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Hurricane
Chapter 1, «Bad Impressions»


I want to apologize for such a short chapter, but I considered this over and over and I got to the conclusion that this is more like an introduction (although it doesn't reveal that much) and I REALLY promise that the next one will be bigger!

Er, just one last thing... As I don't speak English by nature, I apologize (again) for any mistake that would eventually come up through out the story. I'm trying the best I can to make this at least readable. Now yes, I'm going to shut up.

Either way, enjoy!

Hurricane
Chapter 1, «Bad Impressions»


I want to apologize for such a short chapter, but I considered this over and over and I got to the conclusion that this is more like an introduction (although it doesn't reveal that much) and I REALLY promise that the next one will be bigger!

Er, just one last thing... As I don't speak English by nature, I apologize (again) for any mistake that would eventually come up through out the story. I'm trying the best I can to make this at least readable. Now yes, I'm going to shut up.

Either way, enjoy! A tree house, seriously?, I asked myself upon seeing the pile of old wooden planks which rose unto the sky. This is so not what the real estate agent said it would be. Well, it will have to do. At least I'm safe here.

With two bags on each arm, I went up the several hauls of stairs, already cursing its extension. I put them down, removing from the jeans pocket the keys that were once given to me. I noticed I was shivering, making me feel stupid when faced with this reaction. It's just a house, for God's sake... Hesitant, I inserted the key into the rusty lock and opened the door. I never regretted a decision as soon as it happened at that precise moment. You just got to be kiddin' me...

The smell of humidity instantly crossed my olfactory field, foisting me an expression of disdain along with the old and rusty aspect of the few furniture that featured in a single room. Nor I dared to enter the bathroom. Basically everything was falling rotten. But on second thought, it wasn't that bad. I could always make some improvements to turn the house into a space more pleasant and more... mine. I added a shopping trip to the mental tasks list. The bed, despite the bad aspect, invited to a few good hours of sleep. Following its seductive whisper, I sat in the same, receiving in exchange some springs creaking and musty smell. A nap wouldn't hurt anyone. The new city could wait. For now.

Hurricane - Ch.1

Mar 29, 2012 by Catiarp
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    10 Comment(s) posted so far

    #1 On Mar 29, 2012 starsky524 wrote:

    Your pictures are really good! I couldn't find any mistakes and I'm actually really picky when it comes to stories so I think yours was really good! 4 stars (because it's short)

    #2 On Mar 30, 2012 spladoum wrote:

    Heh heh, stinky house \:D  I've been there more times than I care to admit ... and bad smells definitely make a place feel ominous!

    #3 On Mar 30, 2012 torija0709 wrote:

    Very good screenshots! \:rah\:

    #4 On Mar 31, 2012 Mangio wrote:

    Intriguing \:wub\: And your english is fine, no need to worry. Except i worry about the house and girl...

    #5 On Mar 31, 2012 annabel_lee wrote:

    Good job! I can't wait for the next chapter..

    #6 On Mar 31, 2012 fabrizioammollo wrote:

    Fascinating introduction!

    #7 On May 10, 2012 Impellent wrote:

    \:wub\:
    SWEET MOTHER OF GOD, AM EXCITED FOR THE NEXT EPISODE. GOOD STORY

    #8 On Jun 5, 2012 KatherineLady09 wrote:

    Very lovely pictures, can't wait for the next part

    #9 On Jun 25, 2012 opel5 wrote:

    Great introduction and nice pictures, I'm going to read further \;\)

    #10 On Jul 8, 2012 Kuwaitis wrote:

    What a great introduction nd Shots Keep the good work on. \:wub\:

     
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