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This is my second story.
I would appretiate some comments on how to improve my story's.
Thank you and enjoy!
PS- Sorry its so short!
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5 Comment(s) posted so far
#1 On Mar 29, 2011 TinaSteele wrote:
Nice Start
I cant wait to read more about it!
#2 On Mar 29, 2011 -kalisa- wrote:
It was a nice start!
#3 On Apr 3, 2011 lalaya wrote:
well itvcould be longer and more deleted i thin the both frwinds should hook up
#4 On Apr 8, 2011 kolapants wrote:
it's more info than story...
#5 On Apr 22, 2011 ilyxoxovee wrote:
Good start. I wish it could have been longer though. (: but still, great!