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The half-breed - A vampire story

Welcome to the final chapter!!! Some people asked me to make my chapters longer, so I made it longer ^^
I hope you will enjoy it, but please comment so I can improve my stories! Sorry for my grammar misktakes again (English isn't my native language)

But now ENJOY the final chapter of "The half-breed - A vampire story"!!!

The half-breed - A vampire story

Welcome to the final chapter!!! Some people asked me to make my chapters longer, so I made it longer ^^
I hope you will enjoy it, but please comment so I can improve my stories! Sorry for my grammar misktakes again (English isn't my native language)

But now ENJOY the final chapter of "The half-breed - A vampire story"!!! Ashley went deeper and deeper into the the region behind the big walls. She was so absorbed in thought, that she didn't notice that George was very near behind her. She just thought about Terry and what the "good" thing could be, that could change Terry in a human...
Suddenly she stopped. She began to feel it, the "good" thing. Ashley started to run to the direction where this good feeling seemed to come from. "Damn!" George thought when he saw her running away. He didn't thought that the girl could feel this aura that was comming nearer with every single step. Usually humans could feel it only, if they stand in front of the source of this good feeling. He had to prevent that Ashley get a piece of the good. He began to run, too. Ashley turned around a corner and stopped.
"WOW." was all she could say when she saw ... ... a huge, old temple.
The good feeling spilled out of this building.
 "That's unbelievable..." Ashley wishpered.
She really couldn't describe this feeling she get when she walked nearer and nearer to the temple, but it made her so happy, confident and simply peaceful.
It just felt good.
Truly good. Without having eyes or ears for the world around her and the temple, she walked up the stairs.
The feeling was getting stronger and stronger more and more now.
She realized, that the real source of it wasn't the temple, but the brightly shining ball of light, that stood on the old table in the middle of the building.
Ashley began to believe, that this light was strong enough to banish the vampire in Terry. In front of the light, she just thought about how she could get something of the light to bring it to Terry.
Maybe she would destroy it, if she would do something wrong. But because she had no idea, how she could get a piece of the light without to touch it, she simply decied to touch it.
Her fingers felt a slow and pleasent vibration while they were getting nearer to the light.
"STOP THAT!" suddenly cried someone with a loud voice behind her, so she surprised turned around without to touch the ball. "If I were you, I wouldn't touch it!" Terry told her. "Just an advice."
But the truth was, that he simply didn't want her to have a piece of the light. And not only because she could change Terry with it in a human, but also, because the light will injure him very badly if he come to close to it. "George!" Ashley screamed scared. "Why are you here?"
"A stupid question from a stupid girl!" he just laughed.
He went nearer to her. "I meant that serious!" Ashley said. "Why are you here?"
"Maybe to prevent that Terry's stupid girlfriend helps him to become a human!" George told her shaking the head. "This girl is so naive." he thought.
"But why do you don't want him to do that?" Ashley asked. "Why can't you and your family leave him alone?"
"He's marked with the sign of our family. Of HIS family." George said. This girl got on his nerves. Why couldn't she shut up?
"And that's the only reason? I mean, it's his own decision if he wants to be a human or a vampire...isn't it?" she asked again. "If you just would let him do what he wants to do, where would be the problem?"
George was getting furious. "It's an unwritten law, that everyone how has just a bit vampire blood in his body belonges to us." "And now, shut up finaly." He orderd.
George stepped in front of Ashley and raised his hand to the height of Ashley's neck.
"W..what are you doing?" she asked timid. "What do you want?" "That was every vampire does and wants." George just replied.

Ashley began to shout. In the meantime, Terry had attacked Custos and had hurt him.
New power - the power of a vampire - flowed through his body; he was changed again. He got a vampire more and more, also it was his highest goal not to be one. "That was it for you." Custos told him hardly breathing. "You will be a whole vampire soon. Your fury and hate of George was so big that the vampire part of your soul began to replace the human one. It's like a poison that takes control over you, its signs already mark your face." "I will never be a vampire!" Terry told him furiously. But he knew that Custos was right, he could feel the black and red marks on his face, they were hot. Then Custos leaned against the wall and passed out.
Terry knew that he just would sleep a while and after that he would be so healthy like he was before, because this creature could only die, if all his creators would die, too. And these creators were the leaders of Terry's and George's family. So he really didn't care about him. Suddenly Terry heard a loud scream.
"Ashley!" he called. And after the loud scream was over, he started to run.
He could feel because of his new power the trace, Ashley's aura had left behind and he followed it. He came to the frozen lake ... ... and also to the labyrinth of the plants. The trace was getting stronger and stronger now, so he knew that he was on the right way. Then the path was over and he stopped as he saw, what was happening in the temple. Ashley had grapped the lighting ball and tried to touch George with it!
The light was like fire for George, he tried to step back, but the light still hurt him and let him feel like his skin would had catched fire. Ashley had heard Terry's steps and turned around. But when she saw how Terry looked, with the black and red lines in his face and the dark eyes, she was frighend like she had never been before in her life.
"What...had happened Terry?" she asked scary. He frightened her unbelievable so she let go the light, it fell down and rolled a bit away.
Terry didn't want that Ashley was scared because of him. He tried to explain what had happened, why he began to change into a vampire...
So he started to explain her what happened to him.
He just hoped that she would believe him as he told her about his first and his second conversion.
Terry still don't want to be a vampire, it doesn't matter that the vampires blood began to control him, this wish was still his biggest. After Terry had finished, Ashley wanted to ask him something but George interruppted her:
"Forget what he said!" he said and laid on of his arms of Ashley's neck, with his free hand he grapped her strongly. He was glad that the lighting ball was so much away that he could come next to Ashley again.
"But - " Ashley wanted to begin. She concentrated only on Terry and she not even realized what George was doing. "Ashley, be careful!" Terry told her, because he knew, what George was thingking about to do.
But he couldn't understand why Ashley didn't walk away from George, that she allowed him to be so near to her. And really, George had already opened his mouth; he had waited for this moment long - he was ready to bite. He was full of anticipation.
And Ashley still didn't noticed that she was going to be the sacrifice of a vampire.
"What..?" she replied naive. "Don't touch her!" Terry shouted and pushed George away from Ashley.
George stepped back a bit, he was suprised about Terry's reaction. He didn't think that his little brother would have the courage to interrupe him.
"I told you, LEAVE HER ALONE!" Terry told George.
"Do you really believe that you could save her?" George asked furious. He was angry that his brother stopped him.
"Oh, yes, I really believe that!" Terry replied and hit him again.
 Ashley tourned around and began to cry. She couldn't see the two brothers fighting, it was too much for her.
But then she heard a loud noise and Terry panted loudly so she looked again what had happened.
"Terry!" she shouted anxious. George had ripped Terry's t-shirt and knocked him strongly against the stone table.
"Remember your roots and where you come from!" George yeeled. "It's a shame that you have the sign of our familie on your body!" The sign was a big cross on Terry's chest.
And Ashley began to understand. Everyone has to see such big scarf and someone will ask, where it comes from. She understood, why Terry made sports with his casual clothes in school, he hadn't forget his sport stuff, he didn't want to show his scarf. "I'ver never wanted this sign!!" Terry shouted and pushed George away from him.
 George tripped over his own feet and began to loose balance... He felt down - exactly on the shining ball.

George knew - that was it. Then he lay on it and his body was surrounded by a snow white cloud.
At the beginning it hurt like fire, but then the pain stopped. The cloud was getting bigger and bigger and George felt that his power left his body. One second later he felt totally empty, everthing, every thought, every memorie, every wish had disappeared. His head was like a big hole, but he felt nothing.

He closed his eyes. The cloud get bigger again... ...and then it dissolved.

But George wasn't still there. Just the ball was still lighting brightly like nothing had happend. Ashley was a bit scared, that George had disappeared so suddenly. But when she saw Terry's face she understood, that George had died.
"Terry...why're crying?" Ashley asked him worried.
"I killed him. Even we had never a relation like brothers should have, he was my brother. And I killed him. I didn't want to do that." he said. A tear dropped down his face.
"It wasn't your fault, Terry." Ashley replied. "It wasn't. And he wanted to kill you! And me!" She gave him a long hug and let him feel, that he wasn't alone.
"All right now?" she wanted to know.
"I...think so." Terry answered. "But could you do it now?"
"What do you mean?" Ashley asked.
"The light, press it on my chest." And so Ashley picked up the ball of light and pressed it on Terry's chest. It came loose from Ashley's hand and began to disappear in Terry's body. Suddenly Terry felt something warm in his body, flewing through every part of it.
It began to hurt incredible.

 But as the light was completly in Terry the pain stooped so sudden like it had came.
He felt something was changing in his body, something was leaving him...bad wishes went out of his head and malicious thoughts disappeared.
Instead of the cold feeling he had before in his body he felt now simply warm and good. The marks in his face faded.
His eyes got clearer. And then all signs were gone.
Also the cross on his body wasn't there anymore.

He was a real human. "Are you...a human? Now?" Ashley asked Terry. She couldn't believe it.
"So human like you're." he replied. "Thank you so much for your help." He added and kissed her gently. And so they went together out of the region behind the big walls to go back to the human's world, where they belong to.

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That was the final chapter of my "The half-breed - A vampire story"! I hope you enjoyed it!

A big thank you to
YOU, for reading this story!!!
all the GREAT creators all over the world, who share their works with us. Without you I wouldn't be able to do stories!!!
TSR, because they give us the posibility to do all this!!!
and of course a huge thank you to EA!!!

The half-breed - A vampire story / Chapter III

May 19, 2007 by sweetcharming
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    62 Comment(s) posted so far

    On May 19, 2007 marizza82 wrote:

    Yay!! First!!Lovely lovely lovely!!\:wub\: \:rah\:

    On May 19, 2007 waltertheweeniedog wrote:

    \:D

    On May 19, 2007 Nono_Girl wrote:

    I believe your sooooo right!And this story just makes me feel so good!This story was one of the Best!I mean THE BEST!\:rah\:

    On May 19, 2007 wrote:

    \:D \:D \:D !!!!!!!!!!!

    On May 19, 2007 dannybond1990 wrote:

    \:rah\: I loved it!!\:wub\: Best of them all!!\:rah\:

    On May 19, 2007 GFitz wrote:

    Excellent ending! I hope you continue to write. Your pictures were just beautiful and very creative.

    On May 19, 2007 wrote:

    This story has just got better and better\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 19, 2007 wrote:

    Brilliant pictures, brilliant story\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 19, 2007 wrote:

    I just love this story, especially all the snowy scenes\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    Fabulous set,I loved them!! Loved the graphics as well!! A definate 5.0!!
    \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    That was just awsome. The screen shots were fantastic. A great story. Deserved to be front page.\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    I was so disappointed when I realized that this story had finished , it was brilliant Keep on writing\:D

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    This story gave me a nice warm feeling when I read it . Good work all round\:wub\:

    On May 20, 2007 Hanefcik wrote:

    \:wub\: Great final, this was what I expected, not too long, but not too simple, ending rather happily! I was also counting for an epilogue, with Ashley's friend, but this is very nice indeed! Huge thanks, I hope to be able to create something equally good in the future! \:wub\:

    On May 20, 2007 scarlet_white wrote:

    The special effects are just unbelievable, the expressivemness of terry crying are a must see and overall it is a very very good story but now tat he is no longer a vampire how are they going to go home? Anyway it was an amazing job and I think you even improved on your language use. Great job overall!!!

    On May 20, 2007 AnniKayna wrote:

    \:wub\: it was *great* really...!!! \:\)
    I loved it,expecially the few twists in the fight between the two brothers... \:wub\:
    but Ashley... naive it kinda a compliment! I understand that she is simple,and kind,and everything...but she seemed really *stupid* now and then!!! \:confused\: anyway!
    just an advice: the story was great,as I already said,and I appreciated the fact that you actually made this last installment a bit longer. *but* I would have appreciated few screenshots more!!! like,to show the 'human' life of Terry,and if he and Ashley stay together/get steady/marry...whatever!!! \:wub\: its not a big deal,anyway!!! \:D \;\)
    take care,Im looking forward to read your next story!!! \;\) \:wub\:

    On May 20, 2007 AnniKayna wrote:

    [I forgot to rate - sorry about that! here we go, that's better... 5.0,by the way! \:D] \;\)

    On May 20, 2007 atangki wrote:

    Wonderful story! I hope to read more stories from you! \:D\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 enchantmentsisters wrote:

    I am so glad that everything worked out! Hopefully, you'll continue writing in the future \:D

    On May 20, 2007 Sk8Iowa wrote:

    5.0!! I beleive your language had improved in this chapter. Either way, you created an amazing story line and plot. I simply loved it! You didn't rush anything either. It was a nice steady pace up to the ending! Great job and let's hope you write more!!\:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    Great story , lets hope you write a lot more on here\:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    Not long been on this site , this has to be on of the best stories on here today, great work\:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    That was one good story, a 5:0 from me. Hope this wont be your last story\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    Good wins over evil, will be hearing more about this couple. Great story\:D

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    I did not want that story to end, nice story , excellent pictures\:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    The screens in that story were brilliant. Hope you will write some more\:rah\:

    On May 20, 2007 Nyell wrote:

    Excellent story, as always. I liked the ending(I love happy ones). Keep up the good work, I can't wait to see what's coming next. 5.0

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    again, i love it so much \:\) its so cool the way everything fits together like the scars and stuff 5 rating!!

    On May 20, 2007 Wigwog wrote:

    GREAT STORY! 5.0!!! MAKE MORE!!!!!\:D

    On May 20, 2007 ragemacsika wrote:

    Very good story \:\)

    On May 20, 2007 wrote:

    Beautiful story! I only wish there was more

    On May 20, 2007 sandybvv wrote:

    \:rah\: awww love it!! great ending for such a great vampire story!!!\:D \:D hope to read another of your stories soon!!!

    On May 21, 2007 mrvica wrote:

    \:\) Wow!I cant believe!Story is incredible,the best.Thank you for this story!

    On May 21, 2007 wrote:

    \:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\: excellent work, your getting a lot better in the grammer & spelling, I'll be keeping an eye out for more of your terrific stories, keep on writing, you've put your heart into this last piece and gave it a wonderful ending, congradulations a 5.0 doesn't do justice where a 10 should. Great work!!!!

    On May 21, 2007 Iceanna wrote:

    A great chapter...\:\)

    On May 21, 2007 lilbit4 wrote:

    You told a wonderful story,looking forward to the next\:rah\:

    On May 21, 2007 PatPB wrote:

    Great work! Excelent ending! Loved the story\:rah\: \:wub\:

    On May 21, 2007 R.Quest wrote:

    Great story I am sad that it ended.. Ihope may be that you continue the story with another chapter... Hint hint.

    On May 21, 2007 TellMeSomethingNew wrote:

    OMG. Iluved de final chptr!!!!!!!!\:wub\: I still tink u sud write a book, even if it aint lyk dis one. \:D U have Fantastic writing style nd ur english is fantastic! U sudnt worry bout it!!!!\:rah\: \:rah\: \:wub\:

    On May 21, 2007 Lily Fairy2 wrote:

    Great finale! Your english has improved a lot, well done! Hope to see more stories from you in the future. \:D \:D

    On May 21, 2007 lilecka1405 wrote:

    awsome \:D

    On May 22, 2007 leifofdel wrote:

    \:P \:rah\: Good Job.\:wub\:

    On May 22, 2007 fallenangelohio wrote:

    Great story! I loved the your screenshots, and the storyline was perfect. I hope to see more of your stories in the future.\:rah\: \:rah\:

    On May 23, 2007 spacemouse wrote:

    Great story, thanks for sharing \:\)

    On May 23, 2007 gothiclynn wrote:

    Great story !I'm so glad he finally became a human !\:wub\:

    On May 24, 2007 jaundyce61 wrote:

    A good ending to a good story, love vampire tales, well done! Love the snowy background!\:\)

    On May 25, 2007 baconhead91 wrote:

    \:D Dang was that awesome! I loved every part of it. Great job \:\)

    On May 25, 2007 molli17 wrote:

    \:rah\: \:rah\: \:wub\:

    On Jun 3, 2007 Fierstarr wrote:

    Very good way to end it! I really enjoyed the stories!

    On Jun 13, 2007 fairyofdeath wrote:

    its so lovely

    On Jun 16, 2007 Fortheloveofbook wrote:

    \:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\: Loved it. Hope you are going to write more. Sunshines and Smiles.

    On Jun 16, 2007 Fortheloveofbook wrote:

    ooops forgot to rate \:cool\: \:cool\: \:cool\: \:cool\: \:cool\:

    On Jun 22, 2007 Tylah b wrote:

    great ending+climax. keep on writing those excelent stories\:\) , maybe even one with werewolves\;\) jk!

    On Jun 30, 2007 dianova wrote:

    I enjoyed it. Thankyou for sharing \:P

    On Jul 3, 2007 andrea_sfwi wrote:

    \:rah\: nice story, love the screenshots.

    On Jul 4, 2007 wrote:

    Great story, beautiful shots.

    On Jul 9, 2007 wrote:

    Loved the end. Thanks for sharing!

    On Jul 26, 2007 hazabaza1 wrote:

    \:D It's cool how you make all these fantasy, love stories! Also cool how you make people vampires, without being sim vampires! 5/5!

    On Aug 15, 2007 Zayury wrote:

    \:wub\: \:rah\: Just beautiful, absolutely AMAZING!! I loved every part of this story and all the fabulous characters!! \:wub\: \:rah\:

    On Dec 1, 2007 OpheliaNival wrote:

    Loved it! Every second, word and frame! Spectacular finnish! Thank you for sharing! \:D \:wub\:

    On Dec 16, 2007 Kenvjo wrote:

    very creative!\:\)

    On Jan 22, 2008 leplume wrote:

    \:\) Great job, everything was super., the graphics the story the screen shots, awesome!!!!!!!!!!\:wub\: \:wub\:

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