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Hey eveyone, great to be back!
Well here is my next story, The Haunter. I don't know if 'Haunter' is an actual word. Anway, I'd like to dedicate this story to littlecloud, she's one of the greatest people I have ever met on here. A big HUGE thank you to Henwen for making the house it totally ROCKS!
I hope you guys like it!
Read on...

Hey eveyone, great to be back!
Well here is my next story, The Haunter. I don't know if 'Haunter' is an actual word. Anway, I'd like to dedicate this story to littlecloud, she's one of the greatest people I have ever met on here. A big HUGE thank you to Henwen for making the house it totally ROCKS!
I hope you guys like it!
Read on... I had just arrive at my house. I think it was my sister, Ellen, and my doctor that came with me.
"Dr. Jackson, I'd like to thanks you for everything you have done."
"Hey, no problem."
With that I walked off into what was suppose to be my house. I need to see if I could remember anything... "So whats the deal doc, what's wrong with my sister?" Ellen asked.
Dr. Jackson sighed, he was going to have to explain all of this again. "Your sister has amoneisa. We found out when she woke up from her coma and asked who she was."
Ellen nodded. "And how did that happen?"
Sighing once again he replied "It was around ten-thrity at night when she was brought into the emergancy room. We were told she had been involved in a cars crash. She had a large cut running deep into her head and cracked her skull. "She was in a coma for two weeks. Then she woke up and didn't remember anything. They still haven't found out anything about the other car."
"Do you know where she was heading?" Ellen asked.
"We think she may have been heading out of town." Jackson replied.
"Odd, wonder why?" Ellen wondered looking off to the side. It was really hard remembering all this. I really don't remember this being my home. I went up the staircase to explore the rest of the house. The stairs seemed to creak under my feet. They made a strange sqeeky sound. I reached the top. I looked through every room up stairs, but nothing seemed familiar. I look to the end of the hallway. I opened the door at the end of the hallway.
"This must have been my room" I said to myself. I looked around the bright room. There was nothing much apart from the double bed, the closet in the corner and the bed tables with the slender lamps. My eye caught something in the corner of the room. I walked up to it. Was that a doll? I picked her off the carpet floor examining her. She seemed to bring back some memories. I remembered me as a child holding onto her.
I must have wanted to keep it before.
"Samantha!"
"Coming!" I replied to my sister's call. I walked down the stair to say goodbye to the Doctor. A taxi pulled up. Dr. Jackson waved goodbye before turning around and getting into the taxi. Whe the car was gone mysister turned to me. "I have to go, but if you need anything, you knwo who to call, I hope."
"Yeah. Thank you Ellen." I still wasn't quite sure if she was my sister.

 She hugged me. Feeling a little awkward, I hugged back. After a moment, she pulled back smiling and walked off down the street. I stared after her a few minutes. I felt really weird not remembering who she was. Was she really my sister? I turned back into the house. Later on that day, I noticed someone outside. By the looks of things it was a little girl. She had her back turned to the house and she stood frozen in place. Puting the book away I looked at her through the window. 'May be she is lost...' I thought. I walked outside. She still didn't turn around.
"Um, hello Are you alright?" By the time I reached her she turned around. I gasped out of shock at the sight. Were those her eyes? I felt sick in the stomach looking at them. She smiled up at me as if pleased she had scared me. "What's the matter ma'am? Is there something wrong?" Her voice was sickly sweet, it was like she didn't know she had colourless eyes. Not looked at her eyes I stared at the fringe of her raven coloured hair.
For some reason she seemed familar like she was from the past. "Ah, no" I quickly said. "Shouldn't you be at school?"
"No, school holidays, remember?" she answered back still smiling.
Why did she look familar? For some reason I remember her at this age a long time ago. Back to a time where I was the same age...
"I wish I could" I muttered. Without another word I turned around back into the house.
"I got my eyes on you..." I heard her say. That sent goosebumps up my neck. She sounded serious, dead serious... I checked two hours later and she was still there, staring at me with that smile. I turned away from the window hoping she would leave later. She did when I blinked...
It startle me. Was I talking to myself outside? Was she really there?
Maybe I got a much more worse bump on the head then I imagined. Night time came and I had just finished eatting dinner. As I walked down the hallway the phone ran. I picked it up "Hello?"
There was no reply on the other end, just a fuzzy, sound. Then the sound of heavy breathing rung into my ear.
"Um, hello?"
Still no reply. I hung the phone up. It rang again and I picked it up "Hello?"
That heavy breathing sound was on the other end. "Look, unless your going say anything, just-"
"Same old same old Sam..." I flinched at the voice on the other end. It was a rough, dry voice almost above a whisper. I think it was a female voice."W-Who is this?"
"Scared, are we Sam?"-she laughed an evil, dry laugh- "You should be..."
Then her voice changed "What's the matter ma'am?" It was the same voice as the little girl.
The other end hung up. I stood there frozen. An icy chill ran up and down my spine. Was that the little girl playing a joke on me? How did she get my number if it was her?
I hung the phone up. As I was about to walk upstairs something caught my eye in the mirror. I stood in front of the mirror. I screamed at the sight.That wasn't my reflection! Staring back at me was a mutated face. I felt my face.It didn't feel soft, it felt rough, dry and aged. I closed my eye tightly wanting that face to go away.
'That is what I have become...' the rough voice said in my head 'Because of you I became that..' I opened my eyes. My reflection stared back at me. I sighed in relief and relaxed. The voice in my head was gone too. What WAS going on? I was hearing and seeing things. Maybe I needed a bath to eaze my nerve. I walked up the steps. I turned to the right when I reached the top-
"Will you play with me?" I stopped dead in my tracks. I turned to the high pitched voice from the end of the hallway. All I saw was that doll. Her black glassy eyes stared at me. I sighed picking her up and putting her back in my room. Funny thing was, I don't remeber leaving her out in the hallway... I reached to turn the tap on. But then I stopped, my eyes widening. I leaned away from the bath tub. I screamed. How did she get in here?! "Play with me!" The voice, I think, came from the doll. The dolls lips were still and unmoving even though she talked.
I ran out of the bathroom I locked the bedroom door trying to catch my breath. What was going on? Was I going mad?! I looked up and screamed again. The doll was right there. How could it have moved from one place to another within only a few seconds? Impossible. So why did it I have this icy chill running up my spin? Was I really believeing all this?
"LEAVE ME ALONE!" I yelled at it. "Leave me alone!"
The dry voice laughed 'Why should she? She only wants to play. She was our favourite doll too, remember? We use to play with her and the others all the time. In fact, she was the last thing I saw before...' The voice trailed off and left. Fear taking over me I ran down the hallway. This was just too freaky to believe... I ran down the stairs. I had to get out of here! I turned the front doors knob...It was lock.... I tried again. How was it locked?! I patted my pockets for the key. Where was it? Don't tell me I dropped it outside by accident...
I looked around warily. What was going on? This was getting scarier and scarier by the moment. Just then I heard a scraping sound... I dared to go to it. It sounded like scraping against the window panes. I walked into the dining room but as soon as I entered it was gone...
Then a scrap came from the living room. I crept into there trying to be as quiet as possible... The scraping noise didn't stop. I looked at all the windows. I walked to them. I saw faint scratc marked on each pane. Something WAS scratching the windows...
The phone rang. I felt the fear pool in my stomach as I cautiously went over to answer it. "H-Hello?"
"Sis, how you going?"
I breathed out relieved it was my sister. "I'm doing...fine. Um, do you think you could come over?"
"Yeah sure! You sound worried, you sure your fine?"
"Y-Yeah, perfect in fact" I tried to raise my voice from worry but it didn't seem to work.
"Okay, I'll come around right now, see you then, bye!"
She hung up on the other end. I put the phone back I walked up the stairs to pack my thing. I was out of here. As I walked down the hallway I remembered something, a flash of an image and the voice in my head. The image was of me heading towards the exit of Crystal Valley and the voice in my ead was saying 'Gotta get out of here before the find out who did it...'
I stopped dead in my tracks. Before they found out what? I turned head towards the paintings. I gasped... The pictures, they...they had changed! The colours and the forms had changed into...stages? Stages of a moment in time. Seeing each picture I felt all my fear build up in my system... ............. .... ...... ..... .......... There was a knock at the door.... THE END
Man, even I'm freaked out by that one. Worst thing is, it's night time and there is a scratching noise in the roof...It's defiantly something you don't want to read at night. Sorry if there are any spelling mistakes I didn't see.
So, tell me what you guys think! I love to hear your comments, they really make my day. If you guys have any questions, let me know and I'll get back to you.
Thanks for reading my story and I hope you enjoyed it! You guys ROCK!
Keep Siming and Creating!!;)
-Warrayfinson.

The Haunter

Sep 13, 2008 by Warrayfinson
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    72 Comment(s) posted so far

    On Sep 13, 2008 qasert wrote:

    \:cool\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 wwechick38 wrote:

    this was AWESOME!
    i was at the edge of my seat the whole time \:D \:\) \:rah\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 angelvsdevil91 wrote:

    THAT WAS AWESOME!\:D \:D \:D
    I cannot wait for the next part \:D
    keep them coming \:D

    On Sep 13, 2008 clairepitts1994 wrote:

    AWSUM! story, i like your style of writing, very unique. Can't wait for more!\:D \:rah\: 5.0!!

    On Sep 13, 2008 muggelx1 wrote:

    very good story\:rah\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 Deedee09 wrote:

    hey i swere that little girl is off a movie. I cant remmber the name but its were this women jumps off a cliff to safe her daughter who has somthing inside her, the women dies and the girl lives but the evil spirit kkeeps comming back.
    It might not be based on that but oh well.
    great story...\:D

    On Sep 13, 2008 Deedee09 wrote:

    -forgot to rate-lol

    On Sep 13, 2008 Jaws3 wrote:

    Good. REALLY good.\:\) Oh, what the heck! It's down right AWESOME!!!!!!!\:D

    On Sep 13, 2008 candy820 wrote:

    Awesome story just wish it wasn't 4:00am here right now.\:D \:D 5.0 here\:D

    On Sep 13, 2008 Karie wrote:

    Well...I'm hooked!! It's really scary! I can't wait to read what is coming up next! Will you let me know when the next chapter is out please? You are doing a great job with your story..I think I even jumped a few times (psycho kitties running through my house right now and making a lot of noise!) That and it's like 2 a.m. and perfect time for reading a ghost/spooky story! Again, keep up the good work, and congratulations on the front page!\:rah\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 Etnik13 wrote:

    That girl in the painting reminds me of Samara. It was seriously awesome. The best one I have read so far. Please let me know when the next part is on, if there is gonna be one.

    On Sep 13, 2008 shelllharn wrote:

    i absolutley loved your story it was great welll done hun keep up the great work \:rah\: \:rah\: read mine plz if u get a chance thanx and comment

    On Sep 13, 2008 narniana wrote:

    Cool story!!Can;t wait till next part!!\:D \;\)

    On Sep 13, 2008 andi and grim wrote:

    Awesome! I love it, 5.0!\:wub\: \:rah\: \:wub\: Keep writeing!

    On Sep 13, 2008 lilith29 wrote:

    creepy

    On Sep 13, 2008 tonya99rn wrote:

    \:D Glad to see your block has lifted!\;\) Great story!

    On Sep 13, 2008 Alathiel wrote:

    Very creepy, creepier than I thought possible with the sims. Fabulous job

    On Sep 13, 2008 daniel_rs_angel wrote:

    OMG this story is freakin amazing! \:D
    can't wait for the next part!!
    5.0

    On Sep 13, 2008 jarlet wrote:

    Great,awesome and creepy!I enjoyed it like a freaking movie and even better because with sims...\:wub\: \:eek\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 mihimarugt wrote:

    nice story loved it so much\:wub\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 wrote:

    That was actually AWESOME!

    Are you gna make more? PLEASE MAKE MORE!

    This is like the best story ever! i was actually so scared by the end of it and its DAYLIGHT!!

    Actually fantastic! 5.0!

    On Sep 13, 2008 wickedgoddess_athena711 wrote:

    I loved it! It was really freaky. I loved the moving paintings. Did the little girl die because of the accident? I also love the Aerith and Zack paintings \:wub\: I"d love to read more of your sotires, if you have the time, can you check out my stories as well? \;\)

    On Sep 13, 2008 simsnina wrote:

    Awesomeness MUCH

    Me likey!!

    Well Done!

    Simsnina\:wub\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 Fikcija wrote:

    Amazing! You are one of my favorite sim-writers. \:rah\: 5.0

    On Sep 13, 2008 bosnombehar wrote:

    Omg, I'm just relieved that it wasn't at night when I read this! \:confused\: You totally freaked the sh- out of me, seriously! \:\) Thanks, the story was excellent!

    On Sep 13, 2008 MissJay wrote:

    Whoa....I'm gald I read this in the daytime! LOL I didn't know the sims could be so darn scarry!

    On Sep 13, 2008 Scwt wrote:

    Ooh...Creepy\:\( I like It.
    P.S Are you doing more of the"On the Run" serirs?

    On Sep 13, 2008 Rabold8 wrote:

    \:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\: Man! That was scary! You even had me a little nervous, and it is 10:30 in the morning! \:eek\: Great story though, I love the make-up on the zombie, it is so detailed! \:D Great job Warrayfinson, you are a very talented writer! \:D

    On Sep 13, 2008 wrote:

    Nice story, like it a lot\:D \:D \:D

    On Sep 13, 2008 cutedazy wrote:

    Awesome!!

    On Sep 13, 2008 wrote:

    Love it! Can't wait until next parts come!\:wub\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 Thera_M wrote:

    Very good one and I m really quite freaked \:\) Ill be glad to read next part!

    On Sep 13, 2008 plyangel456 wrote:

    That was amazing! I was even freaked out myself. I wonder what will happen next! -plyangel456- \:D

    On Sep 13, 2008 wrote:

    \:rah\: Very spooky but also cool i didn't want o stop!

    On Sep 13, 2008 AnasiaAnais1 wrote:

    I really liked the story, it was freaky, it inspired me to create one of my own, Thanx!\:D

    On Sep 13, 2008 Anastars wrote:

    Cool story!\:rah\: That was actually awesome!

    On Sep 13, 2008 lisa9999 wrote:

    Fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I love theses types of stories!\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 islandchild97 wrote:

    AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH\:eek\: !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! omg I LOVE IT!!!\:D \:rah\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 bettybetty13 wrote:

    Awesome story! Can't wait for more!

    On Sep 13, 2008 DevlishDoll91 wrote:

    OMG YOU ROCK! \:rah\:
    It's amazing to know how creative your mind is! \:D
    And yes it is night time here and i am freaked out! \:wacko\:
    If i have nightmares im sooo blaming you!\:P

    On Sep 13, 2008 stephanie1225 wrote:

    oh that was scary but really really good i love your stories \:D

    On Sep 13, 2008 kisekiai wrote:

    wow..that WAS creepy/scary but I want more. Please continue

    On Sep 13, 2008 Berries&Cream wrote:

    Whoa!!! SCARY!!!!\:eek\: People should make more stories like this one! Can't wait to read the next part! 5.0!!\:rah\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 Lisa The GoodOl wrote:

    This ROCKS!!! very scary \:eek\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 wrote:

    Dude i love the story you have a awesome talent at this...i was moving around the entire time trying not to get scared...good job you should deffinately make more!!!\:D \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Sep 13, 2008 danzar25 wrote:

    Wow that was really good!!! I really was impressed with the pictures and story plot at the end\:D

    On Sep 14, 2008 QG wrote:

    \:confused\: you could have mentioned not reading it at night before.. like i don't know in the beginning? XD it's like midnight here..... luckily i don't scare easy\:rah\:

    but to be on the save side i'm taking my teddy to bed...
    good job!

    On Sep 14, 2008 skyblue7377 wrote:

    I love scary sims stories and you have really done a great job. You have the true makings of a great wrighter. Thank you so very much for sharing with us. I can't wait to read more

    On Sep 14, 2008 seksyhstefh wrote:

    wow that was an awesome story! i think this is the first scary sim story i have read and it was awesome , keep doing more please!\:rah\:

    On Sep 14, 2008 .:love_angel:. wrote:

    cool

    On Sep 14, 2008 lyndsyy wrote:

    \:\) festive

    On Sep 14, 2008 butteryy wrote:

    \:eek\: This story was really, really, REALLY amazing. Probably the best I've read by you so far. I think I'll be having nightmares tonight, it was so scary. Keep up the great work and I'm looking forward to the next part (althought I'll probably read that one when its still light outside \:P )

    On Sep 14, 2008 zul_94 wrote:

    I agree with seksyhstefh! This is the first ever horror story that I found worthwhile reading! Great job!\:rah\:

    On Sep 14, 2008 Xanthia_love wrote:

    ohh! ur very good at writing horror stories ! thumbs up !!\:rah\:

    On Sep 14, 2008 Livdude wrote:

    Tres bien, (in French, very good) your stories are full of twists and truns, especially the horror ones!\:cool\: \:P \:D

    On Sep 14, 2008 hiedibear75 wrote:

    What a creepy little girl! \:eek\: The doll and the ghost were great too. \:ph34r\: Great job again as always! \:rah\: 5.0 from me. \:cool\:

    On Sep 14, 2008 wrote:

    You kept going into different scary things instead of like one big, mysterious story. But they were really awesome just the same! 1 question, so was Samantha like a ghost or what?\:rah\:

    On Sep 14, 2008 ScoobySnax wrote:

    cool story, can't wait for the next part... keep writing. \:D

    On Sep 15, 2008 Little Cloud wrote:

    OH MY GOD!!!!!!!! This was great!!!! I was reading this in school, and I think I screamed out loud, because everyone was looking at me like I was mental, so I just told them that I was reading a scary story. Anyway, I loved it!!! I totally has me freaked out!!!! I also loved the Arieth (oops I think I spelled that wrong) and Zach pictures!!! There is this one of Kadaj that I really want, but for some reason, my computer won't downlous stuff from here. Maybe I'm doing something wrong... Anyway, a total 5.0!!!

    On Sep 15, 2008 Little Cloud wrote:

    \:rah\: \:wub\: \:D

    On Sep 15, 2008 Little Cloud wrote:

    P.S. Thank you for dedicating this to me. I am having some social/friend problems right now, so you are really helping!!!!!

    On Sep 16, 2008 spicylove wrote:

    \:wub\: \:rah\:

    On Sep 16, 2008 lilashotstuff wrote:

    woah. seriously spooked man! me and me sis were readin this, and we had 2 keep coverin r faces so we weren't startled by the next pic...\:eek\: amazin story tho!\:P

    On Sep 16, 2008 etherealattic wrote:

    Good story \:\) It was creepy, my little sister thought the little girl was scary. She reminds me of my sister. Loved the story, please make more.

    On Sep 17, 2008 charray wrote:

    Great story. Thanks \:\) \:\)

    On Sep 21, 2008 Ultra-Violet wrote:

    WOW that was great and scary at the same time. I want to see what happens next. Your very talented, maybe you should become a writer some day.\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Sep 21, 2008 wrote:

    Ooooooh very veryyyy goood!!!\:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Sep 25, 2008 kazakh wrote:

    Great story! \:rah\: \:rah\: \:rah\:

    On Oct 1, 2008 wrote:

    TEEHEE she got scared! ^__^ If i was her, and the doll or the girl asked me to play, i would... why the hell not? \:\) lol! There's no need to be scared of dying, just think, if u die, then all of that will go away. ^__^ No more creepy little demon child and her doll! \:\)

    On Oct 4, 2008 imdadsbugg wrote:

    i was about to go to bed but i decided to read this first...im scared to turn out the lights!

    On Jun 26, 2009 willy336 wrote:

    LOVE THIS STORY\:D
    It sends chills down my spine

    On Dec 8, 2009 xloroflora wrote:

    i love it \:wub\:

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