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Welcome to the fourth chapter of NOIR!
I'm very sorry for the big delay, but I had big problems with the game again (I nearly lost the whole NOIR cast) and I'm really glad that I could finish this chapter finally.
I want to say a huge thank-you to those who supported me all the time, who defeated my story and its characters and gave me the strenght for continuing.
As always, please rate and leave (constructiv) feedback, ask me, if you want to know something, don't forget that English isn't my first language and have fun reading! :D
I'm very sorry for the big delay, but I had big problems with the game again (I nearly lost the whole NOIR cast) and I'm really glad that I could finish this chapter finally.
I want to say a huge thank-you to those who supported me all the time, who defeated my story and its characters and gave me the strenght for continuing.
As always, please rate and leave (constructiv) feedback, ask me, if you want to know something, don't forget that English isn't my first language and have fun reading! :D Hannah felt.
She shrilled as the noticed what was happening, the pure fear stood in her eyes. Rowing her arms desperated, she tried to reach an edge of the stones. Aiden had finally reached the cliff, stretching his hand to hold Hannah - but it was too late.
Luckily the big full moond spent enough light, so his fear of noir couldn't defeat him. But the wolf behind him, was ready to attack.
"Cling to the stone!" Aiden yelled and bent even more down. And really - Hannah had managed it to reach with her right hand the end of a big stone of cliff.
"Cling to it!" Aiden told her. "I'll help you and hoist you!"
Hannah replied with a simple "yeah". She wasn't able to say more, the fear of falling down was too big and benumbed her. Her hand began shaking and trembling. She was sure, she couldn't held herself not much longer. "Give me your hand!" Aiden stepped at the very end of the cliff, trying to reach Hannah.
Behind him, the grey wolf had come even nearer. Only some meters seperated them from each other. The animal was furious that somebody had entered its territory and would do everything to defeat it. It tensed its musceles, bared its teeth, lowered its head and began snarling. 'Shit.' Was the only thing what Aiden could think as he heard the wolf behind him - very close behind him. His brain begann working at full speed. If he would do something because of the animal, he would have to leave Hannah hanging, and she maybe would fall down finally. If he would help Hannah, the beast would attack him, and he couldn't help Hannah either.
Finally he knew what to do. "Let go!" Aiden said loudly.
"Are you kidding?" Hannah yelled back. Feeling that she was loosing her hold slowly, panic raised up in her.
Aiden, observing the wolf from the edge of an eye, noticed that the wolf had began rushing to him.
"Trust me!" Aiden shouted. The animal was not far away anymore. "Just do it!" And Hannah trusted him. A last time she looked at him and his eyes told her, that he would never let her down.
Then she let go. Aiden hunkered down, then he shot up and jumped off. The arms wide opened he felt through the air - faster then Hannah.
The wolf behind him missed its aim. Hannah saw with her of fear widened eyes, what Aiden had done and she understood his plan, but she didn't believe that his plan would work. He was directly over her, coming nearer with every second - but it wouldn't take long time also and both would hit the ground. "Stretch out your hand!" Aiden shouted as loud as he could and Hannah did it. Her eyes hurt because of the cold wind and so she closed them, as the suddenly felt Aidens hand grapping her strongly. One second later she felt Aiden's arms wrapping around her.
"What're you doing?" she could only cry as she noticed that they slowed down a bit. Their two bodies broke better then only one, but nevertheless they would hit the ground brutally. Finally both arrived at the ground - directly at a hard, big stone. Aiden had turned himself and Hannah in the air, so she landed on him and much softer than him. But he crashed undamped at the hard surface of the stone.
He heard his body protesting with loud clicking noises and pain hunted through his body. Aiden ignored the pain and stood up. "Are you okay, Hannah? Are you hurt?"
Hannah shook her head, although her hip hurt a bit. "I'm fine. But are you okay? I mean, I felt on you totally and you were the one who felt on the stone directly."
"Doesn't matter, I'm okay." Aiden meant and sat down next to her. Aiden hugged Hannah gently and so they sat there for several minutes, without saying a word, only glad that both had survied this fall unharmed.
"I'm sorry." Aiden said then. "I'm totally usless. I didn't managed it to get the approval for seeing the book, I couldn't protect you from falling down, and now you will loose your memories also."
"That's not true, you aren't usless." Hannah replied. "And you know that." She laid against his chest, and as he closed his arms around her stronger, she felt so save like long no more.
"Let's go back." Aiden meant finally. Both climbed carefully into the lake, that water wasn't so cold like they had expected it. Fast the crossed it, and it needed not much time, till they had reached the shore. After Aiden had helped Hannah out of the water, they went back to the car. They didn't care that they were soaked to the skin. There were more important this to care about the moment.
The light of the stars and the bright shining moon spent the light so they knew where they had to place their feets. Finally they arrived at Aiden's Lexus, got in, and Aiden began droving back to the street.
Standing at the end of the cliff, the wolf observed them leaving. Aiden chose the fastest way back to Hannah's house. All what he and she wanted, was a hot shower, something to eat and to rest a bit.
_________________________________________ It was already an hour after midnight, as Aiden and Hannah still sat chatting in Cloe's room. Talking about what had happened so far, they had lost the feeling for the time and hadn't noticed how late it already was.
"I'm going to bed now." Hannah meant finally and stood up. She was tired, the whole day had been very hard and she wanted to be rested tomorrow. "Wait a second." Aiden's hand wrapped around her waist fast and pulled her back.
Hannah felt his warm breath in her neck as he turned her around so he could look into her eyes. "I hope we'll see us again after tomorrow, but you know that I can't promise anything, don't you?" He whispered slowly and Hannah could hear his anger about this fact in his voice. She leaned her forehead against his.
"I do." She answered quietly. "But I hope that you father allows you to meet me again. You'll be the one, who has the memories about us then, I'll know nothing." "I know." Aiden replied and then he gave her most intesiv kiss he ever had given a girl.
__________________________________________ "There they are." The the royalblood vampire announced as he saw Aiden and Hannah going through the corridor. He was suprised they were in time, it was even eight minutes before the apponted 10am, and they also had found the new room, where they would finish everything.
He noticed that both didn't look very happy; but he was glad that this would be the last day they two would see eath other for a long time. 'We have to take care about the traditions' he thought.
He opened the door greeting and one moment later, Hannah had run to her sister. "Is she alright? Is she healthy again?" Hannah's eyes glanced about her sister's body that laid on a uncomfortable looking bed - not flying in a blue cloud anymore. Cloe's eyes were open and starred at the grey ceiling, but she didn't react, simply laying on the bed like a doll.
"She is totally healthy, yes." The royalblood answered smiling. "Now we only need to check if her brain and her memories have gotten over everything. You know - we ask her simple, personal questions, you tell us if her answers are right and then everything is okay."
"And she can come home again?" Hannah interrupted him.
The pureblood grinned. "Sure. We only have to change your mother's and your's memories and everything is fine. So let's start."
Aiden starred at the royalblood. He couldn't accept that Hannah's memories had to be erased. The royalblood ignoried Aiden's furious look and moved to next to Cloe. As he begun speaking again, his voice had a completly different tone; slowly, emotional and somniferous. Everyone in the room felt this voice digging into their heads, making them dizzy.
"Can you hear me, Cloe? I know you can." The vampire spoke knowing. "Cloe, what is the name of the boy, you felt in love for the first time?" Hannah held her breath. As she had asked this a long time ago, she hadn't got an answer for over two weeks, so she couldn't believe that Cloe would tell that now. So she was more suprised as Cloe turned her head and started starring into the vampire's deep eyes.
"Greg Weber."
As fast as the words had come they were gone again and Cloe had closed her mouth, but now she observed the vampire exactly and her eyes follwed every move he made. "Correct?" The pureblood asked Hannah, but didn't stop looking at her sister.
"Correct." Hannah nodded.
"Well then, write down what she says exactly, okay?" he told the receptionist that had sat behind her notebook all the time. Once he had spoken her fingers began dancing on the keyboard.
"Next question Cloe." The vampire smilied and began asking again.
__________________________________________ Aiden was watching the scene in front of him for over one hour now. The pureblood asked questions, and all answers Cloe had given so far, had been right. He knew it was only a matter of time until the royalblood would be completly sure that Cloe's brain and memories were alright.
Loud screams from outside let him turn around. "Wait you stupid bird! I said WAIT!" It was James who ran behind Aiden's bird and tried to catch it, during he roared at the animal all the time. Everytime he nearly could catch Bird, it escaped again, like it only wanted to fool him. "What is this yerk doing...?" The royalblood, Aiden and Hannah watched James chasing behind the bird. "He's looking like a total idiot." Aiden meant and one second later James slipped and nearly felt because he didn't care about where he put down his feet.
"I help him." Aiden decided lauthing and went out of the room. "James, what the hell are you doing?" Aiden stepped to James who failed again.
"I'm trying to catch your bird!" James yelled without stopping rushing the pet. "I don't know how, but it managed it to come out of your room!"
Aiden shook his head lauthing. "Let me help you! You're only frightening it."
"Like you want, Mr Davis." James walked back a bit so Aiden could reach his pet better. And really, shortly after James had finished hunting Bird, it came to Aiden voluntary. "That's the way you have to do it!" Aiden meant as the bird sat down on his shoulder.
James replied nothing. 'Maybe I can't handle with pets, but I wouldn't give my bird the name "Bird".' He thought, but as always his smiling facade didn't give Aiden even a tiny chance to guess what James was thinking about.
Aiden started going to the room's door again. "I'm going to the others again, so - "
"You don't mind, if I say hello, do you?" James meant and even before Aiden could think about an answer, he was away. "So you won't feel anything. It won't hurt and it'll go fast."
As Aiden and James were with the others, the royalblood had already finished asking Cloes questions and he had also explained Hannah how he would change her memories, so she couldn't remind of anything. Neither of what had happened to her sister, nor of any vampires, nor of Aiden.
"Alright." Hannah said quietly and her eyes pointed at Aiden. "I'll do my best, so I'll get the pernission to see you again." Aiden whispered and hugged Hannah strongly.
"Rules are there for being broken." She remember him smiling, but she knew that he would do every possible thing so they would meet again - even if his family didn't want that and could pressure him. "Bye, see you later."
Hannah smiled shortly and then they kissed for the last time.
"I hope so. Bye." James watched the scene in front of him. This honey-I'll-miss-you-spectacel made him angry. Seeing Aiden kissing this girl that he really liked - okay, not only "liked", for liking her his feelings were to strong - made him simply furious. He couldn't understand what Hannah liked about Aiden. But Aiden was a pureblood, and he only a halfblood, so if he wanted this girl, he had to wait until Aiden didn't love her anymore, or he was gone.
'So I don't have to wait very long.' he remembered himself. "Okay Hannah, relax. Close your eyes and relax." The royalblood had already started erasing Hannah's memories in the meantime. Hannah obeyed and did what he told her to do, wishing in the same moment not to do that. She didn't want to loose her memories. But she trusted Aiden, so she followed the instructions. Knowing, he would try to meet her again, she didn't fight against the power of the vampire.
He had began whispering, urgently and intensivly, but in a language she couldn't understand. Suddenly he stood behind her, and the words he spoke began streaming into her, making her dizzy, deprived all her strenghts. Sentences started echoing in her ears again and again, manipulating her, changing her.
'What am I doing here?' she wondered from one moment to the other and she wanted to open her eyes. She had forgotten were she was.
"Close your eyes, Hannah. Close them, everything is alright." A gentle voice behind her ordered and so she did. The last thing she saw was the blurred picture of a flying grey-red bird in front of her.
"Are there any vampires, Hannah?" The voice of an unknown person wanted to know suddenly.
Unable to speak Hannah shook her head a little bit.
"Bird." She only thought then. "Bird. Bird. Bird."
"Do you know a person who is called Aiden, Hannah?" The voice whisperd in her ear.
Hannah was silent, still seeing the flying bird in front of her, although she had already closed her eyes. "Bird." She muttered then and she lost her control about her mind and her body, so she felt forward, like a marionette, that strings were cutten.
She faded out. "I take that as a 'yes'." The royalblood laughted and held Hannah, so she didn't fell on the ground. Aiden starred at Hannah. Even he hadn't put up with the fact that he had to rebuild everything again, it hit him hard nevertheless. All memories in her head were gone and unrecoverable. "You father wants to see you, Mr Davis." The secretary told him suddenly and startled him out of his thoughts.
"Okay." Aiden nodded. He knew exactly what his father would tell him now: You aren't allowed to see this girl anymore; you are a pureblood, so act like one; but whatever you'll do, you will always be a shame for the purebloods.
Aiden turned around and went out of the room without looking back. He didn't want to see Hannah in this status, it was too painful. James observed him leaving the room, and a big smile spread out on his face. Hannah's memories were cleaned now from all "vampirish" ones, so he could do a total restart with her. Maybe not right now, but in two or three years.
'I have plenty of time now.' He thought grinning. 'Because you Aiden, won't see her for a long time. And then it will be too late for you.'
_________________________________________ After Aiden had heard his father was in his old bedroom at the moment, he had gone there. He didn't want to enter the room that his mother had furnished affectionately. It woke up the beautiful memories of the less moments he had had spend with her.
Until she had died.
And this memories made him clear that there was no way back to this wonderful time. He knocked at the door of the bedroom and entered slowly. Right away he could perceive the soft smell of his mother that still laying in the room, tickling in his nose.
"I'm here, father." He said and waited for an answer.
"You are late." The sharp words of his father destroied the lovely atmosphere of the room like a knive a fragile piece of glass. Aiden's father put his arms akimbo and his useless, blind eyes twitched around.
"I make it short." he said then. "You will go to Europe." Shocked Aiden starred at his fahter, unaible to find his voice.
"But ... why?" He asked then. He began trembling, because of fear but also because of anger and hate. If he would go to Europe, he would have no possibilities to meet Hannah again. "Don't think that I owe you an explanation." Eric meant grinning and his milky eyes focused Aiden, what he only could do, because he knew the direction where Aiden had spoken from.
"But you can't send me to Europe without one!" Aiden replied. "If you have none, let me stay here!" "Use your head for one time! Are you really so stupid, or are you only acting like you wouldn't know the reasons?" Aiden's father laughted and his face grimaced to an evil mask. "Of course, so have no chance to see your little human girlfriend again! Besides, you can't hide yourself in Europe all the time. You'll have to stay in noir, if you don't want to look like a complete idiot. The other purebloods expect that from you! If I hear only one bad word about you, you'll have to stay in Europe longer, until you have learned how a pureblood has to behave."
_________________________________________ Kayla was waiting in front of the bedroom door. She was hearing Aiden and his father Eric speaking and didn't want to disturb.
She could imagine very well what was happening in there. And the angry, loud words she could even hear outside, confirmed her suppositions.
Kayla couldn't understand, why Eric was so cruel to Aiden, why took everything away, the boy liked.
Suddenly the door was opened with a bang and Aiden rushed out of the room. Kayla said nothing, watching him going away, with the anger, hate and helplessness in his face. All in all, he still was like little boy.
Carefully she pushed down the doorknob of the bedroom and entered. "It's me, Eric. Kayla." She said, to make clear that it was her. Eric's white eyes pointed into nothing as she came nearer to him.
"I know. You always make very small steps, that nearly make no noises, so it's easy to guess that it is you." Eric sat down in one of the comfortable seats and offered Kayla to join him.
"You're visting me oftener than usual. Why?" he wanted to know. "You know why." Kayla replied and sat down. "I want to know, why you are doing this to Aiden. It's obviously that he loves that human girl, but you send him out of the country, so he has no chance to see her. It doesn't happen often, but often enough, that a pureblood falls in love with a human and it's no problem usually. But why are you strict with Aiden?"
"Why do you care about him?" Eric replied. Although he liked and respected Kayla, she got on his nerves. 'One day she could be dangerouse for me.' Eric thought. Ignoring Eric's question, Kayla continued asking. "Is the answer, why you don't treat him like a father should, standing in the book? I know that Aiden wasn't allowed to see his own family tree, as he asked for it." She paused. Tormented she looked at Eric's face, irresolute if she really should pose this one question, that already hunted her for a long time. Finally she decided to ask it.
"Eric, you never treat Aiden like your own kid, so I'm wondering, if he is really your son.
Is he your son?" Eric's face petrify. He realized that this girl could be a really threat for him, when she would be a bit older and have more power and might in the family. She was on the right way with her supposition - but wrong nevertheless. 'A miss is as good as a mile.' he thought.
"I'm sorry that I have to dissapoint you." Eric smiled. "Of course he is my son."
_________________________________________ Lying in her cuddly bed, Hannah slept like a dead woman. Her dream consisted of only one picture: The picture of a grey-red bird, that was flying in front of her. This picture never changed.
Sleeping so deeply, she noticed nothing around her, neither the loud music from next doors, nor that her door was opend suddenly. "GOOD MORNING, you late riser!!!" Cloes damn loud voice teared up the silence in the room and Hannah sat up thunderstruck.
"And, awake now, little sis?" Cloe smirked. She really loved it to annoy Hannah!
"Why are you always doing such shi-"
"No bad words, Hannah! You know that, no bad words!" Cloe interrupted her sister.
Hannah looked at her yawning. "You are cruel." Her eyes glanced at her watch. "It isn't even 9am!"
Cloe began laughing. "You should have seen your face!" Suddenly, as fast like a flash a picture appeared in Hannah's head. Then it was gone again, but this picture had burned into her head. She would never forget it.
"The bird." Hannah said quietly.
"What are you talking about?" Her sister asked and raised her eyebrows.
"I want a bird."
"I believe you have bats in your belfry! Why do you want to have a bird?" Outside, next to a window of Hannah's room, Aiden laid against the wall. He couldn't hear exactly, what the sisters were talking about, but it doesn't matter.
He had staid there for more then three hours, waiting to see Hannah the last time. He turned his head and glanced into the room. His eyes soaked up everything what Hannah did, the way she moved, the way she laughted, the way she looked.
"Good-bye. I'll miss you." Aiden whispered.
Then he left.
_________________________________________ James drove fast - as always. But this time he drove even faster then usual, he simply couldn't expect the moment Aiden would be gone.
"There we are."
Aiden acted like he didn't hear anything and unlocked his seatbelt.
"I'll take your baggage, Mr Davis. You don't need to care about it."
Aiden nodded and got out off the car. Slowly he began walking to the big building. "Simcity Airport" told the big, white-green letters that were placed over the big, doppelwinged doors, everyone and made sure, what this place was.
Aiden noticed James behind him, but as he stepped into the building, he didn't care about opening the doors for him. "I'm going to book your luggage." James told him and began moving into another direction.
"Do that." Aiden responded. He hadn't expected a "goodbye", or a "take care", and it came none. He moved to the big display panel where all flights were listened. After some moments he had found the right one. Flight number 439, to Berlin, and after he knew the right terminal, he started going on again.
With every step he departed more and more from Hannah. He knew it would need years until his father would let him come back - until he could Hannah see again.
But he would achieve his promise. He would never break it. Aiden climbed up the stairs to the the terminal.
He didn't look back.
________________________________________ The end? Nope! :) 6 years later
'It looks exactly like 6 years ago.' Aiden climbed down the metal stairs during his memories of this place came back. 'Seems like nothing changed.' Glancing about everythning, he crossed the entrance hall. Everything was the same, but his own situation now was another now.
"You grew up." one of his new friends had said before he had left Europe. And Aiden was sure, that this was right. He opened one of the big doors and walked outside into the cold air. The sun was already going down and gave a warm, reddish light. Aiden smiled. He already knew what he would do next: He would go to his new appartment, take a shower and rest a bit.
Then he would control the adress he had found out with the help of the internet. He would only have to glance at the phone book shortly. Afterwards he would drive to this adress. He couldn't wait to see Hannah again.
...to be continued...
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On Jan 28, 2008 twinkletoe wrote:
Good to read.
On Jan 28, 2008 RIDance wrote:
Hey! Your screenshots are so spectacular! I can't wait to see what Hannah does when Aiden shows up. This is going to be so interesting now that they're adults. Awesome work.
Rach
On Jan 28, 2008 Zayury wrote:
On Jan 28, 2008 Nenehunni wrote:
awww - when i saw this story i almost fell off my chair i was so happy that this new chapter was out - i love these storys and no matter how long they are always worth the wait
altho - i did hate you when you put the end and then the nope part - that was pure evil lol - i cant wait till he goes and finds hannah again awwww 
On Jan 28, 2008 wickedgoddess_athena711 wrote:
I'm glad I turned my computer on since the 4th is already out. it's not the end! And the plot thickens! How can Hannah remember Aiden? I have a feeling it wont be as easy as Aiden thinks since there's still his father[?] (what is he up to..)and that James(grr....). Beautiful pictures as alwyas. I love the attention and the details. Cant wait for the next chapter.
On Jan 28, 2008 atangki wrote:
REALLY GREAT! I LOVE IT! YOU ARE ABSOLUTELY A GENIUS!
On Jan 28, 2008 maxi king wrote:
On Jan 28, 2008 albaby wrote:
MY FAVORITE STORY. i love it alot. the shots are perfect. & the storyline. Im so excited of hannah seeing the oh-so-hot Aiden again. Can she remember him in a way? I LOVE VAMPIRE STORIES
On Jan 28, 2008 sawerty wrote:
very pretty screenshots!
On Jan 28, 2008 mangooo1 wrote:
WOW, a really big 5 but if there would be a 10 or a 15 I would give that! This was the best part so far, I loved those pics when Aiden left and then came back full grown up and even hotter than ever
I also love your sims, they're so realistic and beautiful, that's the same for the lots (this airport is awesome, with the shining floor and the people's reflection). Now that the plot thickens, it's starting to get more and more interesting, with adult sims! I wanna read the next part as soon as possible, can't wait for it! 
On Jan 28, 2008 captainlicious wrote:
The fourth chapter up already??? YAY!!!!! (Sorry had to comment before reading)
On Jan 28, 2008 Lucreecia wrote:
ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh nein du kannst doch nicht einfach aufhören !!!!!!! gemein gemein gemein
mannno echt! Du weist doch dass ich süchtig bin nach der geschichte T_T bitte schreib ganz schnell die nächsten kapittel o.o biiiiddeeeeeee. Die geschichte war viel zu früh aus 
du hättest ruhig noch 100.000 weitere bilder machen können o.o *snif* und dann ist die story noch so traurig *snif*... Ich hätte ja nie gedacht dass der James so ein ars** is o.o man der ist doch doooof der kann doch nicht einfach Aiden & Hannah auseinanderbringen T_T aber ich hoff dass die kleine noch herausfindet was da wirklich los war o.o echt der dad is ja auch so ein doofer typ
On Jan 28, 2008 Claudia35 wrote:
I thought in that pic you wrote "the end" was the real ending!!! OMG WHAT WILL HAPPEN NEXT??5.0!!!!
On Jan 28, 2008 muaxxx2004 wrote:
SUPER AWESOME,
You really know how to make a story... The Plot, the Setting, the Kind and lovely heart of feelings of Aiden toward Hannah, is so cool, you are continue being my favorite writer... I wish that this time the feelings of James don't interfere between them...
On Jan 28, 2008 samcactus101 wrote:
HOLY CRUD!!!!! Everything I want to say has ALREADY been said by Zayury
Thats one long comment
. Yeah I absolutely positively HAVE to agree with EVERYONE who has commented on this FANTASTIC story!
HOW did you make those poses at the cliff scene? Hannah reaching her hand out & Aiden grabbing her waist from the back?
THAT WAS FREAKIN' AMAZING!!!!
STUNNING!!!! I never knew you could manipulate your sims like that. Pictures... clear cut & beautiful, the grammar could improve a bit but its understandable
BRILLIANT JOB! A BIG BRAVO TO YOU!!!
Oh & LOTSA KUDOS TO YA!!!!!!:P:P:P
On Jan 28, 2008 wrote:
I'm speechless!!!
I LOVE this story, everything was perfect, the storyline, the characters, the lots...
Keep up the excelent work!!!
On Jan 28, 2008 drewsoltesz wrote:
Amazing action sequence only adds to the well rounded characterization
and thrilling story, a treat to read!
On Jan 28, 2008 spicylove wrote:
wow you left me speechless on this chp great job the photos are amazings this story is really good
On Jan 28, 2008 hellyz wrote:
This story is amazing!
On Jan 28, 2008 candy820 wrote:
Another Awesome chapter.
5.0 here
On Jan 28, 2008 Kingdom hearts wrote:
WOW !!!! Tjats isn the BEST story ever.!!! Can't wait till chapter V
i loved the "end" the end? Nope 6 years later... lol.
On Jan 28, 2008 misha1013 wrote:
On Jan 28, 2008 binky13 wrote:
So amazing!
I hope the next part comes out soon. 
On Jan 28, 2008 Devalyn wrote:
WOW, I read your story for the first time, now I'll go and check the other chapters too!
On Jan 28, 2008 rockerbüşrasim wrote:
I LOVE SO MUCH!WHY I HAVEN'T EVER SEEN TH?S STORY I CAN'T UNDERSTANDD!!!!EMOT?ONS,MOVES AND MORE ?MPORTANT STORY R REALLYY WONDERFUL!!!I CAN'T WA?T OTHER CHAPTERS!!U R VERY TALENTEDD!!!
On Jan 28, 2008 rockerbüşrasim wrote:
I LOVE SO MUCH!WHY I HAVEN'T EVER SEEN TH?S STORY I CAN'T UNDERSTANDD!!!!EMOT?ONS,MOVES AND MORE ?MPORTANT STORY R REALLYY WONDERFUL!!!I CAN'T WA?T OTHER CHAPTERS!!U R VERY TALENTEDD!!!
On Jan 28, 2008 iluvhorses13 wrote:
Fantastic job! Oh so looking forward to the next part!
Aiden!
On Jan 29, 2008 sweatshirtlover2 wrote:
OMG I LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVEEEEEEEEEEEEEE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Aiden is sooo hot and he and Hannah are beautiful together.
On Jan 29, 2008 wrote:
great story!! where did u get hannah's hair and eyeshadow??
On Jan 29, 2008 selena1125 wrote:
I was so exited when i fisrt saw this story on the hmpage I nearly fell off my chair. That was a great story probally one of your best chapters 2 I can not wait to see the next part of your story! Love it please don't keep us waiting and your ga,e better behaive because I don't know what I would do if all your characters got deleted and you couldn't finish your story. SO hope to see the next chapter out soon.
On Jan 29, 2008 selena1125 wrote:
OMG I am so sorry I forgot to rate I give it 5.0 if there wasa better one I would give you that but sadly there is not!
On Jan 29, 2008 plyangel456 wrote:
Wonderful Job again! I can't wait to read more! -plyangel456-
On Jan 29, 2008 SeasonsRDaBomb wrote:
On Jan 29, 2008 Kenvjo wrote:
Excellent screenshots and story! I am captivated!
On Jan 29, 2008 shannon1095 wrote:
On Jan 29, 2008 KrystalLancaster wrote:
On Jan 29, 2008 Alyosha wrote:
What can I possibly say? They have all said it already! Magnifico! Stupendo! Elegante! WONDERFUL!
On Jan 29, 2008 sunny33 wrote:
awesome!
On Jan 29, 2008 qasert wrote:
On Jan 30, 2008 Mistress.penguin wrote:
oh wow I have read all 4 chapter in a one hour period, my eyes hurt so bad but this story is just so amazing seriously I can think of any actually books I have read that were better, you are so good at writting stories, I was so captured by just everything that happened this far please please please write more, Im in total awww this is the best story so far I am so I love with all the caracters,
I have so many questions about whats gonna happen next, guess I will just have to wait and see
On Jan 30, 2008 britishblond wrote:
On Jan 30, 2008 lia2223 wrote:
OMG! What a great chapter. I can't wait to read more.
On Jan 30, 2008 goodie2shoes wrote:
Hehe, you almost got me with the "The End?" moment, but I caught myself and clicked again. Mwahaha, that was evil of you...but clever!
Aiden is as handsome as ever, if not cuter 
. I hope he finds Hannah, but I don't know if she'll remember him. Or what if James made a move? 
Well, he's cute, but I like Aiden. 
Great part! 5.0!
On Jan 30, 2008 kitfu11 wrote:
Simply amazing!
I can't wait to see what will happen when he finds Hannah again! I hope James didn't get with her... lol. 
On Jan 30, 2008 Dolfynn wrote:
As always young lady I am not disappointed. I have read alot of stories on this sight but have to admit I am always looking for another chapter or Noir. Even if you have a little English problem now and then I always am able to understand what you are trying to get across to your readers. That in itself shows signs of a great author to be. (and about your English...I am American and am not to great with my English
, so dont worry bout it.) Looking forward to your next chapter and the ones to follow it. Keep safe and keep up the great story.
On Jan 30, 2008 Freya0804 wrote:
On Jan 30, 2008 Freya0804 wrote:
On Jan 31, 2008 MinnieID wrote:
SO GLAD THAT HE'S KEEPING HIS PROMISE
On Jan 31, 2008 xtamadea wrote:
well, I believe everything has been said perfectly by Zayury. Speaking about perfection, that word totally describes this story of yours!!!! Everything is just too beautiful and I've got so much to learn from you. You're truly talented and your English have improved so much, my dear friend. I'm sorry that it took me some time before I read your story. Wowowowowowowowow, I really wonder what the next chapter may bring. You never cease to amaze me.
On Feb 1, 2008 converse02 wrote:
Oh I hope everything comes out alright for Aiden!!
He deserves to be happy, and my applause for you and your writing, you had a few mix ups in your writing but other than that, really great job!
5++
On Feb 2, 2008 OpheliaNival wrote:
Your writing is like poetry, even though there are typos and such it doesn't matter it's still one of the most beautiful stories on this site. And the pictures, I am especially fascinated by the pics of Aiden and Hannah falling off the cliff in the very beginning... Please don't let it be over, I need more!!! I need to know what happens! Will they ever meet again?! Will Hannah possibly remember Aiden though she technically shouldn't... All the questions I have and more... This story is so great I don't mind waiting for updates I just get so excited when I see a new chapter up. Well enough rambling here, just want to say: Keep up the great work!
On Feb 2, 2008 OpheliaNival wrote:
hehe... someone was fooled by the "The end?" frame and guess what haircolour she has,
lol! Aiden looks so healthy in the "later" years 
Can't wait to see how Hannah will react... You little joker you, fool me like that! hehe...
On Feb 4, 2008 spacemouse wrote:
Good story.
On Feb 4, 2008 SpaciKathy wrote:
I'm inspired!! The part is fantastic, I want to know how it continue!! What's happen with Hannah? Try James to get Hannah's boyfriend? So many questions !!!! And your pictures are beautiful, your done a very great job!!!!
On Feb 5, 2008 aaaaaaac wrote:
On Feb 5, 2008 Quengel wrote:
WOW!!! This is so far the best chapter!! At the first time while I read this, I thought, this would be the last chapter and so what will all happen, 'til they finally can live together in harmony? Then, after I came closer to the end, I thought "OMG! NO WAY!! She will leave this story with an open end, I hate those stories... this has to have a lucky end!" But then I read "To be continued"
YAY! So now I have alot of questions as all others here: What will James do? Hopefully Hannah doesn't fall in love with him! I'm sure, Hannah has now a "Bird" like Aiden has, too! And maybe, or hopefully 'cause of the bird her memories come back...??! Hopefully Aiden's father let finally LOVE him Hannah!!! WOW! I need a new cup of coffee... to be continued soon lol... *back* Is that all really your own idea?? Your english isn't the best, even it's ok. But your story is so fantastic, that it would be great to make a real movie of "NOIR"!!! NO JOKING!! People can become SA at TSR through fantastic recolours, meshing, or building houses... why not also because of real great stories! I'd vote for it! This time (NOT lying, I lie never) I couldn't get enough of your story and I'm now sooooo eager to see what will happen on chapter V!!! From me for sure FIVE STARS!!! 
On Feb 9, 2008 loverien wrote:
This story is fantastic!!! Please, tell us what happens next! I hope Aiden and Hannah can find each other again (sigh... I'm a hopeless romantic).
On Feb 16, 2008 ameba0174 wrote:
the greatest story ever!! love it!!
On Feb 16, 2008 ameba0174 wrote:
On Feb 18, 2008 wrote:
i absolutely cannot wait for the 5th chapter! youre amazing, i dont know how you do it...
On Feb 18, 2008 wrote:
On Mar 14, 2008 civetinja wrote:
Very great story ! Thanks for sharing !
On Mar 21, 2008 love-marta wrote:
i love it! i can say only ona- You have got a hudge talent!!!!!!!!!
On Apr 13, 2008 Muccy wrote:
I can not put into words how me this story once again in their spell.
(wieder einmal super geschrieben, super Bilder und die Story, hat einfach alles, wie ich schon geschrieben habe, sie zieht mich in ihren Bann)Many thanks for this. 
On Apr 26, 2008 Sims2hottiegirl wrote:
That was fantastic like really awesome
the screenshots were amazeing
good job
On May 24, 2008 Cheena wrote:
On Jun 8, 2008 ritakwolf wrote:
On Jun 11, 2008 ishi09 wrote:
This is getting really interesting. I never pictured James to be the nasty back-stabbing type... But awesome, none-the-less
Looking forward to the next part~