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The half-breed - A vampire story / Chapter II

Welcome back to the second chapter! I hope you enjoy it, but please give feedback and rate so I can improve my next stories! And as usual: don't forget that English isn't my native language :D

ENJOY!

The half-breed - A vampire story / Chapter II

Welcome back to the second chapter! I hope you enjoy it, but please give feedback and rate so I can improve my next stories! And as usual: don't forget that English isn't my native language :D

ENJOY! Terry and Ashley went upstairs without to notice that George had heard their talk. "Do you really want to help me to become a human?" Terry asked Ashley. "It could be dangerous and we would have to leave this world." "Of course! I promised you to do that! And also it would be a good posibility to lost my whole shy!" Ashley told him optimistic. "Okay, but you have to know, that I can't go the whole way with you and that's the reason why it could be dangerous for you. If I'm with you I can protect you with my power I have, but there's a part of the world we have to go, where I'm not allowed to step on." "In this area you have to find something, I don't know, how I could express it, something GOOD. You will feel it, because the world we are going to, is NEUTRAL. You're going to see what I mean when we are there. Do still want me to help?" he asked her again. "Sure, what a question!" Ashley replied. "I want that you become human! So you're family looses all its power of you!"
"Thank you, Ashley. I really appreciate that you do this for me." Terry told her. He was really happy that she still wanted to help him, even the meeting with George. "Well, hold your hand so, that it touches mine." he instructed her.
"Like this?" Ashley wanted to know.
"A bit closer, they have to touch themselves." At the moment their fingers touched themselves, Ashley felt something warm streaming through her body. It took a little bit, but then she understood, that this was Terry's power.
She closed her eyes, just feeling the new warm in her becoming hoter and hoter.
Suddenly she felt something falling on her. She opend her eyes again. They stood in empty area, everywhere where snow. The snow really was EVERYWHERE: It felt from heaven, it was on the ground and you even could see much because even the air was white. "Where are we?" Ashley asked. "That's so crazy, everywhere is snow, but it's not cold, it's so warm like in spring or in early sommer! How can it be that snow isn't cold! That's scares me..." "We are in Nihil." Terry explained her. "It's the world between the of the humans' and of the vampires'. You don't have to be scared, this normal for this world. And I like snow." Terry gave Ashley a long hug.
"Are you all right? If you want you still can go back. I wouldn't be angry." he asked.
"No, it's okay, this place confuses me. I don't want back. I want to help you." she answered. And then they began to walk. They walked a long time and even they couldn't see much, Terry seemed always to know where they had to go.
So they came to a high, old wall after some time. They walked on and came to an opening into the wall, there was standing a creature. When it saw both coming nearer, he began to speak with a loud and strong vioce.
"I knew you would come to this place Terry, sun of my master..." "What is that thing?" Ashley scream. She was getting scared now, the frightening look of the creatur scared her. "This is Custos, he guards the region behind him." Terry told her. "He's a being of my family, they created him so he let no half-breed into the area behind these walls, that are also so secured that no one can climb over them.
This is the reason why I need you. Just a human or a vampire can go into this region, I would have to defeat Custos to do that, but he's much stronger than I because I'm half-breed. He would kill me." "Good explained, Terry." Custos said. "But now stop talking, so the girl can go. I don't like it if I have more than one person I have to observe."

 "Well, I go now." Ashley said and kissed Terry shortly.
"Please be careful." he pleased her.
"I will." she promised him and then she went.
 "Welcome into the this part of Nihil. Maybe we're going to see us again, maybe not." Custor said when Ashley stepped through the opening.
Ashley said nothing. She just thought about that she do it just for Terry, the man she loved. So he could have a real life as a real human.
She went on and disappeared behind a wall of snow. "What a stupid talk!"
Suddenly George appeared. "What a luck that you didn't talk any longer! What was too much love for me..." "What do you want again?" Terry asked his half-brother. He knew, if George would be here, that would be mean trouble. He felt that he was getting angry, very angry. "Well, I was accidental quite near and when I heard your boring lovetalk. And now I'm really interested where your Ashley is now. Do you know what? I'm going to look after her!" George said sneering. "You won't do that!" Terry shouted. "Leave her alone!"
"Why should I? She's a pretty girl, it would be bad if something would happen to her." George replied.
"SOMETHING LIKE YOU, OR WHAT?" "You're right, something like me, maybe. And the funnyiest thing is, that you aren't able to protect the girl you seem to love. " George walked through the opening behind Custor.
Both stand there grinning and laughing, making fun about Terry. "Leave her alone!" Terry shouted again. "Don't touch her! She's my girl!"
"You're joking very well!" George laughed. "Why should I leave her in peace? And don't forget that I'm a real vampire, so if I find her, maybe I'm going to-" "YOU WILL LEAVE HER ALONE! I SWEAR YOU, IF YOU HURT HER OR YOU DO SOMETHING OTHER WITH HER, I'M GOING TO COME AND EXTERMINATE YOU!!!" Terry yelled so furious he never had been before. He knew if George would do something with Ashley, he would lose the control about himself. But suddenly Terry's head hurted so much that he thought his head had to burst. He felt something bad in his spirit, something that began to take control over him. It invaded in every of his sins. And after this moment Terry's eyes were changed. He was changed. "Do you know, what had happened?" George asked him with a bad smile. "You began to chose into a true vampire, because you're getting so furious that your negative and bad feelings defeated your good and human ones. It shouldn't take much time and then you are one of us. Forever. And now, I'm looking after your girl, I'm sure she's going to be happy to see me again!" In the meantime Ashley went more and more into the region behind the big walls. She was a little bit scared, because she lost her bearing after a short time. There was just snow, snow and snow again, so she didn't know where she was. But she was glad that she hasn't seen any other creatures like Custor and George up to now.
She also felt a little bit strange in this world with snow but without cold. And she even couldn't feel something "good" like Terry had it called. Suddenly Ashley heard a loud noice behind her. She turned around, but there was nothing.
Ashley shook her head. She place began to drive her crazy. After Ashley went on, George began to follow her again. He would catch her up fastly. And then the real fun would start.

End of chapter II


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The half-breed - A vampire story / Chapter II

May 8, 2007 by sweetcharming
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    52 Comment(s) posted so far

    On May 8, 2007 Nono_Girl wrote:

    Kewl stoy!I really loved the whole plot and everything was just great!

    On May 8, 2007 sandybvv wrote:

    \:rah\: another great chapter, looking forward to next one!!! nice job!!

    On May 8, 2007 AnniKayna wrote:

    \:eek\: \:rah\: \:wub\: beautiful!!!
    really, really interesting and charming story!!!
    I loved the 1st chapter, and this 2nd one is as much worthy!!! \:D \:D \:D

    cant wait to see what's gonna happen in the next one!!! \:P \:cool\:

    good job, my compliments!!! \:D \;\) \:wub\:

    On May 8, 2007 marizza82 wrote:

    WOW.EXCELENT, FABULOUS BRILIANT !!!Custos was an amazing creation by the way\:wub\: \:wub\:

    On May 8, 2007 Nyell wrote:

    Amazing second chapter! Keep up the good work, I can't wait to read more and see what's gonna happen to Terry and Ashely.\:\) \:rah\: 5.0

    On May 8, 2007 enchantmentsisters wrote:

    Great continuation. Looking forward to more! \:D

    On May 8, 2007 marsali wrote:

    i want morrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrre\:ph34r\: \:mad\: \:rah\:

    On May 9, 2007 wrote:

    very intriqing. u asked for our opinions,honestly, this could be a world wide masterpeice if u could find a way to make the text switch slower, and were a tad bit more discriptive. write about their inner emotions in between some of their dialogs! just trying to be helpfull.\:\)

    On May 9, 2007 wrote:

    oh and i forgot to say, great f*&^%$# job dude

    On May 9, 2007 R.Quest wrote:

    loved the chapter and the new character Custos, he is really unusual...\:D

    On May 9, 2007 baconhead91 wrote:

    AAAAAH! I love it so much! the snow place was a great idea. Great job \:D

    On May 9, 2007 dannybond1990 wrote:

    oooh, can't wait for the next part!!!\:rah\:

    On May 9, 2007 drewsoltesz wrote:

    nice, liked to snowy backdrop\:rah\:

    On May 9, 2007 atangki wrote:

    I love it! Can't wait for the next chapter! \:D

    On May 9, 2007 GFitz wrote:

    Your screenshots are just beautiful. Very well done!

    On May 9, 2007 EnchantedRose wrote:

    Wow i love this story it just gets beter and better. And the pics are great. Cant wait for more 5*

    On May 9, 2007 Iceanna wrote:

    So good, can't wait to next chapter..\:rah\:

    On May 9, 2007 cariadbach wrote:

    A good continuation, excellent screen shots.\:\)

    On May 9, 2007 fallenangelohio wrote:

    \:rah\: \:rah\: I can't wait for the next chapter! As usual, your backgrounds, storyline, and screenshots are incredible. \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 9, 2007 wrote:

    \:\) Loved the snowshots , this story was brilliant.\:rah\:

    On May 9, 2007 PatPB wrote:

    A bit scary but very exciting!!\:rah\: Can't wait till chapter 3.

    On May 10, 2007 tony9sbt wrote:

    Reminded me of the Matrix. some of the dialogue lost me, but it's very good.

    On May 10, 2007 waltertheweeniedog wrote:

    \:rah\: \:D

    On May 10, 2007 gothiclynn wrote:

    Loved this follow up . Can't wait for the next chapter ! \:wub\:

    On May 10, 2007 wrote:

    This one was better than the last chapter!! Can't wait to read more\:D

    On May 10, 2007 TellMeSomethingNew wrote:

    Fantastic. U cud make this a fantastic book i wud buy a copy. and make my frends buy one. i wrote a book and am tinkin of gettin it published! if u need advice, just ask!!!!!!!!! \:o Oh nd i am not full of myself, even though it sounds dat way, i just hav problems wit english bcuz my native language is irish.!!!! \:D \:D drop me a line.

    On May 11, 2007 Hanefcik wrote:

    FABULOUS \:wub\: I like the plot and the scenery, don't worry about language mistakes - they are barely noticible, and we all make mistakes, I suppose \;\) I love the story, can't wait for next chapters, I think that maybe the father will appear, he must be so vampirish, strong and ruthless... Anyway, great job \:wub\:

    On May 11, 2007 Wigwog wrote:

    \:\) \:\)

    On May 11, 2007 biatch1965 wrote:

    \:D \:cool\: \:D

    On May 11, 2007 Lily Fairy2 wrote:

    "to lost my whole shy" Could you please tell me what this means? I'm confused about it, and there were a few spelling mistakes but not many, here are a few hints to get your story up to perfection "sommer" This should be sUmmer, and "sun" should be "son" if you're talking about a child,"scream" should be "screamed" OK? Just so you know I loved this part as much as the last one, and hopefully you're english will be improved with my helpful hints on where you went wrong. OK?\:D

    On May 11, 2007 Fortheloveofbook wrote:

    Great Great Great .... Hmmmmm Great. \:D It's turning out better and better.

    On May 12, 2007 wrote:

    Brill creations,a very good chapter,I need more of this amazing thing!

    On May 13, 2007 Fierstarr wrote:

    I loved it - great addition. I just wish it hadn't ended so soon, I wanted to read more! And, your english is fine by the way. There's a few mistakes, but I know native speakers of English that would make many more mistakes than you. Great job! Looking forward to the next one!

    On May 13, 2007 wrote:

    wow...again!! \:D \:D \:D

    On May 13, 2007 wrote:

    Hmm. I like It =] When Is The Next Chapter Coming? \:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 13, 2007 wrote:

    a little short justas it was getting interesting your story ended, your writing has improved, a lil longer with the next chapter will make it even better \:\) \:cool\: \:rah\:

    On May 14, 2007 spacemouse wrote:

    Very good. I like it \:cool\:

    On May 14, 2007 Katriona! wrote:

    \:wub\:

    On May 15, 2007 wrote:

    hehe i loved the last chapter and i love this one, cant wait till the next \:\) x \:D

    On May 17, 2007 SongChild99 wrote:

    Looking forward to the next chapter. \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 scarlet_white wrote:

    Yeah I liked this one very much too, you have a very great sense of drama and I wonder how you did the touching hands thingy, Custos is also very well done, he doesn't seem like a sim at all, it like a very good costume. You are doing something terrific with the series

    On Jun 13, 2007 fairyofdeath wrote:

    i love the story its so great

    On Jun 22, 2007 Tylah b wrote:

    bravo\:rah\: bravo\:rah\: an excelent story, one of the best ones ive read! and is that creature the Pan person from modthesims2? they look really similiar... great job

    On Jul 3, 2007 andrea_sfwi wrote:

    I liked it \:\) but I haven't read the first chapter and i can't find it under your profile of what stories you wrote (maybe I just missed it) so I was a little confused. Loved the scenery though!

    On Jul 4, 2007 wrote:

    Wish it was longer, but still really cool story! Custos is realllllly cool!

    On Jul 9, 2007 wrote:

    Love this one! Keep up the good work!

    On Aug 15, 2007 Zayury wrote:

    \:rah\: AWESOME! Nihil looks amazing I love all the snow and the way you designed it! Fantastic story, love it! \:wub\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Sep 12, 2007 elopge wrote:

    This is wonderful!!! I am off to the final one!! WOOT! \:wub\:

    On Dec 1, 2007 OpheliaNival wrote:

    This is fantastic, I am screaming at the computer telling Ashley to look out for George! I wonder what he's plans are and just hope that she gets away and manages to help Terry turn human... \:wub\: I love this story!

    On Dec 16, 2007 Kenvjo wrote:

    run ashley!!\:eek\:

    On Jan 22, 2008 leplume wrote:

    Awesome chapter2, i just keep getting amazed. all i can say is WOW!!!!!!\:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Jan 5, 2011 Lgustafson712 wrote:

    the plot thickins!  I want to know to make vamps human again!!

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