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hello!!!
ok this is a different approach to storywirting we have two narrators, Jessica and Melody and they have to rewrite an old story in a modern way for their summer project.
so when u see j: it means Jessica is talking and M: its melody (just i case u get confused!)
right maybe i should start the story....
ok this is a different approach to storywirting we have two narrators, Jessica and Melody and they have to rewrite an old story in a modern way for their summer project.
so when u see j: it means Jessica is talking and M: its melody (just i case u get confused!)
right maybe i should start the story.... M: Once upon a time there was a unpopular and ugly girl named Cinderella.
J: but she had a heart of gold and a personality to match.
M: she was madly in love with many boys at school but was to scared to talk to them.
J:she had a part-time job as a cleaner at.....EVIL STEPMOTHERS!
M:a highly successful office buliding that deals with travel insurance.
J:....0__o.....travel insurance??? M: (feeling very uncomfortable) moving on! at school there were these amazingly beautiful, popular sisters...
J: who were nicknamed the ugly sisters because of their ugly personality
see what i did there....see what i..
M: ¬_¬
J: nevermind..
M: they were very mean to cinderella because they were in love with prince charming.
J: and because they were jealous of cinderellas heart of gold.
M: but mostly because they were in love with prince charming. M: how ugly you are! one of the ugly sisters declared one day, cinderella looked up smiling and said.
J:Have you looked in the mirror lately, cus someone as tall as a toliet plunger couldnt possibly..
M: Woah woah woah, cinderella is supposed to be sickly sweet and beautiful in the heart
J: :p but that sucks, cinderella should be strong willed and ...
M: BEAUTIFUL IN THE HEART!
J: o___0....urgh fine........you suck.
M: anyway "oh my!" said cinderella,"your in a foul mood today"
J: WHAT noone in the 21st century speaks like that!
M: (ignoring her sister) of course im in a foul mood i have to look at your ugly face all day i wonder if your mother was just as ugly, the ugly sister shouted
J; BRINNNNG went the bell it was end of school (sorry melody but we have to move the story on....) M: cinderella cleaned her best at work, "i wont let those comments put me down" she boldly said to herself.
J: her supervisor buttons came up to her, " ermmm..i was wondering if you would come to the prom with me, and OH! i can pick you up."
"oh no that would hurt your back if you picked me up" she said worryingly but not realising what a complete twit she was!
"nevermind maybe i'll see you there" buttons said, highly annoyied at his own coweredlyness.
M: hmmm maybe it would be nice to go to the prom" cind said to herself i wonder if the boss will let me go, she told her boss everything and the boss told her if she showed her cinds dress and cleaned everything then she colud go, so cinds went off to make her dress.
J: because she is very creative.
M: as she was making the dress. J: SHE WAS ATTACKED BY A FLESH EATING ZOMBIE! she ran into the kitchen as it tore away at her....
M: WOAH! tone it down this is a PG13, and since when were there flesh eating zombies in cinderella anyway.
J: but this story sucks, it needs drama, violence, lots of bloodshed mwhahahaaa
M: NO
J: but i got great custom content for it
M: no cus its gross and you need help. (i'm puting an x on this picture, dont look sane people dont look!)
J: NOOOOOOOO
(as they fight over the pen the x becomes more of a squiggle)
M: (finally getting the pen back) AS..SHE...WAS...MAKING...THE...DRESS!
she stumbled upon two wands
J: (sulking) which she thought was two blunt needles because she sucks and is an utter dimwit who carelessly puts them in her workbag. M: the day after and cinderella had spent all night making her dress and skipped all the way to work.
J: she cleaned and cleaned until it was spotless even the boss was pleased.
M:night fell quickly as she sipped her cup of tea "cinderella please show me your dress" the boss asked.
J: "my,my what an amazing dress!" the boss said sipping her coffee "come closer so i can see better!"
M: i made it myself cinderella said sheeply
J: is sheeply even a word...
M: it is now! "wow maybe i should..oops" the boss said as she threw the coffee over cinderella, "that dress is awful you can't go to the prom."
J: and look at the mess, you shall not go as punishment." mwhahaha the boss said leaving cinerella all on her own in a puddle of coffee
M: for the first time ever cinderella cryied, and she cryied about everything, her looks, the awful things people said to her, her poor mother who had been aducted by aliens
J: (holding a grudge) i'm not allowed zombies but aliens are fine?
M: (again ignorning her sister) as the tear ran down her cheek the wands started to glow. M; and BANG! two fairy twins appeared
J: Twins?
M: well seen as were writing the story we may as well be in it!
J: fine ...whatever...
M: who are you cinderella asked.
J: (putting on a funny voice) we are your fairy godmothers so lets get you to the prom!
M: so you can meet prince charming and fall in love....
J: :P (as cinderella) could you make this any cheesyier
M: dont underestamate me... ok bucket,mop and broom, melody says clean up this room!!! the most talented,gorgous blonde fairy commanded and the room cleaned itself.
J: took you ages to think of that rythme didnt you?
M: XD
J: ill humour you for now, ok melody lets fix this mess you take the coffee and i'll fix the dress! and suddenly the dress became beautiful!!
M: M: oh! all this so that you can meet Prince Charming, he's dreamy
J: he's romantic
M: he's good looking
J: but slightly emo
and he's going to fall for you after we put you through
M: EXTREME MAKEOVER - FAIRYTAIL EDITION!
first up its cinderella she maybe beautiful on the inside but man is she U.G.L.Y not even the most unpopular boy would wanna go out with her looking like this...
J: (pretending to be cinderella) i'm standing right next to you
M: (in her own world...) but were going to change all that. M: ok cinderella what were going to do to you is:
dye your hair bleach blonde
J:apply make-up
M: cut your hair
J: teeth witener
M: and apply a shed load of clearasil
J: and after alot of argueing and lots of time the new cinderella appeared.
M: this is your before and after cinderella the highly amazing fairy melody said, once upon a time people hated your looks, you were ugly, but now your beautiful personality matches your looks
J:oh please THIS STORY SUCKS!
M: well i dont think it is, not everybody likes battles of life and death and man eating Zombies, besides you need help.
J: stop saying that people will actually believe you
M: your right you..
J: can i have that in writing
M: ¬_¬ let me finish, you rright your just an wannabe escaped mental patient
J: THAT DOESNT MAKE SENSE!!! M: anyway back to the story
J: (taking the notebook from Melody) no lets not go back to the story, it sucks, lets write a new one thats more intresting and less soppy
M: (grabbing the notebook back) stop it! don't give up to easily
J: (knowing she's not going to win this argument) fine.
M: as cinderella stood there in a daze
J:in front of the mirror
M; the two faires told her that her make-over would only last till midnight, "oh but how will i get there" cind asked
J:how will she get there??
M:oh why your ride is waiting for you outside" the highly fantasticly beautiful fairy said, "why what is it?"
J: A RED FERRARI
M: ¬_¬
J: what its modern! its stylish and its cool! J: after arriving in her amazing ferrari she made her entrance everyone starred at her. highly uncomfortable...
M: the ugly sisters walked up to her, "excuse me, did you not see the sign, Barbie dolls arent allowed here" one of them sniggered
J:really? i thought that was a height restriction sign cinderella said sarcasticly as she coldly barged past them.
M: that was a good comeback
J: thank you
M: "hey would you like to dance" prince charming asked cinds "yes" she replied and they danced and danced, falling deeply in love with each other.
J: pfffftttt :P now can we write a new story...
M: NO..."what is your name?" prince charming asked her she giggled,"do you not recgonise me? its me cin..." she was cut off by her alarm on her phone, it was midnight she cried whilst she ran out of the door changing back to ugly cinderella...
J: when she got home she realised she was missing a earring
M:no! it was her shoe
J:noone loses a shoe nowadays unless your a complete idiot
M: shut up its her shoe! (grabbing the pen and notebook) the prince tryied the shoe on everygirl at school...but no cinderella
J: because she had locked herself away in her room because she had the flu.
M: nooo
J: (huff) because she was an utter moron who didnt realise her was looking for her....
M: ....it'll do.... J: however one night the fairies appeared again and told her to go to prince charming house and tell him the truth, she agreed if the faires would go with her.
M: "prince charming!" cinderella cried out, he opened the window as she she told him everything, he looked at her, came outside his house and looked deep into her eyes...
J: and laughed, "seriously you could never be as beautiful as the girl i love!" he said.
M: O__0 what... fine if he's gunna be a bad guy then i shall write..(grabbing the pen) but you, you are beautiful the prince said as he started flirting with the blonde fantastic fairy.
J: (writing with her own pen) ha! in such deep distraught she was struck down by freak lighting!!!
M: noooooooooo
J: in a freak pool ladder accident???
M: nooooooo
J: sorry but this story went downhill the moment you said i couldn't have zombies!!
M: again with the zombies.... The End.
no seriously it really is! they never finished it, they argued and threw it out of the window into some mud, and then it bounced off and got chewing gum stuck to it and then onto the dog.....and then it was never seen again!!!
................
M:soo the moral of the story is...
J:prince charming sucks! find a guy who likes you and not your looks
M: but take care of your looks cus it'll be soooo much easyier to find a guy
J: NOW THATS JUST STUPID!
..........the end.......................
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15 Comment(s) posted so far
On Jul 25, 2009 Midnight222 wrote:
LMAO ..... fantastic read ..... I love a good comedy and this fit the bill perfectly .... Thanks!!
On Jul 25, 2009 kanzen wrote:
dude...zombies, violence and bloodshed is what we've been waiting for XD (me at least)
On Jul 25, 2009 Bubbablue12 wrote:
This was an awesome read! I really loved it.
On Jul 25, 2009 fabrizioammollo wrote:
I love the argument between Melody and Jessica! LO!!!L The story is so funny and nipping!
On Jul 26, 2009 Chuck66 wrote:
lol cute story
On Jul 29, 2009 urm0m wrote:
That made me lol
On Aug 2, 2009 jennnnnie02 wrote:
Hahaha, this was hilarious. A little weird, but definitely amusing. You should write another.(:
On Aug 24, 2009 Simfanatic wrote:
LOL
u guys are sooooo funny
On Sep 3, 2009 madea wrote:
This was very funny, good job. Needed an good laugh.
On Sep 5, 2009 Author_is_me wrote:
lolz. very funny, made me lol and i remembered the same argument my best friend and i had had. ah good times....
On Oct 31, 2009 Neko Sims wrote:
Love the screenshot!
But screenshot #6 was like wow! LOL
On Nov 24, 2009 Simfanatic wrote:
OMG THAT WAS SOOOOO FUNNY I LUV THE ZOMBIE PART
On Dec 4, 2009 rocknRev4Christ wrote:
Now THAT was entertaining! I couldn't stop laughing while reading! Good read.
On Jan 14, 2010 kjw19 wrote:
really really amazing version of cinderella
i loved how they were always arguing and the story kept changing style i say congrats 
On Jan 3, 2012 Dazzersim wrote:
Awesome........................... i luvvv it... <3