Really?"
"Yes!" "Well then let's go on. It's already 7 pm, I don't want to stay here until it's dark." Aiden said and both began going again.
After about 15 minutes later, Aiden stopped walking. "What is this?" Hannah threw it for a loop as she saw where they had arrived.
Aiden didn't answer right away.
"This is the graveyard where the most important vampires of my family are buried." he said finally and started walking on. "This looks like in a movie..." Hannah meant quietly as both followed the way between the graves. "I never thought that you have something like graveyards." Hannah stammered.
"Why shouldn't we? We are beings like you humans and of course we want that our dead rest in peace." Aiden answered quietly.
"But why are we here? I thought we wanted to meet this royalblood?" Hannah wanted to know.
Aiden didn't answered and strided to a tomb that stood raised in the middle of big columns. "We are here because I wanted to see my mother's tomb." Aiden said and laid his hands carefully on it. Hannah watched him, as he stood there without saing one word. She only could imagine how it has to be to grow up without a mother - but with a cruel father.
Suddenly Aiden turned around. "We don't have to go on, if you don't want to." Aiden meant as he saw the expression in Hannah's face.
She shoke her head. "No, now I'm here, now I can go on, too." she replied. "Are you sure?" Aiden asked and hugged her strongly. Hannah laid her head on his shoulder.
"Yes, I'm. It's just that this whole place makes me sad." They walked back a bit and turned in a wide path.
"And what's this?" Hannah asked as a big, ruinous building came in sight.
"That's where the royalblood lives in and takes care of the book of the families." Aiden told her.
Hannah raised an eyebrow. "Looks very royal. Must be a nice place for living." They got nearer and now Hannah could see the big holes in the thick stonewalls.
"It's a miracle that this thing still stands." she mumbled. Both climbed up the old wood stairs that creaked incredible loudly as they stepped on it.
"How old is this here, did you say?" Hannah asked cared, because the stairs seemed to break under their wight.
"If you want to know the truth, I have no idea." Aiden meant and opened the rusty door. Aiden and Hannah entered the building. Altough Hannah wasn't very thrilled to go in, she never thought one second, that she doesn't want to go in. She would do everyting, to make it possible that she and Aiden could meet again. And she knew that he would do all, too. "Aiden!" Suddenly said a melodic voice from the back of the room, where they stood now. "It's nice to see you again." "It's good to see that you are healty, Adrianna." Aiden said politely and also bowed shortly.
Hannah glanced around. "Aiden what is this?" she whispered to him. She looked at the old tombs, at the black stature and every detail needed her attention. "Well, why are you here, Aiden?" Adrianna wanted to know, ignoring Hannah completly. "I don't think that you are only here, because you want to visit me, aren't you?" "I would like to see the book of the families, please." Aiden asked her. "It's very important for me that I control something. So if you would allow me to - " "No." Adrianna said emphatic.
"But why?" Aiden replied suprised. He had never heard that a vampire, who wanted to see the book, wasn't allowed to.
"I doesn't matter why, pureblood." Adrianna told him condescending. "Seems like you forget your position in the family. If I say "no", it means "no", and don't you dare to veto!" "Aiden let's go." Hannah stammered scared of the vampire and push Aiden to the door.
"But I want to know why I'm not allowed to see it!" He replied.
"She won't show you, so let's go. Please!" "You should do what she says." Adrianna said and watched through one of the wholes in the building. "It's getting dark. And a vampire who is afraid of noir shouldn't be outside during the night." She turned around and went away from Aiden and Hannah. Some seconds later she heard that the door was opened and was closed again.
She didn't turned around. She walked back slowly to the end of the room and sat down opposite of the book of the families that laid on the stonetable. She sighted. "I'm sorry Aiden." Adrianna whispered. "But I did it only for the family. One day if you know everything, you will understand."
________________________________________ Aiden rushed through the forest that. The stars and the fullmoon gave luckily so much light that it was still bright enough for him, so that he could suppress his fear of noir.
"Come Hannah!" he shouted over his shoulder, so she began to run to catch him up. He didn't slowed down and so she was next to him first when they had arrived at the graveyard. "Please stop a second." Hannah panted and she flung her arms around him so he had to wait.
"I'm sorry." Aiden said quietly. "I couldn't change her mind."
"You did what you could." Hannah meant. "And that's what counts. Maybe we find another possibility how to prevent that we can't see us again."
"Maybe." He replied. But he knew that they wouldn't find anything. Tomorrow Hannah would loose all her memories about what had happened. About him.
That was the truth and he couldn't change it. They started going back to the car. They followed the path through the forest and for Aiden, it got harder and harder to defend himself against his fear of noir with every minute. "Did you heard this?" Hannah asked suddenly. Her voice shaked and her eyes starred into the forest, that began to get darker with every second. Frightened she grapped Aiden's hand and both harked.
"There was nothing." Aiden finally meant. "Come along, let's go. I only want to stay here as long as necessary." Then he could hear it, too. A deep, long snarl that only wanted to show that the being, who had produced these sounds, wasn't very peacful.
Aiden pointed with his fingers between the big trees. "It's coming from there."
"Great to know. Could we please go back?" Hannah replied and her fingernails digged into Aiden's arm, during she clung to it. The snarl came nearer. And finally, both could see, where the noises came from: A big, silvergrey wolf stood between the cypresses, the ears laied back aggressively and showing his long, sharp teeth. It was ready to attack.
Hannah started screaming. "Wait, Hannah!" Aiden cat-called out as she ran through the forest, without having any idea, where she was running to. "Hannah, stop running!" he repeated, but because she didn't, he followed her as fast as he could. After some moments he had nearly catched her up.
"Damn, Hannah, WAIT! There is only the slope!" he told her screaming but either Hannah couldn't her him or she was too much in panic, because she didn't get slower. It has been Hannah's instinct that had told her she has to run. The big wolf had scared her so much that she had forgotten everything, besides the wish of running away.
"Hannah! Watch it!" Aiden yelled behind her, but it was already too late. Hannah couldn't stop or slow down, because she had run too fast and had to much swing and so, she nearly stepped over the brink. Hannah's feet searched safety hold on the slippery stone, but couldn't find any.
Her right foot slipped and slided of the stone. And Hannah began to fall.
~~~ TO BE CONTINNUED ~~~
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On Dec 15, 2007 pim1979 wrote:
On Dec 15, 2007 qasert wrote:
On Dec 15, 2007 Freya0804 wrote:
On Dec 15, 2007 Zela wrote:
WOW! I want more! All of your sims are so pretty, especially Adrianna.
I almost shouting myself for Hannah to stop running! I hope she is going to be alright... 
On Dec 15, 2007 Quengel wrote:
WOW! What a thrilling part again! You should write books in the future, real life, not Sims life
Amazing work again!!!
On Dec 15, 2007 selena1125 wrote:
Can't wait for the next part to get out I love this story so much! 5.0
On Dec 15, 2007 maxi king wrote:
On Dec 15, 2007 hellyz wrote:
Awesome like always!!
On Dec 15, 2007 trolzgirl wrote:
COOL COOL COOL !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 10000000.00000000
On Dec 15, 2007 iluvhorses13 wrote:
Wow! SO good! I love it. Please get the next one up soon! I understand the crashing and such. Quite the annoyance.
On Dec 15, 2007 dawanflower wrote:
Wonderful part!!!
On Dec 15, 2007 sunny33 wrote:
omg!!! i'm wondering what's going to happen !!
On Dec 15, 2007 wrote:
the story is great, but Hannah is UGLY and Aiden has such a gay face
On Dec 15, 2007 xtamadea wrote:
Great chapter once again!!! Wow, you've been through hell to make this story happen for the rest of us. Thumbs up for you!!!
I don't even know where to start commenting. Everything was fabulous, from the original storyline (royalblood, pureblood, vampire graveyard), the set, the pictures, the characters.. The whole package just screams beautiful!!! You were worried that it's going to be too long, but believe me I wished it didn't have to end too soon. And evil cliffhanger too!!! Your English has improved lots and you've become this great storywriter. I'll be on the lookout for more of your stories 
-xta-
On Dec 15, 2007 binky13 wrote:
Wow. Such a great ending to the story.
On Dec 15, 2007 Zayury wrote:
On Dec 15, 2007 xtamadea wrote:
Okay, I know I already commented on your story, Sweetcharming, but I really want to comment on the person who commented the story before me. I don't think that person's comment was nice or constructive at all. I even find it offensive to some people. That person said: "Hannah is UGLY and Aiden has such a gay face". Why would you judge someone by looks alone? And do have something against gay people?? Please, people, show some respect to the storywriter who've worked so hard to bring this story to you by giving constructive feedback. Geez.
On Dec 15, 2007 wrote:
Oh My God! Please, write the next part as soon as you can. Please! Your story is one of the best I've ever read.
On Dec 15, 2007 mangooo1 wrote:
Amazing and exciting part! Poor Hannah I hope she won't get hurt. It's really interesting now, I'm curious about what's in this book that Aiden can't see
Can't wait for the next chapter 
On Dec 15, 2007 plyangel456 wrote:
Wonderful story I loved how you left a cliffhanger. I just hope that Hannah doesn't get hurt. -plyangel456-
On Dec 15, 2007 wrote:
Wow, this story gets better and better everytime !! Well done, Sweetcharming
On Dec 15, 2007 muaxxx2004 wrote:
OMG! Excellent as always, I wish that she doesn't get hurt, I think that if he couldn't save her, he is going to transform her in a vampire....
On Dec 15, 2007 misha1013 wrote:
THIS IS GREAT I CANT WAIT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENED NEXT....
On Dec 15, 2007 Saoz wrote:
This is brilliant. I think Aidan is a great character. I can't wait to see what secrets his father is hiding.
On Dec 15, 2007 Nenehunni wrote:
OMG - i've just read your stories there just well..... WOW, AWSOME, COOL, SUPER, EXELLENT, awsome
please please please hurry up ad write the next one i want to know what happens
On Dec 15, 2007 candy820 wrote:
I loved this chapter. 5.0 here
On Dec 15, 2007 leplume wrote:
On Dec 15, 2007 MinnieID wrote:
CLIFFHANGER! No pun intended.
I hope the next chapter comes sooner than this one did.
On Dec 15, 2007 wrote:
Your screenshots are gorgeous - and your English is getting much better. And Aiden is such a doll. Good job!
On Dec 15, 2007 sara_87 wrote:
Kepp doing your thing! This story rocks!!!!
On Dec 15, 2007 BoodaMae wrote:
Hey Sweetcharming,
the storyline!!! You have such a great imagination!! And I totally agree with xtamadea, that comment was rude and NOT nice at all! And what IS wrong with Aiden's face?! Even if he does look "gay", what's wrong with that? Plus, Hannah is BEAUTIFUL!! I think that comment is mean and degradeful! If they think the characters are "gay and ugly" then they don't need to be reading it, and they can kiss my big toe!!! So there! 
Well, I LOVED the story and I don't think anybody in there is "ugly or gay"! 
I rate it a 5.0, and I hope your game doesn't act up on you!
This part of the story was GREAT!!! The pictures and CC were really cool, and I LOVE
On Dec 15, 2007 wrote:
Characters are fantastic, thanks for sharing!
On Dec 16, 2007 converse02 wrote:
beautifully written, awesome storyline, and your english has improved. And I think your characters are beautiful,
sorry about your troubles.
5++
On Dec 16, 2007 samcactus101 wrote:
THIS WAS AN EXCELLENT CHAPTER!! THE PICTURES WERE ABSOLUTELY STUNNING, WITH THE WAY YOU DID THE CLIFF, THE JUNGLE.... they were so nice to look at
I REALLY WISH I HAD YOUR PICTURE EDITING SKILLS. I WANNA KNOW HOW YOU DID the picture where Hannah & Aiden were hanging out, the 3 pix overlap the other a little bit
You have such an imagination
The story is fantastically awesome too!
YEAH I POSSITIVELY AGREE WITH WHAT xtamadea said about that someone who commented Hannah is ugly & Aiden has such a gay face. HANNAH IS NOT ONE BIT UGLY AND AIDEN IS SO CHARMING!
EXCELLENT STORY, keep it up
Your English is perfect and I'm giving a solid 5.0 your for writing talent.
On Dec 16, 2007 atangki wrote:
Woooohhh.. Very well written!
On Dec 16, 2007 goodie2shoes wrote:
Oh, no, Hannah!
Don't worry, I did notice the English mistakes a bit but they didn't bother me too much! 
Hannah and Aiden are 
ly, so I agree with Sam. I hope that Hannah is okay! 
*worries* Can't wait to find out what happens! 
On Dec 16, 2007 goodie2shoes wrote:
Besides, Hannah's definitely beautiful
and I don't see how Aiden has a "gay face". If that meant Aiden's got an angellic (sp?) face then I agree. 
*hugs Aiden*
On Dec 16, 2007 AshGreg wrote:
awsome story cant wait to see the next one
On Dec 16, 2007 wrote:
WHHHHHHAAAAAATTTTTT!!!!! NNOOOOOO!!
u cant stop thier! what about hannah???!!111111111111
On Dec 16, 2007 OpheliaNival wrote:
Oh, I have waited for this and finally I got the chance to sit down and enjoy it! Thank you so much, the story is so charming and your pictures are so well-composed! I don't know what else to say other than: I love it!
On Dec 16, 2007 wrote:
I LOVE it! Awesome continuation!
On Dec 16, 2007 Claudia35 wrote:
well done!!! i am a fan of ur stories but noir is my fave
On Dec 16, 2007 drewsoltesz wrote:
What a continuation! Your last screenshots were moody and gripping! Love guys named 'Aidan' and I love a good cliffhanger! Well done!
On Dec 17, 2007 kitfu11 wrote:
Simply amazing!
What a cliffhanger, literally! I sure hope Hannah is going to be fine!!! And that she and Aiden get to be together! 
And you did such an amazing job with the graveyard and cliffside, beautiful!
On Dec 17, 2007 Kenvjo wrote:
my heart was racing! great cliffhanger!
On Dec 17, 2007 Lucreecia wrote:
just love it
ich kann das nächste kapitel kaum erwarten 
die bilder sind alle so detaliert und schön und die gefühle sind so toll dargestellt *-* ich liebe die story 
ich hoffe das nächste kapitel dauert nich so lang 
^^
das hier war wieder klasse
ganz liebe grüße ~lucy~ have a nice day
On Dec 17, 2007 RIDance wrote:
My goodness. I hope she is okay after her fall! And that somehow, they will find a way to be together. And Aiden doesn't really seem like he wants much to do with this pureblood stuff so I hope he finds out the truth about his family and can live life the way he wants to. Great job!
Rach
On Dec 17, 2007 SpaciKathy wrote:
WOW, a fantastic part, can't wait to see what is happen next.
On Dec 18, 2007 Eve70 wrote:
On Dec 18, 2007 SeasonsRDaBomb wrote:
On Dec 18, 2007 Alyosha wrote:
STUNNING... this has made me SPEECHLESS>...
On Dec 20, 2007 jero22 wrote:
wow, love it
On Dec 20, 2007 wickedgoddess_athena711 wrote:
yyyyaaayy! I've been waiting for this chapter! the pictures are so clear and the setting was beautiful. once again i love the expressions in the faces of the characters! It helps the characters come to life! Great job! I'm babbling so much already, I'll save it in the guestbook! Keep up the good work!
On Dec 21, 2007 Sk8Iowa wrote:
Awwa, I hope she doesn't get hurt!! But then again, she's falling down a massive rocky cliff. Maybe Aiden will use his 'fast vampire moves' and catch her!! Just hoping! lol. I loved it! It was great! Your english is getting so much better!! And you know, if you ever get confused on a sentence or such, I will be glad to help you.
I thought your screenshots were amazing!! You can see how much work you put into them, and how hard you worked to get the facial expressions! I can't wait for the next part!! I hope you have better luck with your game this time!
On Dec 22, 2007 Kingdom hearts wrote:
On Dec 22, 2007 ,xPheobe. wrote:
I Think NOIR is good..awsome story! I Love the graphics and story line awsome Duddette..
On Dec 22, 2007 pdddddykx wrote:
I love this story!! It's so good!!! I wish I could write like that!! I can't wait till the next part is out!!!
On Dec 25, 2007 loverien wrote:
I've been waiting for the next chapter to this story! I'm very interested in it! I enjoy reading paranormal or vampire stories. So this has been a real treat. It has great pictures! I love the details and the expressions of the characters! I hope Aiden finds his happily-ever-after despite his freaky-controlling relatives.
I can't wait to hear what happens next!
On Dec 29, 2007 shannon1095 wrote:
I love this story! I can't wait for the next part! If I could, i'd give you a 10.0. 5.0!
On Jan 10, 2008 captainlicious wrote:
Awesome! I can't wait for the next part!!!
On Jan 23, 2008 cptnemo6 wrote:
super story
On Feb 6, 2008 aaaaaaac wrote:
Great chapter!
On Mar 9, 2008 Meganmac92 wrote:
I love the Noir and i love all the costume and the face
On Mar 20, 2008 Deedee09 wrote:
kwl !
On Mar 21, 2008 love-marta wrote:
WOW! What a thrilling part again! You should write books in the future, real life, not Sims life Amazing work again!!!
i love it. i't amazing 
On Mar 23, 2008 Muccy wrote:
Just fantastic story. I love it!
Thank you very much!
On May 24, 2008 Cheena wrote:
especially the ending is full of tension...just great
On Jun 7, 2008 ritakwolf wrote:
On Jun 11, 2008 ishi09 wrote:
Oh no! What's going to happen to Hannah now?
Great chapter