Stories / Forgotten Redemption: Chp 3, part 2
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Okay, you all probably hate me right now for stopping part 1 where I stopped it, but hey I have part 2 out now, W00T!! Truth being told, my images in this part were going to go into part 1. But then I had to do the images again because they were too small. Anyway, hope you like it!

Okay, you all probably hate me right now for stopping part 1 where I stopped it, but hey I have part 2 out now, W00T!! Truth being told, my images in this part were going to go into part 1. But then I had to do the images again because they were too small. Anyway, hope you like it! (For you the Magician said...") "'Hmph...I think I'll let this one slip. She'll keep her memories.'" "You were very lucky, it's not often the Magician lets people keep their memories." I didn't know what to say, I was so shocked. I was so glad I was going to be able to keep my memories. I would stay friends with Lilly and I'd be able to get to know Ryan as well. I really wanted to find out more about him, he really was quite the charmer I guess. "I'm so glad I get to keep my memories!" "I'm pretty glad too," Paul said, the cheerfulness coming back into his voice again "from what Lilly tells me you're a really nice girl. It would be a real shame to see all that go, not only that, to see Ryan and Lilly so upset. Not to mention-" "BIRD BOY!!" He was interrpted by a loud, distant yell. I jumped when I heard it. Paul looked casual as if he hadn't heard the yell. He then sighed "Oh, great..." I slowly stood up, my arms shook in fear. I then went to the door and opened it. Lilly came running down the hall. She glanced at me "I think his back!" she said not stopping to tell me what was going on. Who? Who was back? I ran after Lilly into the living room. We both stopped in front of the sliding door. Outside I could see a dot in the sky getting closer. Then I looked from the sky to see Ryan calmly walking up the veranda steps doing up two buttons on his shirt. He must have went flying around. He opened the door "Guess who found me..." He walked past me and Lilly and out of the living room. Did he notice me at all? "GET BACK HERE BIRD BOY!!" The voice shook the window panes a little. I felt the fear construte on my face "Who's that?" "That, Sam," Lilly answered not looking back at me "is someone who you don't want to mess around with." Then salsa music came on. I looked back. I felt my eyebrow rise. Paul was dancing. He didn't seem to notice my stare "Well, this is the time to celebrate! Plus, I really don't want to hear anymore yelling." "Turn that music off!" Lilly shouted. Paul ignored her and continued dancing. I could see what Lilly meant by starnge sense of humour and strange quirk. "BIRD BOY!" The yelling was coming closer and the dot in the sky was more clear. It looked like a person falling from the sky! "Yep, his back..." Lilly seemed so relaxed. What? Who was back? Then all of a sudden there was a huge boom and the house shook. I nearly lost my balance as the house shook violently. Lilly and Paul acted like they didn't seem to notice; in fact they seemed to keep perfect balance. Paul stopped dancing in the background. I looked to the veranda. There still crouching on the veranda was a boy around my age with jet black hair. He looked up with his gold eyes of anger. "Yep, his back, and his madder than ever" Lilly said a small smile on her face. "Hey, Dylan..."
(Well, I hope you all liked this edition of Forgotten Redemption. The next part should be out soon! Please comment if you can and if you have any questions please let me know! You guys all ROCK! Keep Siming and Creating!! ;))

Forgotten Redemption: Chp 3, part 2

Feb 15, 2009 by Warrayfinson
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    21 Comment(s) posted so far

    On Feb 16, 2009 Little Cloud wrote:

    You are a very mean person \:mad\:, and you know that, right? But I can't wait for more \:D \:\) \;\) \:P \:cool\:!!!

    On Feb 16, 2009 candy820 wrote:

    Awesome part. Waiting for the next part. 5.0 here

    On Feb 16, 2009 DiddakoiGirl wrote:

    I couldn't help grinning through all of this part \;\) You kept saying 'his', instead of 'he's' and it sounded like they were discussing her  brother's back....\:P But it was great, if a little short! \:D \:rah\:

    On Feb 16, 2009 jennnnnie02 wrote:

    Ah, I can't wait to see what Dylan does. You're amazingly talented!

    On Feb 16, 2009 aakerhjelm wrote:

    can't wait for the next part. \:\)

    On Feb 16, 2009 fionaivri wrote:

    Wow.

    On Feb 16, 2009 smiley00girl wrote:

    Great part! Cant wait for more! ( I know I always write this but it's true ;D)

    On Feb 17, 2009 zucchinideen wrote:

    AH! So great...hurry up and give me more! YAY!

    On Feb 17, 2009 Fikcija wrote:

    I still think you should make longer chapters even if they'd come less often then... I'm only saying this again because I'm not sure if you've read my last comment.

    On Feb 17, 2009 elvizog wrote:

    \:eek\: \;\)

    On Feb 17, 2009 lisa9999 wrote:

    This was just a tease! What does he look like. Hurry I want to knwo! LOL\:wub\:

    On Feb 18, 2009 ShawnaMarie2006 wrote:

    Good part, you just need to work on your gramar a little.  Can't wait to see what the bird man looks like though!
    ~Shawna Marie~

    On Feb 19, 2009 Rabold8 wrote:

    Hey bud!!! \:D This, like always, was a great story!  Your stories are always like soap operas, they always get right to the drama, and then end, and you can't wait for the next part! \:D \:wub\: I can't wait for the next chapter, I know that you have been really busy, but I hope that it is out soon. \:P Anyways, great story and I hope to hear from you soon.  Leave me a message sometime! \:wub\:

    On Feb 19, 2009 cep1247 wrote:

    Aww c'mon show us what he looks like! Haha great chapter!

    On Feb 20, 2009 tasha706 wrote:

    great uses of cc and story is wonderful
    can't wait until next chapter comes out
     

    On Mar 3, 2009 shady411 wrote:

    Cant wait for the next part.

    On Mar 13, 2009 Rabold8 wrote:

    \:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\: "BIRD BOY!"  I love that!  haha!  Great story!  Kind of like a lead up the final chapter I assume?  This was very good!  Moving on to the FINAL part! \:D \:wub\:

    On Mar 28, 2009 fabrizioammollo wrote:

    Nice job.

    On Apr 6, 2009 mpatton wrote:

    Great story.  I'm so glad I started reading it.

    On Apr 6, 2009 omik79 wrote:

    Nice! BIRD BOY! \:\) hehe...reading more! Thanks!

    On Apr 25, 2009 justvex wrote:

    great

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