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Mason Family Part 1
Published Feb 2, 2012


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Samzie2012

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My 1st ever Home All By Myself This Was The Greatest Day Of My Life

My 1st ever Home All By Myself This Was The Greatest Day Of My Life This was the first time ty had come to my house he was my maid and we just seemed to click and it was strange as some of the maids are gay. The Was the first date me and ty went on it was at mine and we was playing a video game don't know who won though haha we cuddled on the sofa for a bit OMG i just kissed Ty for the first time and we liked it and i thought he would not accept it I know we are going to be together forever. this was our 2nd date we went to a bar and had a drink and a chat to get to know eachother abit better i can't believe he actually agreed to stop over for the first time and we was not even that much of a item this was the first time me and ty slept with eachother as i thought it was time for us to try and have a baby so if we ever broke up we would have our kid and they would never come between us how quickly Ty has grown up last date we went on he was only a adult and now he is a elder think we will get some weird looks when we are together Ty chatting to me he is so talkative he always wants to talk to me this was the day i told him that he was going to be a dad he was so excited and happy for us both this is the 1st day i was pregnant with ty's baby only things can get better now God i am getting bigger and bigger everyday aww feeling our baby kick was such a good felling to him aww listening to our baby was such a good feeling to him Ty talking to out baby for the 1st time and it was not even born yet God can i get any bigger Yay we Have A Cute Baby Girl time to keep taking pictures of her growing up and our life together

TO BE CONTINUED.............

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#1HottiesheldonVIPFeb 3, 2012

Good start to the story did feel a little like it was rushed through but that could be the way you wanted it which isn't a bad thing. keep up the work,

#2xLyennerdFeb 3, 2012

You really could use some punctiation. However, it's a good start. And what Hottiesheldon said, I agree. You rushed a bit. But the story is good \:\).

#3Samzie2012Feb 3, 2012

Thank you for your comments i will be starting part 2 today and will make it longer and not as quick \:D

#4fruitopiaVIPFeb 3, 2012

Good start. \:D

#5starsky524Feb 3, 2012

Good start but with your next one maybe you could try slowing..........down.

#6Samzie2012Feb 3, 2012

Can you give me some i ideas please 

#7HottiesheldonVIPFeb 4, 2012

What you could do is try and think of a storyline that these characters could follow like maybe her husband pass away and she has to find new love or maybe she does something...but by adding more depth into the stories people gain more interest in reading your stories and follow on reading through out the series. \:\) \:\) but yeah thats all i can suggest \:\) good work

#8zitagoogJul 3, 2012

punctuation??

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